for The Hope of the Senju Clan1/9/2024 c35 ItzJoe
you actually had them give in to the council? all that blowing up in anger just to accept it like that? im glad you stopped writing because your terrible at it
you actually had them give in to the council? all that blowing up in anger just to accept it like that? im glad you stopped writing because your terrible at it
1/9/2024 c32 ItzJoe
not to mention you've turned naruto into a complete dunce, you under-utilise what you've given him, you have him having all these girls chasing him yet he does nothing to recognise it, you said he was going to CRUSH neji, yet he did anything but that, i can see why you stopped writing as you are terrible, and from reading others comments giving you advice on how to better your writing style that you clearly ignore, you an idiot plain and simple
not to mention you've turned naruto into a complete dunce, you under-utilise what you've given him, you have him having all these girls chasing him yet he does nothing to recognise it, you said he was going to CRUSH neji, yet he did anything but that, i can see why you stopped writing as you are terrible, and from reading others comments giving you advice on how to better your writing style that you clearly ignore, you an idiot plain and simple
1/9/2024 c31 ItzJoe
fuck me do you drag out your chapters, constantly over-explaining things that dont even need explaining, not to mention you stick to one scene too much, there is a reason books and tv shows etc change back and forth between scenes, it keeps it from getting boring, which this story has now become
fuck me do you drag out your chapters, constantly over-explaining things that dont even need explaining, not to mention you stick to one scene too much, there is a reason books and tv shows etc change back and forth between scenes, it keeps it from getting boring, which this story has now become
1/9/2024 c26 ItzJoe
i dont know if you read these or not still but when a kage greets another kage they dont use the sama honorific they use dono, as sama implies that the other kage are their superior which isnt the case
i dont know if you read these or not still but when a kage greets another kage they dont use the sama honorific they use dono, as sama implies that the other kage are their superior which isnt the case
12/20/2023 c16 Jakulo
Man your writing s soo bland, i know that you're not a english speaker mainly so i got no problem with your patchy dialogues but atleast make effort on making the characters have personality instead of just repeating the same shit over again make them nore human man
Man your writing s soo bland, i know that you're not a english speaker mainly so i got no problem with your patchy dialogues but atleast make effort on making the characters have personality instead of just repeating the same shit over again make them nore human man
11/2/2023 c41 Iris paudel
My friend, the albumn does not come when i search "Hope of the Senju Clan Larkin 2727". could you please just make another story with the images or you could type out the link or you can paste it in plain text by right clicking with the mouse. but please do make the albumn for the image clearer as i cant find it
My friend, the albumn does not come when i search "Hope of the Senju Clan Larkin 2727". could you please just make another story with the images or you could type out the link or you can paste it in plain text by right clicking with the mouse. but please do make the albumn for the image clearer as i cant find it
11/1/2023 c39 
1Ninetailedblackdragon
I really like this story so far! Super good and well written! Cant wait to see what happens next!
1NinetailedblackdragonI really like this story so far! Super good and well written! Cant wait to see what happens next!
10/27/2023 c40 13Dragonkyubii
It sucks that you stopped writing, I hope you’ll come back and finish this story
13DragonkyubiiIt sucks that you stopped writing, I hope you’ll come back and finish this story
10/23/2023 c19 6bjdakooch
I will continue to listen to the story and I appreciate the great effort you put into the story. However, I believe you should shorten your fights a bit. There is quite a lot of repetitive themes in the fights. In general, fights don’t tend to move the plot line forward and if you shorten them you can put more into character development. I really hope there was a good reason Naruto received the curse mark because it really really pissed me off.
6bjdakoochI will continue to listen to the story and I appreciate the great effort you put into the story. However, I believe you should shorten your fights a bit. There is quite a lot of repetitive themes in the fights. In general, fights don’t tend to move the plot line forward and if you shorten them you can put more into character development. I really hope there was a good reason Naruto received the curse mark because it really really pissed me off.
10/13/2023 c32 Reviled l Deliver
the bringer of darkness depraved the target of all 5 senses. that's why it's s class genjutsu
the bringer of darkness depraved the target of all 5 senses. that's why it's s class genjutsu
10/12/2023 c20 Reviled l Deliver
curse mark wouldn't really work on naruto with kurama and him having wood release. why do you think cannon ororchimaru didn't put a curse mark on naruto?
and curse mark only feeds on the negative emotion. so far naruto hasn't felt anything of sorts other than fear and anger.
curse mark wouldn't really work on naruto with kurama and him having wood release. why do you think cannon ororchimaru didn't put a curse mark on naruto?
and curse mark only feeds on the negative emotion. so far naruto hasn't felt anything of sorts other than fear and anger.