for Shinigami's Touch1/15/2010 c2 
4the DragonBard
I should point out that the ones Kakashi created were probably normal Bunshin, and not Kage Bunshin. They were meant only for intimidation. So, your measure on how difficult it is to create Kage Bunshin is way off.
Please stop with the 'pink banshee' comments. If you want to call her that, do it in the authors notes. Otherwise, it's a sign that a writer is letting his bias interfere with his writing. Not good. Also, if you want to break Naruto from his infatuation with Sakura, do it gradually. It's better writing. Personally, I see Sakura as trying to redeem herself in Shippuden. However, if you dislike Sakura, go right ahead. Just don't ruin your story in your attempts to get back at her.
You need to start a new paragraph when you change speakers. As is, it makes it difficult to read.
I admit that (with the exception of the new paragraph part) this is mostly my opinion, but I hope that it improves your writing.
One question, can Naruto do anything else with his soul eating ability? Rip people's souls out of their bodies, like what Pein did during his attack on Konoha?
4the DragonBardI should point out that the ones Kakashi created were probably normal Bunshin, and not Kage Bunshin. They were meant only for intimidation. So, your measure on how difficult it is to create Kage Bunshin is way off.
Please stop with the 'pink banshee' comments. If you want to call her that, do it in the authors notes. Otherwise, it's a sign that a writer is letting his bias interfere with his writing. Not good. Also, if you want to break Naruto from his infatuation with Sakura, do it gradually. It's better writing. Personally, I see Sakura as trying to redeem herself in Shippuden. However, if you dislike Sakura, go right ahead. Just don't ruin your story in your attempts to get back at her.
You need to start a new paragraph when you change speakers. As is, it makes it difficult to read.
I admit that (with the exception of the new paragraph part) this is mostly my opinion, but I hope that it improves your writing.
One question, can Naruto do anything else with his soul eating ability? Rip people's souls out of their bodies, like what Pein did during his attack on Konoha?
1/15/2010 c2 Nulled Lucied
Very nice story so far, but I thought Kakashi was bluffing at the bridgefight useing bushin and not kagebushin... Seeing as they were going up against bandits, hmm thats a intresting thing to look up sometime. To see if it was the academy version or the kinjutus version.
But overall I liked it.
Very nice story so far, but I thought Kakashi was bluffing at the bridgefight useing bushin and not kagebushin... Seeing as they were going up against bandits, hmm thats a intresting thing to look up sometime. To see if it was the academy version or the kinjutus version.
But overall I liked it.
1/15/2010 c2 Stormraven
Awesome! Love what you're doing in your story, keep up the good work, and hope to see more soon.
Awesome! Love what you're doing in your story, keep up the good work, and hope to see more soon.
1/15/2010 c2 EmperorTippy
In regards to Shadow Clones, I am of the opinion that Kakashi didn't actually create Shadow Clones on the bridge. He merely created regular clones while declaring that they were Shadow Clones. Look underneath the underneath and think deception.
If Jounin level ninja can really create dozens of shadow clones and maintain them for longer than a minute or so then they should all be using them for training.
In regards to Shadow Clones, I am of the opinion that Kakashi didn't actually create Shadow Clones on the bridge. He merely created regular clones while declaring that they were Shadow Clones. Look underneath the underneath and think deception.
If Jounin level ninja can really create dozens of shadow clones and maintain them for longer than a minute or so then they should all be using them for training.