1/24/2010 c4 heavensangel01
lol wow what a wonderful chapter

1/22/2010 c4 bodah
i like this.

i like pams interactions.

1/22/2010 c4 7Lennatha
...What about the car?

I was looking forward to that Gosh darnit!

Have you read the books by any chance? Some scenes you wrote sounded like you have =]

I'm enjoying this so much ^-^

I do feel however, that Pam is being slightly OOC (If you have read the books, I just read dead as a doornail so no spoilers =3 )

But I love it all the same. Especially the Stapler. I was laughing quite a bit =]

I noticed you changed from first to third person when writing quite a lot, when I say noticed, I mean I got up to this chapter and was like 'oh wait... third? hang on' -re-reads- 'oh. Okay then.' -.-'

Anyway. update soon please

Lennatha

1/22/2010 c4 25emmettismymonkeyman
Okay there were some strange pov changes within the story, near the end when she leaves the Dojo, it changes from Sookie's to your's..or the 3rd person's, i would fix that or do something. Just a though, sorry if u meant to do it, just telling u anyways.

And arby's to me is ew! lol.

And was that computer guy infact black?

And you did it again, with the strange POV changes..

And Sookie is getting very strange...her remarks and

dialogue are very weird.

And at the end, does sookie get rid of the car? Does she intend to not drive away in it?

1/22/2010 c4 ericsmine
LMFAO,great chapter.

1/21/2010 c4 3curly-kitty
I can't wait to see Eric in a Best Buy, and I really strongly hope that Steve is still there, I would love to see how Eric handles it.

12/26/2009 c3 racecz5
This chapter was hilarious! Please keep lots of Pam in the mix.