for The Hope of the Senju Clan1/21/2020 c14 SLay KinG
I hate how people like to make it seem like shikamaru can't be tricked or lied to or fooled ... his a tactical shinobi not a fucking Albert Einstein ... winning against someone like Temari who was over confident or Hidan who was an idiot does not make him some type of genius... y'all make it seem like shikamaru would win against someone like Itachi...kisame...lee...sasuke... neiji... dude shikamaru wins by making sure a fight plays out the way he wants it... if it does not he won't win... this whole fight shikamaru has been playing to narutos tempo there's no way he would just pull a fast one like that
I hate how people like to make it seem like shikamaru can't be tricked or lied to or fooled ... his a tactical shinobi not a fucking Albert Einstein ... winning against someone like Temari who was over confident or Hidan who was an idiot does not make him some type of genius... y'all make it seem like shikamaru would win against someone like Itachi...kisame...lee...sasuke... neiji... dude shikamaru wins by making sure a fight plays out the way he wants it... if it does not he won't win... this whole fight shikamaru has been playing to narutos tempo there's no way he would just pull a fast one like that
1/20/2020 c8 
3Kitsune Obsessed Freak
Let me know if and when you get a beta to fix this. It's not something I want to read while the grammar is this bad
3Kitsune Obsessed FreakLet me know if and when you get a beta to fix this. It's not something I want to read while the grammar is this bad
1/20/2020 c19 SLay KinG
how do you just leave Karin like that ? come on man Kushina is alive...u could have that so much with those two in your story you do knw it's really dumb to shout out the name of your attack ...coz all it does is give the people a heads start to defend against it...it's like an undercover officer driving a police car at the person his investigating it's just obvious you made orochimaru way to op against naruto... bathing he did ... worked even thou he had the element of surprise
how do you just leave Karin like that ? come on man Kushina is alive...u could have that so much with those two in your story you do knw it's really dumb to shout out the name of your attack ...coz all it does is give the people a heads start to defend against it...it's like an undercover officer driving a police car at the person his investigating it's just obvious you made orochimaru way to op against naruto... bathing he did ... worked even thou he had the element of surprise
1/20/2020 c14 SLay KinG
I hate how people like to make it seem like shikamaru can't be tricked or lied to or fooled ... his a tactical shinobi not a fucking Albert Einstein ... winning against someone like Temari who was over confident or Hidan who was an idiot does not make him some type of genius... y'all make it seem like shikamaru would win against someone like Itachi...kisame...lee...sasuke... neiji... dude shikamaru wins by making sure a fight plays out the way he wants it... if it does not he won't win... this whole fight shikamaru has been playing to narutos tempo there's no way he would just pull a fast one like that
I hate how people like to make it seem like shikamaru can't be tricked or lied to or fooled ... his a tactical shinobi not a fucking Albert Einstein ... winning against someone like Temari who was over confident or Hidan who was an idiot does not make him some type of genius... y'all make it seem like shikamaru would win against someone like Itachi...kisame...lee...sasuke... neiji... dude shikamaru wins by making sure a fight plays out the way he wants it... if it does not he won't win... this whole fight shikamaru has been playing to narutos tempo there's no way he would just pull a fast one like that
1/19/2020 c7 Kitsune Obsessed Freak
Please get a beta to go Through the rest of this story. I'm having trouble wanting to read it even though it's got a decent plot and great idea behind it.
Please get a beta to go Through the rest of this story. I'm having trouble wanting to read it even though it's got a decent plot and great idea behind it.
1/19/2020 c7 Kitsune Obsessed Freak
Quick question... Has anyone ever taught you real Japanese romanji before? Because you really need to work on it
Quick question... Has anyone ever taught you real Japanese romanji before? Because you really need to work on it
1/19/2020 c6 Kitsune Obsessed Freak
I'm pretty sure the name you should have used is Tatsuo. Not the random crap I see written here
I'm pretty sure the name you should have used is Tatsuo. Not the random crap I see written here
1/19/2020 c6 Kitsune Obsessed Freak
You obviously have no clue how to write japanese names in English and your grammar is bloody terrible. I hope it gets better soon
You obviously have no clue how to write japanese names in English and your grammar is bloody terrible. I hope it gets better soon
1/19/2020 c5 Kitsune Obsessed Freak
Also it's Shuriken. And plural for senbon and kunai is senbon and kunai
Also it's Shuriken. And plural for senbon and kunai is senbon and kunai
1/19/2020 c5 Kitsune Obsessed Freak
Omfg what happened to your grammar suddenly? It's so bad this chapter that I was tempted to just stop reading it, but then I remembered the last few and figured I should wait and see
Omfg what happened to your grammar suddenly? It's so bad this chapter that I was tempted to just stop reading it, but then I remembered the last few and figured I should wait and see
1/19/2020 c3 Kitsune Obsessed Freak
Okay, I'm just going to say that when you called the kyuubi the most "fearful" that means the fox is scared of something. Not that it's something to be scared of. That would be "frightening"
Okay, I'm just going to say that when you called the kyuubi the most "fearful" that means the fox is scared of something. Not that it's something to be scared of. That would be "frightening"
1/19/2020 c3 Kitsune Obsessed Freak
Kushina was the last jinchuriki for the kyuubi in cannon. What was up with it this time? Just roaming around?
Kushina was the last jinchuriki for the kyuubi in cannon. What was up with it this time? Just roaming around?
1/15/2020 c41 Guest
The grammar is bad at first but you did a great job of improving later on.
Good job :)
The grammar is bad at first but you did a great job of improving later on.
Good job :)
1/15/2020 c41 Guest
This best Senju Naruto story in my opinon, one that is long, does not feel heavily rushed like alot of similar stories feel and is really enjoyable to read with alot of funny and entertaining moments.
You should continue the story from where it left of. It would really be a shame to see it permanently end after 41 long chapters.
This best Senju Naruto story in my opinon, one that is long, does not feel heavily rushed like alot of similar stories feel and is really enjoyable to read with alot of funny and entertaining moments.
You should continue the story from where it left of. It would really be a shame to see it permanently end after 41 long chapters.