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12/14/2010 c1 Rowan
This is awesome! I got a kick out of reading it!

I love Mikan's food obession... it rivals my own.

Now I must read Gakuen Alice and Beauty Pop (I completely missed the reference).

This is extremely cute!
9/1/2010 c1 5Acionna
:) Loved the story! So sweet and fluffehhhhhhhhhh! Wheeeeee!
7/31/2010 c1 5Nanannacyy
lol natsume xD i love the way you wrote your letter it made santa so convinced to grant your wishes xDD
5/3/2010 c1 31Arii-hime

This was TOO cute and TOO funny. Hahaha. :D Will I ever be able to stop laughing at Hotaru's letter? No. XD
OR Natsume's, at that. His was so cute. Just like he is. :3

Mikan wiped her eyes and looked at Yuu with determination. "Yuu, who makes fun of you? I'll beat them to a pulp for making fun of you!"

"Yes, would you like me to blackmail them for you Tobita?" Hotaru asked, a bit excited.

"Expect them dead tomorrow." Natsume said.


Throwing aside my shenanigans, this was so funny. It was pretty good for your first fic. In my opinion it should have gotten more reviews. Keep it up! :D

3/18/2010 c1 xAvenging Angelx
Yeah.. I'm kinda eating BBQ chips currently, so I'm not exactly in a writey-reviewy mood xD! I rmemebered reading it and I LOVED IT! Leave it to Mikan to want to write to Santa.. XD! ILOVEYOU!
3/9/2010 c1 Maizz

OMFG, MINGSTER. YOU ARE LIKE AWESOMME. Omfg. I need to stop typing in caps. Jesus. Okay, ANYWAYS, I like lurved this. Especially the last line. :3 That was like so so so so so cute. AHAHAH. POLKA-DOTTED BOXERS. Good shit.

"Oh. Well I wanna have a pet of my own when I get big!" - THAT MADE ME LAUGH SO HARD. 'Cause it said when I get big. . .and I think you know what the rest would be. . . ;)

1/19/2010 c1 8Ichigo1010
LOL that was hilarious! XD

I loved Natsumes letter =P

Did he want to match Mikan or something?
1/3/2010 c1 1cutiebear14
aw! hilarious! il oved every bit of it! great job!
1/3/2010 c1 One Heartbeat
Ush, Minnie, it is I. I hope you recognize me from your nickname... but yeah. :D

The letters were cute, except in Hotaru's I was wondering if Mikan would comment that Hotaru called Mikan her best friend, LOL. :D And I love when they're little tikes because they're so adorable that way.

Natsume's a thinker. ;] Planning ahead~ Anyway, good job with your first fic. :D Hope to see more soon.


Sinfully Innocent
1/1/2010 c1 Vione
Cute fanfic ;)

And, haha, I love Hotaru's letter! She's totally my idol, LMAO.
1/1/2010 c1 11kazukarin
oh! ming! THIS WAS SO COL! lol loved koko and kitsuneme's letter! hahhahahahahahahahah it was awesome really nice xD
1/1/2010 c1 1Thou Failed Rapist
Like you said, mistakes I would gladly write down here. :D It's not to make you feel bad.

When you have a dialogue and then a narrated fragment, the punctuation is important. I made this mistake too before I was taught proper sentence structure.

For example:

“Yeah, they said they got everything.” Kitsuneme replied.

After "everything" there should be a comma, not a period. End quote with "Kitsuneme replied" Unless it's not a period, but like an exclamation point or question mark, a comma is supposed to go there, because "Kitsuneme replied" follows.

However, if the "Kitsuneme replied" part was in front and the dialogue came next, then the period is fine.

For your first fic, this is pretty well done. You just might want to work on paragraph structure. Make paragraphs instead of typing one or two lines and then ENTER for another few. It can get a little annoying with all the ENTERing.

With a couple more fics, you'd be great in no time. :D
1/1/2010 c1 34Heartbroken Confession
LMFAOLMFAO. Polka Dot boxers... 3 Good job for your first story :)!
1/1/2010 c1 9buttcake
It took me a while...But I managed. :)

So, I shall be a prick. You missed a few commas when there were direct addresses, you replaced a verb with a participle, and well, basically just commas. 8D... But the letters were awesome.

Because I'm well aware of people being sensitive - I hope you're not - I don't really mention mistakes unless I'm close to them. (: But for a first time, it was good.

I want Natsume's letter...ROFL. I'll take Mikan, buy some polka-dotted boxers, and hold them captive...Let's see what he does. -eyes gleam- LMAO.

Children...Aah...Such nostalgic feelings. (: I wonder how teachers handle them. 8D

Anyways, great job! (: Tehee~ I enjoyed it~
1/1/2010 c1 6iUnforgivable
This story was real sweet! :D It was smooth, and the story really flowed even though it was really long. :O

"I want – no DEMAND you get me polka-dotted boxers. That is all. And Mikan to be mine when I'm older."

This line was pwn. XD
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