for Heart and Soul8/7/2024 c6 Sahamosveb
Honestly, I understand the dislike of the Veelas by purebloods. Basically, by marrying a Veela, you turn your home into a Veela home. Considering they mostly give birth to girls. Which, in turn, also give birth to girls and so on. Essentially, the Potter house becomes a Veela house, not a wizard house.
Honestly, I understand the dislike of the Veelas by purebloods. Basically, by marrying a Veela, you turn your home into a Veela home. Considering they mostly give birth to girls. Which, in turn, also give birth to girls and so on. Essentially, the Potter house becomes a Veela house, not a wizard house.
7/31/2024 c65 DogmaticNonsense
you couldve just had her walk, stun her from behind, take her back and then return to finish. but nah, harry just cant stand up to anyone unless hes throwing an emotional fit.
then he caves after calming down and letting people dictate everything to him
you couldve just had her walk, stun her from behind, take her back and then return to finish. but nah, harry just cant stand up to anyone unless hes throwing an emotional fit.
then he caves after calming down and letting people dictate everything to him
7/31/2024 c57 DogmaticNonsense
youre making this pointlessly convoluted and contradicted a very important point of why the horcrux was dangerous for harry in oc. its a good story but youre going to have a tough time tying this all together.
youre making this pointlessly convoluted and contradicted a very important point of why the horcrux was dangerous for harry in oc. its a good story but youre going to have a tough time tying this all together.
7/30/2024 c21 DogmaticNonsense
this is getting annoying. passive passive passive always passive. now even JS is nothing more than a follower of whatever dumbledore says instead of doing as he said he would. gotta make it pointlessly political and plans that are just as pointless
i was actually enjoying it until these last few chapters where you either forget stances your characters take or you screw up the character traits
this is getting annoying. passive passive passive always passive. now even JS is nothing more than a follower of whatever dumbledore says instead of doing as he said he would. gotta make it pointlessly political and plans that are just as pointless
i was actually enjoying it until these last few chapters where you either forget stances your characters take or you screw up the character traits
7/30/2024 c18 DogmaticNonsense
for someone used to people with hidden agendas and subtly flirting with her, you make fluer really ignorant about relationships and men at convenient times.
you need to work on consistency of character traits. theres no way she couldnt see something sketchy with daivies.
for someone used to people with hidden agendas and subtly flirting with her, you make fluer really ignorant about relationships and men at convenient times.
you need to work on consistency of character traits. theres no way she couldnt see something sketchy with daivies.
7/30/2024 c18 DogmaticNonsense
you really have character types backwards with harry far too often. it ruins immersion lol
you really have character types backwards with harry far too often. it ruins immersion lol
7/29/2024 c13 DogmaticNonsense
with that, saying harry would ignore malfoy, the fight in the train and that conversation are contradicted and made pointless.
with that, saying harry would ignore malfoy, the fight in the train and that conversation are contradicted and made pointless.
7/29/2024 c13 DogmaticNonsense
you need to check your vocab. since when would harry say ligubrioisness? maybe hermoine or a teacher like mcgonagall if you had to, but harry? remember character types!
you need to check your vocab. since when would harry say ligubrioisness? maybe hermoine or a teacher like mcgonagall if you had to, but harry? remember character types!
7/28/2024 c5 
2NhaTrang
Good fic so far, but eeeesh, I'd edit this to tone Ginny down a lot. She's sounds like she's a 14 year old schoolgirl going on being a 50 year old solicitor. Age-appropriate dialogue?
2NhaTrangGood fic so far, but eeeesh, I'd edit this to tone Ginny down a lot. She's sounds like she's a 14 year old schoolgirl going on being a 50 year old solicitor. Age-appropriate dialogue?
7/26/2024 c44 AuthorR
and of course, its sorted so easily. yes, if i was in their place i would have done the same thing but theyve been keeping secrets fro harry only telling him things when "they feel its necessary". everyone is still doin it. whats the bloody point?
and of course, its sorted so easily. yes, if i was in their place i would have done the same thing but theyve been keeping secrets fro harry only telling him things when "they feel its necessary". everyone is still doin it. whats the bloody point?
7/26/2024 c18 AuthorR
so just because they rationalise his fests he should just roll over and accept it and do it? man, he doesnt want to fo it. he has said it time and time again. whats wrong with not wanting to teach a horde of people who probably wont be grateful of accepting since he is "delusional"? he apologised for finally losing his temper but still HE GETS YELLED AT? hes been stressed and frustated so badly and instead of helping him through it, they badger him into foing something he really doesnt want to? how the fuck is that fair goddamnit?
so just because they rationalise his fests he should just roll over and accept it and do it? man, he doesnt want to fo it. he has said it time and time again. whats wrong with not wanting to teach a horde of people who probably wont be grateful of accepting since he is "delusional"? he apologised for finally losing his temper but still HE GETS YELLED AT? hes been stressed and frustated so badly and instead of helping him through it, they badger him into foing something he really doesnt want to? how the fuck is that fair goddamnit?
7/24/2024 c80 13Death is the last enemy
This is definitely one of the better written “multiple wives” story that I have read. I really loved how well you were able characterize and balance everything. Great work!
13Death is the last enemyThis is definitely one of the better written “multiple wives” story that I have read. I really loved how well you were able characterize and balance everything. Great work!
6/26/2024 c80 Mauricio Cuellar
Gracias fue muy bueno
Gracias fue muy bueno