for The Hope of the Senju Clan5/21/2018 c41 Guest
Continue this please
Continue this please
5/14/2018 c1 Guest
I like this story. GREAT JOB
I like this story. GREAT JOB
5/9/2018 c41 
2Patchwork-Trash
A-maze-ing! i love this story! (well the harem thing is bugging me but i can live with that i hope...i just hope it somehow gets called off...) i love how you put in it things from other anime or even movies (refering to Bleach and Kung-Fu Panda 3) Also love the new jutsus! and how you made a nice combination of Tobirama,Hashirama,Tsunade and Minato from Naruto with Naruto's own aspects added xD and omg i laughed soooo hard at 'Hashirama the closet pervert' part xDD omg! I WHOULD JUST PUNCH HIM XD and when i listed to Naruto OST Fooling mode i got idea in my head and imagined Naruto chasung Hashirama arround the village after he learned Eso Tensei with Tobirama laughing his ass off in the background and Tsunade smirking,and of course dumbfouded villagers/shinobi after Naruto sent him throu a wall with a single punch and grabbed his ear while Hashirama shouted "Gomen gomen gomen gomen" whike he (naruto) did so xD (Gomen= Sorry [if i am not mistakenor "ow ow ow ow ow What did i do to deserve this?PERVERT" xD
2Patchwork-TrashA-maze-ing! i love this story! (well the harem thing is bugging me but i can live with that i hope...i just hope it somehow gets called off...) i love how you put in it things from other anime or even movies (refering to Bleach and Kung-Fu Panda 3) Also love the new jutsus! and how you made a nice combination of Tobirama,Hashirama,Tsunade and Minato from Naruto with Naruto's own aspects added xD and omg i laughed soooo hard at 'Hashirama the closet pervert' part xDD omg! I WHOULD JUST PUNCH HIM XD and when i listed to Naruto OST Fooling mode i got idea in my head and imagined Naruto chasung Hashirama arround the village after he learned Eso Tensei with Tobirama laughing his ass off in the background and Tsunade smirking,and of course dumbfouded villagers/shinobi after Naruto sent him throu a wall with a single punch and grabbed his ear while Hashirama shouted "Gomen gomen gomen gomen" whike he (naruto) did so xD (Gomen= Sorry [if i am not mistakenor "ow ow ow ow ow What did i do to deserve this?PERVERT" xD
5/5/2018 c28 Patchwork-Trash
when iread the part where Haku made the ice dragon i was like: reig over the frosted heavens,HYORINMARU!
when iread the part where Haku made the ice dragon i was like: reig over the frosted heavens,HYORINMARU!
5/1/2018 c6 HajakjakkakakammajYhanankala
Pretty good, it just needs a beta, which is understandable if you consider length.
Pretty good, it just needs a beta, which is understandable if you consider length.
5/1/2018 c5 HajakjakkakakammajYhanankala
Mokuton! Still don't really like the jiraiya bashing, but I'll live with it
Mokuton! Still don't really like the jiraiya bashing, but I'll live with it
5/1/2018 c4 HajakjakkakakammajYhanankala
Love the story, although I feel like the comedic relief is overdone.
Love the story, although I feel like the comedic relief is overdone.
5/1/2018 c3 HajakjakkakakammajYhanankala
Alright then, just stating the obvious, but Kushina has the Kyuubi sealed in her because that was the whole reason she was brought to the village, either she had to die in the massacre or go to another village. Now if you are disregarding all of that, if you're stating that Kyuubi was never sealed, then that means the kyuubi didn't really gain his dislike for humanity, it was more apathetic than anything. So that wouldn't be in his modus operandi to attack Konoha. Furthermore to say that Kyuubi wasn't sealed, that would mean that Kyuubi wasn't used in the fight with Hashi and Madara, or Mito wasn't there, and because of this its unlikely that Hashirama and Mito would marry and thus Tsunade wouldn't be born. Also you can't say Kyuubi was under the control of obitobidra because kyiubis eyes weren't described as sharingan eyes, so he couldn't have been under control. So it just seems illogical.
Alright then, just stating the obvious, but Kushina has the Kyuubi sealed in her because that was the whole reason she was brought to the village, either she had to die in the massacre or go to another village. Now if you are disregarding all of that, if you're stating that Kyuubi was never sealed, then that means the kyuubi didn't really gain his dislike for humanity, it was more apathetic than anything. So that wouldn't be in his modus operandi to attack Konoha. Furthermore to say that Kyuubi wasn't sealed, that would mean that Kyuubi wasn't used in the fight with Hashi and Madara, or Mito wasn't there, and because of this its unlikely that Hashirama and Mito would marry and thus Tsunade wouldn't be born. Also you can't say Kyuubi was under the control of obitobidra because kyiubis eyes weren't described as sharingan eyes, so he couldn't have been under control. So it just seems illogical.
5/1/2018 c2 HajakjakkakakammajYhanankala
Pretty cool, I feel like beating I'm Jiraiya is overdone, but whatever. Oh and the whole Kushina thing would go more smoothly if you had eliminated that whole thing where he saves her, and instead she is kidnapped by Kumo. Because I don't see her leaving Minato, after that.
Pretty cool, I feel like beating I'm Jiraiya is overdone, but whatever. Oh and the whole Kushina thing would go more smoothly if you had eliminated that whole thing where he saves her, and instead she is kidnapped by Kumo. Because I don't see her leaving Minato, after that.
4/30/2018 c33 Guest
Love it
Love it
4/28/2018 c8 Guest
The Daimyo has 12 royale gards protecting him and his family, at least one of them is Kage level and the others are S-level Jonin ..
The Daimyo has 12 royale gards protecting him and his family, at least one of them is Kage level and the others are S-level Jonin ..
4/26/2018 c9 RandomUser9991
I like this story very much, both the concept and humour behind it. However, nothing is without some flaws. Instead of a rant, I'll just give the pointers to what bothers me the most. There are some grammar mistakes but nothing cringe worthy. Chakra affinity doesn't mean which element they can only use, but what comes most natural to them. Having four affinities is absurd. You are also overstuffing your story with unnecessary information. Instead of explaining everything that he learns you can summarise it in a sentence or few instead of few paragraphs. There is also no need to repeat the same information over and over again in every chapters. Don't state obvious facts of the Naruto universe. Not every reader is a drooling preteen that has to have everything explained to them. You are seriously devaluing our intelligence. It makes us skip most of the story and eventually give up as reading becomes then more of a chore then a hobby. Also, I honestly hope that this won't turn into a harem story.
I like this story very much, both the concept and humour behind it. However, nothing is without some flaws. Instead of a rant, I'll just give the pointers to what bothers me the most. There are some grammar mistakes but nothing cringe worthy. Chakra affinity doesn't mean which element they can only use, but what comes most natural to them. Having four affinities is absurd. You are also overstuffing your story with unnecessary information. Instead of explaining everything that he learns you can summarise it in a sentence or few instead of few paragraphs. There is also no need to repeat the same information over and over again in every chapters. Don't state obvious facts of the Naruto universe. Not every reader is a drooling preteen that has to have everything explained to them. You are seriously devaluing our intelligence. It makes us skip most of the story and eventually give up as reading becomes then more of a chore then a hobby. Also, I honestly hope that this won't turn into a harem story.