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1/7/2010 c1 8HiddenHikariAppend
1st: Amazing chapter...just like the others...da~!

2nd: so...Italy's hair...is like...a penis sticking out of the SIDE OF HIS HEAD? ...um...America's little hair, and Canada's and Austria's and every one else's that has that...does that mean...its the same for them...da~?

3rd: Im not really sure if this story should be clasified as 'anime/manga' its more like...'porn on paper' XD

4th: Loved the olive oil, da~!

last: just wondering...why do make Feliciano say 'seista' instead of 'sleep' or 'rest' or 'nap'...? Cause i tried to translate it, and i couldn't...da...I always thought that was SPANISH...da~?
1/7/2010 c3 Fox-Sin
love it
1/7/2010 c3 21thelivinggirl
I love this, and cannot wait for more! One thing though - dialouge, especially on Germany's part, seems to be missing. For example, this section:

He smiled lazily at Ludwig as he began to wash his back, humming to himself between his yawns. "I'm not trying to fall asleep...Ve, it's just so early, and I'm so tired..."

Feliciano giggled at Ludwig's suggestion, stealing another kiss. "Although, that might be much better than gelato, actually..."

See? We never actually hear Ludwig's suggestion - it's missing. This happens rather frequently here. Could you fix it?
1/7/2010 c3 3sriracha style dad
'M back. *strikes a pose*

Anyway...YES OH HOW I LOVE YOU AND AND AND THE WURSTS OH DEAR GOD. Thanks for updating, dear.

Today was awful, right? Yeah, so I come home late and I'm depressed - and lo and behold, this one's been updated.

I freaked out. I did I did.

My next suggestion - they get pizza...and they're at the resturant when all of a sudden...*waggles eyebrows*

I think shortening this idea (which probably will end up as a run-on sentence) into just 'they screw each other against a wall in the men's bathroom' can get my point across well~

Please update soon! I promised to follow you, and here I am again!
1/7/2010 c3 109Peridot Tears
Oh, would he like some sausage on that pizza~? -Shot- Okay, I find the ongoing sex a little pointless - but Gott, this one was hot...-blushing-

~PT
1/7/2010 c3 Murd3r4lyf3
ah

i love how ludwig just ...like..

omg

soo god

no words~
1/7/2010 c3 14GilbertOfPrussia
Oh-kay,I have to finish this before school starts...

ONEGAI! That was amazing! Beautiful! Superb! AND UTTERLY-SEXY! :D The two of you never cease to amaze!

I lol'd when they broke the table. =D Tsk,tsk, Ludwig!

-shifty eyes- There's a picture on deviantART with the same title of this chapter...and part of this story has an excerpt from that! By any chance was it posted by you or your friend?

-ahem- Anyways, this was EPIC. In more ways than one. Keep writing and give us pizza~!
1/7/2010 c3 Gerosan
Pizza, w00t! \3/ lol

But, really, this was very nice.

Ah, them breaking the table was really surprising, lol. It seemed very romantic though; it was more focused on the foreplay and their sensations, which was interesting (as opposed to the actual sex). N0ot that I'm complaining \3/ My fav parts where Feli's "I'm yours," (and Lugwig's reaction XD), and Lud's "You won't regret it," and "Of course I will," while still...well, you know, ahaha! XDD

Awesome chap! :) Do you do this on a forum? Over ims? Emails? I'd be way too shy...XD (I'll just be Kiku-like and be a perverted observer, lmaos~)

Lovely job though! :) I want pizza now ahahas~
1/7/2010 c2 2StarkNekkid
wow, I just finished reading the second chapter and right when i looked i saw another one. Good timing...for me at least XD Awesome story! keep it going!
1/5/2010 c2 snake lover
you HAVE to write more!

I LOVE IT!

is the location of the next sex scene the kitchen?

that is just the perfect place for a Italian !olive..oil..

PERFECTO XDD

LA VERDAD ES QUE LA DULZURA QUE EMPLEAS ADEMAS DE LAS CANDENTES ESCENAS DE AMOR HACEN DE ESTA HISTORIA MUY AGRADABLE Y ENTRETENIDA!

SIGUE ASI!
1/4/2010 c2 28HiddenHikari
wow...

first story i've read where except for maybe 30 lines or so, it was nothing but graphic sex...

good job... +incert proud face here+
1/4/2010 c1 HiddenHikari
a...

amazing...

not much more to say other than very well writen and very sexy, da~!
1/1/2010 c2 SorenIce
I just have to say that I love this story so much and you guys make Ludwig sound so hot, can't wait for more.^_^
1/1/2010 c2 2Agatsuma Ritsuka
Yum :P
12/31/2009 c2 VampireArgonian92
^/^ *Dies of nosebleed* Love it!
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