
8/20/2011 c1
41lightningpelt
whoa. I read this a long time ago, but tonight I was cleaning out my faves. This one is DEFINITELY staying put. I can't believe I didn't review it the first time around.
That was, in short, amazing. The description was vivid enough to make you squirm, but not so lurid as to make you want to turn away. The emotions of both L and Light were captured really well, I thought, and in they were definitely in-character. I love all the little details you added, and the dialogue was perfect.
The only small correction I have is that each new character's quote should get a new line (e.i, Light and L shouldn't have both been speaking in the same line or paragraph). But that's a minor thing, and didn't hinder the story. ^^
Thanks for writing this! Really good job!
=^^=

whoa. I read this a long time ago, but tonight I was cleaning out my faves. This one is DEFINITELY staying put. I can't believe I didn't review it the first time around.
That was, in short, amazing. The description was vivid enough to make you squirm, but not so lurid as to make you want to turn away. The emotions of both L and Light were captured really well, I thought, and in they were definitely in-character. I love all the little details you added, and the dialogue was perfect.
The only small correction I have is that each new character's quote should get a new line (e.i, Light and L shouldn't have both been speaking in the same line or paragraph). But that's a minor thing, and didn't hinder the story. ^^
Thanks for writing this! Really good job!
=^^=
11/30/2009 c1
18InfinityChaos
Dude, I'll review this again when i finish reading it.
But the other version was way Awesome3

Dude, I'll review this again when i finish reading it.
But the other version was way Awesome3