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21HyperA1985
I am looking forward to chapter 42 and I hope Naruto discover Saiken the six tailed beast created the slug summoning contract.
21HyperA1985I am looking forward to chapter 42 and I hope Naruto discover Saiken the six tailed beast created the slug summoning contract.
3/9/2019 c35 2Himegoto-chan
Alright I will be frank with you, this story is well written "minus obvious spelling and grammar errors" and has a interesting plot, which is honestly why I stayed this long into it, but harems just really aren't my thing ya know?
I'm stopping now because the harem is just too much now, but I implore you to continue this story, it's one of the better ones and many people would be saddened to see it end!
2Himegoto-chanAlright I will be frank with you, this story is well written "minus obvious spelling and grammar errors" and has a interesting plot, which is honestly why I stayed this long into it, but harems just really aren't my thing ya know?
I'm stopping now because the harem is just too much now, but I implore you to continue this story, it's one of the better ones and many people would be saddened to see it end!
3/5/2019 c17 Guest
You use “as” like your in love with the word. “As she”, “as he”, “as they” so repetitive. Ever think about using because? And why are you using it as at the start of the sentence. “As” you like using it so much. Jesus talk about shitty grammar. You put in bullshit situations to just introduce or just put it in for the sake of it. There was no point in having the part where yugito, karui, Omoi, Samui, confront naruto just to blow it off by explaining a reason and Omoi backing it up with, “guys wait think about it ‘as’ no one has seen him for 12 years” and then at the end of the conversation, get Kushina and Yamato to appear and leave with naruto asking them to still be his friends. No character development at all. Just a shit situation which is basically a shit filler.
You use “as” like your in love with the word. “As she”, “as he”, “as they” so repetitive. Ever think about using because? And why are you using it as at the start of the sentence. “As” you like using it so much. Jesus talk about shitty grammar. You put in bullshit situations to just introduce or just put it in for the sake of it. There was no point in having the part where yugito, karui, Omoi, Samui, confront naruto just to blow it off by explaining a reason and Omoi backing it up with, “guys wait think about it ‘as’ no one has seen him for 12 years” and then at the end of the conversation, get Kushina and Yamato to appear and leave with naruto asking them to still be his friends. No character development at all. Just a shit situation which is basically a shit filler.
2/27/2019 c16 Guest
i am in chapter sixteen, and i hope snake sannin and kabuto are dead after the invasion. all other nations crushed for their wicked intentions. after that war hawk subdued.
i am in chapter sixteen, and i hope snake sannin and kabuto are dead after the invasion. all other nations crushed for their wicked intentions. after that war hawk subdued.
2/26/2019 c14 Guest
i hope he kills kabuto and his master when the time comes, same with danzo as if he doesn't then he do not justify his current strength.
i hope he kills kabuto and his master when the time comes, same with danzo as if he doesn't then he do not justify his current strength.
2/26/2019 c11 Guest
i have read till chapter 11, and i an petty sure the senju heir should be in a anbu squad with kushina, hayate's girlfriend and yamato. it is the best that can help him with nine tails, kenjutsu and wood. not with kakashi with idiotic genins. and more so when he has akatsuki on his tail.
i have read till chapter 11, and i an petty sure the senju heir should be in a anbu squad with kushina, hayate's girlfriend and yamato. it is the best that can help him with nine tails, kenjutsu and wood. not with kakashi with idiotic genins. and more so when he has akatsuki on his tail.
2/16/2019 c40 Petrox
i found the way that Naruto attacking Chen first without reason is completely out of his character. he desecrated his temple, Chen only stopped the fight and wanted yo talk so, wtf was Naruto attacking him in the back? HIm being so moral. If it is for the girl, i find it very very forced
i found the way that Naruto attacking Chen first without reason is completely out of his character. he desecrated his temple, Chen only stopped the fight and wanted yo talk so, wtf was Naruto attacking him in the back? HIm being so moral. If it is for the girl, i find it very very forced
2/4/2019 c1 Anaelyssa
Well. The summary was interesting, but the sheer irritation of every single term being translated in parallel has me quitting.
Well. The summary was interesting, but the sheer irritation of every single term being translated in parallel has me quitting.
1/10/2019 c8 Brandon Boodoo
Why do you create BULLSHIT situations for naruto and then COMPLETELY blow it all away?
Are you mentally challenged? Is that why you do such retarded stuff?
You put Naruto in a situation where he battles some backwater guards who is guarding some princess all because you want to make a scene or introduce her and TOTALLY fuck it up by having the guards MANHANDLE Naruto only for Naruto to come back and "fight" them... which by the way was pathetic.
Then when you have them realize just who Naruto is, you let them off...? The Daimyo would not allow this even if the guards were to guard his grand daughter, mostly because they were defeated by a "kid". That alone would get them removed from being her guards. Not to mention that they had attacked Senju Naruto, son of Senju Tsunade and heir to the Senju clan.
This alone would have them killed on the spot, if Tsunade didn't then the Daimyo would have ordered their execution. This whole situation was forced and you did a very bad job with the whole idea.
Couple this with the previous chapter and how badly you handled that as well, made this story unbearable to read and you should have just let the author who made the story you based this one of remain as the only one.
This story fails in comparison and you should take it down from the site.
Why do you create BULLSHIT situations for naruto and then COMPLETELY blow it all away?
Are you mentally challenged? Is that why you do such retarded stuff?
You put Naruto in a situation where he battles some backwater guards who is guarding some princess all because you want to make a scene or introduce her and TOTALLY fuck it up by having the guards MANHANDLE Naruto only for Naruto to come back and "fight" them... which by the way was pathetic.
Then when you have them realize just who Naruto is, you let them off...? The Daimyo would not allow this even if the guards were to guard his grand daughter, mostly because they were defeated by a "kid". That alone would get them removed from being her guards. Not to mention that they had attacked Senju Naruto, son of Senju Tsunade and heir to the Senju clan.
This alone would have them killed on the spot, if Tsunade didn't then the Daimyo would have ordered their execution. This whole situation was forced and you did a very bad job with the whole idea.
Couple this with the previous chapter and how badly you handled that as well, made this story unbearable to read and you should have just let the author who made the story you based this one of remain as the only one.
This story fails in comparison and you should take it down from the site.
1/10/2019 c7 Brandon Boodoo
THIS CHAPTER IS SHIT IM GOING TO PRETEND YOU DIDN'T EVEN POST THIS CHAPTER. THIS WAS SOOOOOO BAD. SO BAD. THE PLOT HOLES FROM THIS CHAPTER ALONE JUST DESTROYED YOUR STORY. YOU SHOULD PROBABLY GO BACK AND DELETE IT.
THIS CHAPTER IS SHIT IM GOING TO PRETEND YOU DIDN'T EVEN POST THIS CHAPTER. THIS WAS SOOOOOO BAD. SO BAD. THE PLOT HOLES FROM THIS CHAPTER ALONE JUST DESTROYED YOUR STORY. YOU SHOULD PROBABLY GO BACK AND DELETE IT.
1/5/2019 c11 Ahmed Maged
Your story is fucking stupied cliche lame shit
Naruto is so fucking fool it make me sick
And you with copy the canon just wow
I feel sad for you man
Your story is fucking stupied cliche lame shit
Naruto is so fucking fool it make me sick
And you with copy the canon just wow
I feel sad for you man