for Shinigami Shuffle5/13/2022 c6 Guest
Damn, that apartment scene hit hard
Damn, that apartment scene hit hard
6/9/2012 c6 Drk Kitsune
Great chapter. Things are really getting interesting and you hinted at many things. I can't wait to see what the next chapter will hold especially now that you decided not to follow the original to closely. I think your right and you should just go where ever the mood and story takes you. I also agree you should change the title of the story then. Here are a couple of suggestions I came up with. Lucky Fox or Kitsune luck or fox on the lose. Again great chapter I can't wait to see what you do next.
Great chapter. Things are really getting interesting and you hinted at many things. I can't wait to see what the next chapter will hold especially now that you decided not to follow the original to closely. I think your right and you should just go where ever the mood and story takes you. I also agree you should change the title of the story then. Here are a couple of suggestions I came up with. Lucky Fox or Kitsune luck or fox on the lose. Again great chapter I can't wait to see what you do next.
6/2/2012 c6 
9Dragon Man 180
I love fox Naruto climbing on Hinata. I hope Itachi can get to Konoha quickly. But has Kisame taken the chance to leave Akatsuki or is he on a snipe hunt?
9Dragon Man 180I love fox Naruto climbing on Hinata. I hope Itachi can get to Konoha quickly. But has Kisame taken the chance to leave Akatsuki or is he on a snipe hunt?
5/27/2012 c6 Knives91
Yay 'tachi!
An interesting chapter. One must wonder how things are going to play out.
Yay 'tachi!
An interesting chapter. One must wonder how things are going to play out.
4/7/2012 c5 1Ryo no Kitsune
I've read your first version adn liked its format, I will try to let you try on this one.
1Ryo no KitsuneI've read your first version adn liked its format, I will try to let you try on this one.
6/19/2010 c5 Knives91
Impressive. I must wonder where things will proceed from here.
Excellent writing. Keep at it!
Impressive. I must wonder where things will proceed from here.
Excellent writing. Keep at it!
6/18/2010 c5 9Dragon Man 180
Oh man, how long will it take Tsunade to grab Danzo and squeeze until his head pops? Or will Hinata beat her to the old prune and demolish his internal organs?
9Dragon Man 180Oh man, how long will it take Tsunade to grab Danzo and squeeze until his head pops? Or will Hinata beat her to the old prune and demolish his internal organs?
6/17/2010 c5 2Khelek-sul Renai
Poor bored, confused Naruto. It really is that dangerous for you out there, even if you don't believe Tsunade about it right now...
I think I really like Haishi's characterization here... I didn't think I would like him, but he suddenly has my support. I like the idea that he wants to change the clan.
When Tsunade found out about the council's village wide meeting, there was hell to pay, wasn't there? Dammit, Danzo...
I like the little bits of the clan meetings that we see. I'm looking forward to the meeting of the Clan Kids...
Well written. Good read. Keep it up!
2Khelek-sul RenaiPoor bored, confused Naruto. It really is that dangerous for you out there, even if you don't believe Tsunade about it right now...
I think I really like Haishi's characterization here... I didn't think I would like him, but he suddenly has my support. I like the idea that he wants to change the clan.
When Tsunade found out about the council's village wide meeting, there was hell to pay, wasn't there? Dammit, Danzo...
I like the little bits of the clan meetings that we see. I'm looking forward to the meeting of the Clan Kids...
Well written. Good read. Keep it up!
6/17/2010 c5 alaskan-dracolych
Hmmm... Should be interesting where this goes. Almost a lead-in to Perfect Lionheart's challenge.
Hmmm... Should be interesting where this goes. Almost a lead-in to Perfect Lionheart's challenge.
6/16/2010 c5 6Capito Celcior
Ok, you need spelling lessons. Or at the very least Japanese class.
Hinata's father isn't Haishi. It is Hiashi. Pronounced He-Yash-She. He + She with a Yash inbetween. Hiashi.
Harinshin? What the hell is that? I know you aren't referring to the Teleportation Technique that made him famous as the yellow flash, because that is the Hiraishin no jutsu, Hiraishin for short.
I don't get how your writing skills went downhill so fast. Sure, the first few chapters were decent not great, but good enough) but to see you make those mistakes again and again...Hiashi is mispelled over a dozen times...
6Capito CelciorOk, you need spelling lessons. Or at the very least Japanese class.
Hinata's father isn't Haishi. It is Hiashi. Pronounced He-Yash-She. He + She with a Yash inbetween. Hiashi.
Harinshin? What the hell is that? I know you aren't referring to the Teleportation Technique that made him famous as the yellow flash, because that is the Hiraishin no jutsu, Hiraishin for short.
I don't get how your writing skills went downhill so fast. Sure, the first few chapters were decent not great, but good enough) but to see you make those mistakes again and again...Hiashi is mispelled over a dozen times...
6/2/2010 c3 9Herooftimes
Simply amazing, I didnt think I would like this so much more than the original, it's a bit slower and i think the chapters are longer
9HerooftimesSimply amazing, I didnt think I would like this so much more than the original, it's a bit slower and i think the chapters are longer
6/2/2010 c2 Herooftimes
Ok, the explanation was great, thought I'm not sure I could imagine the Death God calling someone 'kid' but who knows. I'm now assuming that the boy Kyuubi escaped in is physical
Ok, the explanation was great, thought I'm not sure I could imagine the Death God calling someone 'kid' but who knows. I'm now assuming that the boy Kyuubi escaped in is physical