for Elements We call Love5/22 c1 Natalie4q6
Discovered this platform called Storio (storioai dot com) recently. It basically gamifies your story—like Twine, but easier. I’m testing it with some of my older stories right now.
Discovered this platform called Storio (storioai dot com) recently. It basically gamifies your story—like Twine, but easier. I’m testing it with some of my older stories right now.
12/17/2024 c1 
1Stephen Amelia
I loved your story it’s captivating and feels perfect for a comic adaptation! I’m a professional artist and would love to discuss turning it into a visual format with you.
Contact info:
Email:
Discord: stephenamelia01
Best regards,
Stephen
1Stephen AmeliaI loved your story it’s captivating and feels perfect for a comic adaptation! I’m a professional artist and would love to discuss turning it into a visual format with you.
Contact info:
Email:
Discord: stephenamelia01
Best regards,
Stephen
4/1/2014 c8 NotAMember
Ideas, huh? I know you haven't updated in literally, months, but here goes.
-some more Slade/Raven stuff, maybe they go see a scary movie that Raven actually is a little scared by and...etc. *wink wink*
-some crime fighting, you could develop a plot off of that, decide who they're fighting, how it happens, the aftermath, blah blah blah...
I'll try and come up with more later. Good job, keep writing! :)
Ideas, huh? I know you haven't updated in literally, months, but here goes.
-some more Slade/Raven stuff, maybe they go see a scary movie that Raven actually is a little scared by and...etc. *wink wink*
-some crime fighting, you could develop a plot off of that, decide who they're fighting, how it happens, the aftermath, blah blah blah...
I'll try and come up with more later. Good job, keep writing! :)
4/1/2014 c6 guest
Hm. Slade seems a bit OOC. Other than that, good. :) work on your grammar and punctuation a little bit though. ;)
Hm. Slade seems a bit OOC. Other than that, good. :) work on your grammar and punctuation a little bit though. ;)
4/1/2014 c2 unknown
It's a good story, but please add ending punctuation after your characters say something. I.e. "Starfire, could you pass the mustard?"
And always start a new paragraph after any character says something so no one gets confused as to who is talking. This is an example: "I am talking for no apparent reason." Raven said.
Start of new paragraph, blah blah blah. I appreciate that this is a Slaven story not a BBRae story I am so sick of those. I have no clue why anyone would think they are a good couple but whatever. And you're like me, I don't like Terra either. _
Also, commas are your friend! Feel free to be descriptive and add a bit more to your story besides dialogue! I believe Teen Titan's is capitalized, and Beast Boy, both B's for his name are capitalized as well...and I can't wait to see what Robin will do to make Slade prove his worth, I didn't think he'd get on the team easily. Good job, keep writing! ;)
It's a good story, but please add ending punctuation after your characters say something. I.e. "Starfire, could you pass the mustard?"
And always start a new paragraph after any character says something so no one gets confused as to who is talking. This is an example: "I am talking for no apparent reason." Raven said.
Start of new paragraph, blah blah blah. I appreciate that this is a Slaven story not a BBRae story I am so sick of those. I have no clue why anyone would think they are a good couple but whatever. And you're like me, I don't like Terra either. _
Also, commas are your friend! Feel free to be descriptive and add a bit more to your story besides dialogue! I believe Teen Titan's is capitalized, and Beast Boy, both B's for his name are capitalized as well...and I can't wait to see what Robin will do to make Slade prove his worth, I didn't think he'd get on the team easily. Good job, keep writing! ;)
6/20/2012 c6 2Lucyole
very interesting story and poor bella damn
you to hell terra you are so annoying just
go some where else bitch i voting for bella and
B-B they are very cute as an pairing slade and raven
are the best overall i love em together.
the story si really good written, amazing funny and
sweet please write more i would be happy to read
the next chapter asap
2Lucyolevery interesting story and poor bella damn
you to hell terra you are so annoying just
go some where else bitch i voting for bella and
B-B they are very cute as an pairing slade and raven
are the best overall i love em together.
the story si really good written, amazing funny and
sweet please write more i would be happy to read
the next chapter asap
8/12/2010 c4 4Royalraven007
I am glad that you are putting school first Shadow but I do hope that you find time to finish this story. If I can make a suggestion, say who is talking and space it out a bit more. Your story is really hard to keep track of who is doing what and who is talking. ^^ I'll still read though cuz I love Slade and you made him sound so hot in this story ^^ also I love the idea of him having a sister :) good luck with life and writing!
4Royalraven007I am glad that you are putting school first Shadow but I do hope that you find time to finish this story. If I can make a suggestion, say who is talking and space it out a bit more. Your story is really hard to keep track of who is doing what and who is talking. ^^ I'll still read though cuz I love Slade and you made him sound so hot in this story ^^ also I love the idea of him having a sister :) good luck with life and writing!
8/12/2010 c2 Royalraven007
Good story but you need to work on your grammer and flow of the story, right now it is kinda choppy :)
Good story but you need to work on your grammer and flow of the story, right now it is kinda choppy :)
12/10/2009 c2 7fallfromreality
Very creative story! I love the idea of slade and RAven having siblings and Slade joining the TT
7fallfromrealityVery creative story! I love the idea of slade and RAven having siblings and Slade joining the TT