for The Hope of the Senju Clan11/5/2018 c41 
6Mister Hide
It's a fine fic and so far I've enjoyed it like crazy. You've done a magnificent job Aragon Potter in writing this story! Although among some of the things I didn't like was Naruto's WAY TOO MUCH NAIVETY and Tsunade's weaknesses in taking the proper(not right) decision. I still believe you should've killed Danzo in this chapter. You probably didn't because of a future twist and intense-ness, didn't you? Not to mention to keep someone besides the Hyugas to play the role of the bad guy... Am I right?
If you ask me I think I'm gonna suggest that from now on you should reduce Naruto's naivety and fair-play attitude BY KILLING ONE OR TWO VERY VERY CLOSE PERSON TO HIM. As long as his closest persons will miraculously survive a hopeless battle or even an assassination attempt, I believe the story will lose some of its potential. As long as there's no death(Btw, I am talking about killing Naruto's precious persons WHO DID NOT DIE IN THE CANON as if you kill Jiraiya at the same way by the hands of pain or Kushina/Sandaime who was already dead in the canon, somehow it just doesn't make the sorrow that much. To make it more realistic even Shizune can die a brutal death(if you include physical abuse/rape that's fine) as it will finally make Naruto realize the brutality and cruelty and the hidden darkness of the shinobi world. If you do kill someone close to him, it should be done by a person who was spared by Naruto and at this Naruto will understand the need to sometimes take a life is better than showing mercy... Especially to kunoichi assassins, well unless you are going to make him an shinobi with ideals like samurai of course.
I had a lot more to discuss but the review has already gotten long enough. I should've pm'd you about this but my mistake:-( If you do read this review by any chance Aragon Potter, would you please mind sending me a pm and say what do you think? I hope and pray for the success of your stories as well as in your real life. Peace to you. And once again thank you so much for writing such an incredible and exciting fic which I've been enjoying for the last four days!
Mr. Hide aka Hasuinna;-)
6Mister HideIt's a fine fic and so far I've enjoyed it like crazy. You've done a magnificent job Aragon Potter in writing this story! Although among some of the things I didn't like was Naruto's WAY TOO MUCH NAIVETY and Tsunade's weaknesses in taking the proper(not right) decision. I still believe you should've killed Danzo in this chapter. You probably didn't because of a future twist and intense-ness, didn't you? Not to mention to keep someone besides the Hyugas to play the role of the bad guy... Am I right?
If you ask me I think I'm gonna suggest that from now on you should reduce Naruto's naivety and fair-play attitude BY KILLING ONE OR TWO VERY VERY CLOSE PERSON TO HIM. As long as his closest persons will miraculously survive a hopeless battle or even an assassination attempt, I believe the story will lose some of its potential. As long as there's no death(Btw, I am talking about killing Naruto's precious persons WHO DID NOT DIE IN THE CANON as if you kill Jiraiya at the same way by the hands of pain or Kushina/Sandaime who was already dead in the canon, somehow it just doesn't make the sorrow that much. To make it more realistic even Shizune can die a brutal death(if you include physical abuse/rape that's fine) as it will finally make Naruto realize the brutality and cruelty and the hidden darkness of the shinobi world. If you do kill someone close to him, it should be done by a person who was spared by Naruto and at this Naruto will understand the need to sometimes take a life is better than showing mercy... Especially to kunoichi assassins, well unless you are going to make him an shinobi with ideals like samurai of course.
I had a lot more to discuss but the review has already gotten long enough. I should've pm'd you about this but my mistake:-( If you do read this review by any chance Aragon Potter, would you please mind sending me a pm and say what do you think? I hope and pray for the success of your stories as well as in your real life. Peace to you. And once again thank you so much for writing such an incredible and exciting fic which I've been enjoying for the last four days!
Mr. Hide aka Hasuinna;-)
11/2/2018 c15 abdultahir38
i hate it when people write trained ninjas as idiots who just say village secrets to random people
i hate it when people write trained ninjas as idiots who just say village secrets to random people
11/2/2018 c12 abdultahir38
what was the point to jiraiya telling everyone by accident when he is supposed to be a spy master why not just have the hokage tell them because he trusts them
what was the point to jiraiya telling everyone by accident when he is supposed to be a spy master why not just have the hokage tell them because he trusts them
10/22/2018 c41 Mythic Imagination
An awesome story. With out original it is, and diverts from the canon plot in many ways, it gives the readers curious to see what happens next. I do hope Naruto becomes less hot-headed after three years (that is if you intend to have the time skip).
Very eager to see the next chapter, and I hope you’re in good health.
An awesome story. With out original it is, and diverts from the canon plot in many ways, it gives the readers curious to see what happens next. I do hope Naruto becomes less hot-headed after three years (that is if you intend to have the time skip).
Very eager to see the next chapter, and I hope you’re in good health.
10/17/2018 c36 soyofansub
You're pervert, arent u? This's to much for me..haa..I think this'll be like...
You're pervert, arent u? This's to much for me..haa..I think this'll be like...
10/16/2018 c19 SleeperHold27
Ok, what happened to using the earring that he has whenever he gets in trouble? If he took it out then that explains it, but we were never informed that he did take it out. I mean I am wayyyyy late to this story, but this just irks me.
Ok, what happened to using the earring that he has whenever he gets in trouble? If he took it out then that explains it, but we were never informed that he did take it out. I mean I am wayyyyy late to this story, but this just irks me.
10/6/2018 c9 5thebestofall
If Kushina is still alive and in Konoha, I really hope Naruto gets to meet her... at least just for learning fuinjutsu.
5thebestofallIf Kushina is still alive and in Konoha, I really hope Naruto gets to meet her... at least just for learning fuinjutsu.