for Survivors of the Outbreak12/12/2010 c6 southern hickup
Woooheee! That's good! Haha! I can't wait to read more! Update soon as ya can!
Woooheee! That's good! Haha! I can't wait to read more! Update soon as ya can!
9/3/2010 c2 The Fox Familiar
This is a fine chapter, but there are some spelling errors.
Remember to have capital letters at the beginning of sentences.
Also, when the character's are saying: "Your Welcome" it is not that, it is "You're Welcome." YOUR is possessive.
This is a fine chapter, but there are some spelling errors.
Remember to have capital letters at the beginning of sentences.
Also, when the character's are saying: "Your Welcome" it is not that, it is "You're Welcome." YOUR is possessive.
2/18/2010 c6 
1rainfilledeyes
I really like this and it caught my eye even though I normally only stick with one main story. I see that you havent updated in about a month so I hope you havent given up on it because it would be great to be able to read more. im really surprised you dont have more reviews on this but I know how that goes since ive written a couple but never got a review yet :) dont give up
1rainfilledeyesI really like this and it caught my eye even though I normally only stick with one main story. I see that you havent updated in about a month so I hope you havent given up on it because it would be great to be able to read more. im really surprised you dont have more reviews on this but I know how that goes since ive written a couple but never got a review yet :) dont give up
1/12/2010 c1 9Wheatbread
I'm surprised you haven't had any reviews yet! I love what you're doing here and am anxious to read more when i've got time. Just a couple of things. I didn't get "the man 'ts' his tongue." I think you could say that differently. Then I was confused by "She was here." At first I thought Max had sensed her somewhere close by in the present, but then when the guy turned around and screeched away I figured it just was a misspelling or typo you had meant to say "wasn't." Later I figured out what you meant. You could use "had just been" instead of "was" to make it more clear, or something along those lines. Again, though, great start.
9WheatbreadI'm surprised you haven't had any reviews yet! I love what you're doing here and am anxious to read more when i've got time. Just a couple of things. I didn't get "the man 'ts' his tongue." I think you could say that differently. Then I was confused by "She was here." At first I thought Max had sensed her somewhere close by in the present, but then when the guy turned around and screeched away I figured it just was a misspelling or typo you had meant to say "wasn't." Later I figured out what you meant. You could use "had just been" instead of "was" to make it more clear, or something along those lines. Again, though, great start.