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6/1/2020 c1 Guest
I love it! It’s great, it was exactly what I was looking for
3/19/2018 c1 idk.123
hi make another with Ian and Wanda but make sure jared or jeb... OOOH maybe kyle, yeh kyle works in on them half way through XD i dont have \n account so call it wanda and ian lemon time or something please so easy to Google (:
7/25/2017 c1 Guest
Thank you. It was a nice time to read that lol
5/25/2015 c1 Fatima6
For this being your first story its excellent I wish you would write more on this story.
2/24/2014 c1 TheVampireNerd
Your story is A.M.A.Z.I.N.G! I love it (Ian and Wanda forever 3) and I would love to read more (if you want to make a series out of this I wouldn't mind ;) ). For the criticism, I don't really have something in mind, but as a reminder if you continue this; remember to do exactly as you did now, don't write something that (For example) Wanda wouldn't say/do, because if you do the writers just looses the interest. BUT as I said before, please continue this. Maybe a pregnancy story? Or a 'get caught' story? Or something completely different?
(Although, I would love to read a pregnancy story between Ian and Wanda).
I hope that you continue this, and if you do, I'm going to be the first one to read it! :D
8/15/2013 c1 Brilliant
I love this, perhaps my only quelm was the unrealistic representation of a males penis size.
'Mental note: Jared had nothing on Ian, and Jared was easily eight or nine inches, but Ian was more in both length and girth and considerably so.'
Err, 'Jared was easily eight or nine inches?' You do realise that the average size of a males penis when erect is six inches, two thirds of what you had described.
But wait, theres more! Ian is even larger than Jared! Nearly double the size of the average length! Sure, why not?
I'm guessing you are a virgin right? never seen a real penis besides on porn before, hmm? basing your knowledge of other unrealistic smut fanfictions you have read?
That's all fine but think of the insecure guys who are going to be wanting to wank off to your story but loose their hard on because they feel inadequate in comprison to your descriptions.
P.S - I'm a 24 year old female.
Great story though. You nailed everything else.
7/28/2013 c1 Ro
Seriously? You have to keep in mind the characters, this just comes off as smut, sub the names and place And you have a brand new story. Wanda would never say pussy or even think of having sex inches from Jamie. Maybe a grope, above clothes, and even that she would still feel bad about doing in public. You did good with the smut, but try working harder on staying in character, which was good in the beginning.
7/13/2013 c1 Lola
I really liked it! But it bothered me Jamie was in the room. I really just wanted to focus on just Ian and Wanda. Will you do one possibly with Wanda tellin Ian she's pregnant?
7/1/2013 c1 AndreaHeart
awesome ;)
5/26/2013 c1 melness0128
Ok, so you probably won't see this but I'm gonna say it anyway. Continue this! It was fabulous. The story flowed very well and I could picture what was going on. A quality needed in a good writer is the ability to take your readers on this journey. So yea, loved it! Want more! The only this that bugged me a bit was when you called it a vagina. I mean sure that's the correct term. But I never call it a vagina, I mean how unsexy is that? A vagina is an evil bitch that has a period every 28 days. It's the real 28 days later. Call it her sex, her pussy, her core. Just my opinion.
4/28/2013 c1 2Under The Masks
I decree that you continue !
4/17/2013 c1 Guest
it was really good the writing flowed very well :D
4/1/2013 c1 SamyJo
That was pretty good. :) haha I feel awkward saying that, but yeah, it was. X) I like your detail and way of making the reader actually feel and almost experience it in a way. The only thing I'd do is add more foreplay. There really wasn't much, and that's a big part of it. Otherwise, awesomesauce! :) I'd like to see more on this in the future.
3/29/2013 c1 diehardtwilightfan23
Awww loved it!
12/31/2012 c1 Guest
i've read this a tad late, but i loved it, i think you should do more chapters. :)
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