for The Story Of Sarelle7/20/2022 c35 
1little lady wisteria
I didn't expect this story to be so painful. I cried and I grieved and everything was so unfair but I cannot blame any of them for the decisions they've made. Every decision they made at the moment they made them felt like the right one. I'm honestly debating whether to continue reading the next chapters because it's too painful.
And you're a great writer for making me feel and think this way. No matter how much my heart was breaking on what was happening. God, you're so mean. I was literally crying my heart out here.
1little lady wisteriaI didn't expect this story to be so painful. I cried and I grieved and everything was so unfair but I cannot blame any of them for the decisions they've made. Every decision they made at the moment they made them felt like the right one. I'm honestly debating whether to continue reading the next chapters because it's too painful.
And you're a great writer for making me feel and think this way. No matter how much my heart was breaking on what was happening. God, you're so mean. I was literally crying my heart out here.
3/21/2022 c24 destinee.janelle
I have been completely immersed in this tale so far, and I love how different and fresh it is, but I admit that I had trouble with this chapter. I just hated that none of them, even those who lived with her for months, or Carlisle who was with her right right up to and during his change, remembered anything about her. I know human memories are supposedly hazy, but not a single person remembered her. She has already been alone too long in her short life, that for the few people who have impacted her so greatly, to not even be a memory to a single one is tragic and wrong. I also didn’t like that she questioned who they are. She knew them. She loved them. And she did not go through the change, so has no excuse but to remember them perfectly, and I felt she should have immediately confessed as such, like she did with Carlisle. I do really enjoy the story, and am completely transfixed, so I know I will see it through, but I just had trouble accepting this version of their introductions.
I have been completely immersed in this tale so far, and I love how different and fresh it is, but I admit that I had trouble with this chapter. I just hated that none of them, even those who lived with her for months, or Carlisle who was with her right right up to and during his change, remembered anything about her. I know human memories are supposedly hazy, but not a single person remembered her. She has already been alone too long in her short life, that for the few people who have impacted her so greatly, to not even be a memory to a single one is tragic and wrong. I also didn’t like that she questioned who they are. She knew them. She loved them. And she did not go through the change, so has no excuse but to remember them perfectly, and I felt she should have immediately confessed as such, like she did with Carlisle. I do really enjoy the story, and am completely transfixed, so I know I will see it through, but I just had trouble accepting this version of their introductions.
3/10/2022 c3 4EraSwap
The times are very messed up- in chapter two its 1910 and shes 9 and now its 1905 and shes saying its 5 years before she was born? Also, in 1640 there was no such think as photographs- Carlisle would've freaked when he saw her locket picture. I don't want to sound harsh- just, if you're writing a time travel fic, you need to be more aware of specific dates and times. If I went to the 1800s and pulled out my smartphone people would freak out- not act like its fine. The same way I probably would if someone came up to me with a teleport or hologram. The writing itself if great- but mistakes like these takes away from the stories realism.
4EraSwapThe times are very messed up- in chapter two its 1910 and shes 9 and now its 1905 and shes saying its 5 years before she was born? Also, in 1640 there was no such think as photographs- Carlisle would've freaked when he saw her locket picture. I don't want to sound harsh- just, if you're writing a time travel fic, you need to be more aware of specific dates and times. If I went to the 1800s and pulled out my smartphone people would freak out- not act like its fine. The same way I probably would if someone came up to me with a teleport or hologram. The writing itself if great- but mistakes like these takes away from the stories realism.
3/1/2022 c38 Erikaahhh
a comment for thought. maybe at the beginning of each chapter to write the place and year she is in? just so it's easier to follow along with?
a comment for thought. maybe at the beginning of each chapter to write the place and year she is in? just so it's easier to follow along with?
10/15/2020 c1 Guest
I remember reading this story about 5 years or so ago haha brought back good memories of young me when I was just looking at stories and this popped up
I remember reading this story about 5 years or so ago haha brought back good memories of young me when I was just looking at stories and this popped up
8/14/2020 c25 Guest
I did really like this story, but using so much from the books when the main character isnt Bella is just... it feels a little cheap. So many conversations with the Cullens are just straight up copies. This should be Sarelle's story, not a modified version of Bella. There should be entirely new conversations and a unique connection between Sarelle and the others. I'm going to stop reading because I don't want to keep rereading Twilight when Sarelle is only slightly different from Bella, but Bella is more interesting and dynamic. The most interesting part of Sarelle is her time traveling.
I'm sad. The first 20 chapters really sucked me in. But the romance was extremely rushed (despite the first 20 chapters of unrelated build up), and I don't understand Edward and Sarelle's love at all—except that Sarelle is a rip off of Bella. Still lovely writing. I just don't like some of the creative choices.
I did really like this story, but using so much from the books when the main character isnt Bella is just... it feels a little cheap. So many conversations with the Cullens are just straight up copies. This should be Sarelle's story, not a modified version of Bella. There should be entirely new conversations and a unique connection between Sarelle and the others. I'm going to stop reading because I don't want to keep rereading Twilight when Sarelle is only slightly different from Bella, but Bella is more interesting and dynamic. The most interesting part of Sarelle is her time traveling.
I'm sad. The first 20 chapters really sucked me in. But the romance was extremely rushed (despite the first 20 chapters of unrelated build up), and I don't understand Edward and Sarelle's love at all—except that Sarelle is a rip off of Bella. Still lovely writing. I just don't like some of the creative choices.
7/17/2020 c22 Frioviss
I should have expected this to turn into Oc x Edward pairing. Can't say I enjoy this ship, it's bit cliche.
The rest of your story is still enjoyable even if it's becoming a little boring.
Serelle just meets various Cullens - and a few humans, vampires - through time, usually while they were human and there isn't much of a story or tension.
I wonder if she'll meet Aro eventually?
I wish there was stories where the time traveler jumps further past 1700 and get to meet characters other than Cullens.
I should have expected this to turn into Oc x Edward pairing. Can't say I enjoy this ship, it's bit cliche.
The rest of your story is still enjoyable even if it's becoming a little boring.
Serelle just meets various Cullens - and a few humans, vampires - through time, usually while they were human and there isn't much of a story or tension.
I wonder if she'll meet Aro eventually?
I wish there was stories where the time traveler jumps further past 1700 and get to meet characters other than Cullens.
7/17/2020 c7 Frioviss
So far I love it! I wish there was more time travel stories like yours that focus on various people and era than romance.
So far I love it! I wish there was more time travel stories like yours that focus on various people and era than romance.
5/17/2020 c60 5StrangeMindFiction
Oh my, I would love to see her and Aslo fall in love! I always sort of wanted that if I’m being honest ;)
5StrangeMindFictionOh my, I would love to see her and Aslo fall in love! I always sort of wanted that if I’m being honest ;)