for From Cold to Surprised12/2/2009 c1 
85SANDEFUR
This is a very well written story, but I longed for more. Why was Grace so intent on Luke visiting her? Just simple loneliness, or did she have some problem that called for the support of her boyfriend? And just how intimate has their relationship become? Luke is clearly uncomfortable with Grace's nudity, but apparently he will be spending the night in her room (I assume he won't be immediately turning around and driving home during a heavy snowfall). I hope you will consider expanding this story as there are a lot of interesting directions in which it could go.
SANDEFUR.
85SANDEFURThis is a very well written story, but I longed for more. Why was Grace so intent on Luke visiting her? Just simple loneliness, or did she have some problem that called for the support of her boyfriend? And just how intimate has their relationship become? Luke is clearly uncomfortable with Grace's nudity, but apparently he will be spending the night in her room (I assume he won't be immediately turning around and driving home during a heavy snowfall). I hope you will consider expanding this story as there are a lot of interesting directions in which it could go.
SANDEFUR.