Just In
for haruhis little cousin

1/9/2010 c2 5Nitrea
This story is good!

-Love Nitrea ;)
12/11/2009 c2 9PartyOnTheMoon
I believe you have a good concept here.

Just wanted to point out a few things to help you.

The story was a litle hard to read, it would help if you put spaces between the dialogue.

Also, the summary says that you're a bad speller, practice makes perfect, right? I'd hate to be the one to tell you this, but people tend to flock away from a story if their spelling and grammar is off.

You should also try to capitalize and use punctuation.

I'm not trying to criticize you and tell you that you're doing horrible. I actually like what you wrote down. But maybe if you take my suggestions your stories will come out a lot better.

Just trying to help and all, if you don't want to, that's cool. ^_^

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