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Damn... you cut out the juicy stuff. Oh well I thought it was cute. Good luck! PEace!
Damn... you cut out the juicy stuff. Oh well I thought it was cute. Good luck! PEace!
2/10/2010 c6 
1Dragonjek
This story certainly looks interesting.
Although... I do feel rather disappointed. In just a couple chapters, Naruto has lost his endearing innocence. The way he is described as being so innocent and naive, and yet so incredible attractive, is part of what made me keep reading this story.
I rather like what you have done with Tenten, though. What could have just been sex turned into more-I don't know if you are trying to build up solid, long-term relationships here, but if you are trying to Tenten's shows the beginnings of being an excellent one.
I will admit... Naruto and casual sex have never really fit together well with me. I hope you do make it into more, I really do.
1DragonjekThis story certainly looks interesting.
Although... I do feel rather disappointed. In just a couple chapters, Naruto has lost his endearing innocence. The way he is described as being so innocent and naive, and yet so incredible attractive, is part of what made me keep reading this story.
I rather like what you have done with Tenten, though. What could have just been sex turned into more-I don't know if you are trying to build up solid, long-term relationships here, but if you are trying to Tenten's shows the beginnings of being an excellent one.
I will admit... Naruto and casual sex have never really fit together well with me. I hope you do make it into more, I really do.
2/10/2010 c6 Fuyuriku
Hmmn... Decent chapter...
Though I still don't see why people include things that work in anime into written form... Like the headbashing (yes, it does work... rarely for me...), because I honestly doubt Itachi or Kisame would let someone hit them for being "stupid". :P
So, that really leaves no reason why Naruto lets himself be hit. In Anime and Manga it works, because you have the picture to see it happening and the comical factor that it produces, in written plain text, there's just "Sakura hit Naruto's head."
Meh, sorry for my rant.
Till the next time.
Hmmn... Decent chapter...
Though I still don't see why people include things that work in anime into written form... Like the headbashing (yes, it does work... rarely for me...), because I honestly doubt Itachi or Kisame would let someone hit them for being "stupid". :P
So, that really leaves no reason why Naruto lets himself be hit. In Anime and Manga it works, because you have the picture to see it happening and the comical factor that it produces, in written plain text, there's just "Sakura hit Naruto's head."
Meh, sorry for my rant.
Till the next time.
2/10/2010 c6 3Elemental Dragon Swordsman
Well...at least I know what you meant by that...I wonder how Ino will wanna get a piece of him...
3Elemental Dragon SwordsmanWell...at least I know what you meant by that...I wonder how Ino will wanna get a piece of him...
2/7/2010 c5 Elemental Dragon Swordsman
Wow...Naruto is gonna go on multiple dates on different nights...makes you wonder on who he's planning on losing his innocence to...
Can i have a hint on who Akane might be seeing in the future?
Wow...Naruto is gonna go on multiple dates on different nights...makes you wonder on who he's planning on losing his innocence to...
Can i have a hint on who Akane might be seeing in the future?
2/7/2010 c5 4So you want to be an Author
Haha!
I can totaly see the scene with Tsnunade going all technical... I think it's the dream of every medic mother...
4So you want to be an AuthorHaha!
I can totaly see the scene with Tsnunade going all technical... I think it's the dream of every medic mother...
2/6/2010 c5 6Demonkid
Sure the plot seems to be done before, but the humor and the originality is quite refreshing.
Good Job.
Sex Education from a Medical Professional. Geez.
No fruit content required. Not to keen on them, most seem to be written by pre-adolescent boys or girls who know nothing of the act. (Other than what is found in porn or the sick minded. Seriously. I keep away from them to be honest.)
Will we ever see how Naruto has developed as a shinobi? Am I in the wrong genre? XD
Some epic battles and all that.
Best of luck.
6DemonkidSure the plot seems to be done before, but the humor and the originality is quite refreshing.
Good Job.
Sex Education from a Medical Professional. Geez.
No fruit content required. Not to keen on them, most seem to be written by pre-adolescent boys or girls who know nothing of the act. (Other than what is found in porn or the sick minded. Seriously. I keep away from them to be honest.)
Will we ever see how Naruto has developed as a shinobi? Am I in the wrong genre? XD
Some epic battles and all that.
Best of luck.
2/6/2010 c4 daniel 29
Kakashi shook his head. Naruto studying books seemed as unlikely as Sasuke learning to paint or Sakura starting to read Icha Icha Paradise. “So what did you study?”
Sasuke painting and Sakura starting to read Icha Icha Paradise would be funny to see and read about
Kakashi shook his head. Naruto studying books seemed as unlikely as Sasuke learning to paint or Sakura starting to read Icha Icha Paradise. “So what did you study?”
Sasuke painting and Sakura starting to read Icha Icha Paradise would be funny to see and read about
2/6/2010 c3 daniel 29
The fact that Hatake Kakashi slipped in and closed the door behind him, somehow managing to combine his natural I-am-supposed-to-be-here swagger with a movement pattern saying don’t-see-me, barely registered with the legendary sucker. Indeed, at the moment it seemed plausible that Orochimaru himself, riding an ostrich and naked as the day he slithered out from under the rock he probably came from, could have entered the room, perform a mime act proclaiming his undying love of small furry animals everywhere and leave, without get more than a request to close the door after him as a reaction from the current Hokage.
Have to admit the Orochimaru partr of the paragraph would make a funny thought to imagine
The fact that Hatake Kakashi slipped in and closed the door behind him, somehow managing to combine his natural I-am-supposed-to-be-here swagger with a movement pattern saying don’t-see-me, barely registered with the legendary sucker. Indeed, at the moment it seemed plausible that Orochimaru himself, riding an ostrich and naked as the day he slithered out from under the rock he probably came from, could have entered the room, perform a mime act proclaiming his undying love of small furry animals everywhere and leave, without get more than a request to close the door after him as a reaction from the current Hokage.
Have to admit the Orochimaru partr of the paragraph would make a funny thought to imagine
2/4/2010 c4 3Elemental Dragon Swordsman
Great chapter!
Is by any chance Akane dating or engaged to someone?
3Elemental Dragon SwordsmanGreat chapter!
Is by any chance Akane dating or engaged to someone?
2/3/2010 c4 Dmygo
I am... how do I say this. Impressed, I think would be the best word to use. I am thrilled to be reading a story with such substance, with so much analytical content. It is definitely quite a spin on most Naruto fictions out there. I await for future chapters. Good luck! PEace!
I am... how do I say this. Impressed, I think would be the best word to use. I am thrilled to be reading a story with such substance, with so much analytical content. It is definitely quite a spin on most Naruto fictions out there. I await for future chapters. Good luck! PEace!
2/1/2010 c3 Fuyuriku
Hmmn... Don't know what to make of this story so far... I guess the next two or three chapters should tell what to make of it... Is it gonna be another Naruto X Mass Harem? Is it gonna be another Lemon-only fiction? Is it gonna have any sensible plot? Though, I rather dislike storys with just lemons and fluff, after all, a good story needs to have a decent amount of seriousness, action and "ninjaness" (the real ninjaness, not like anime one...)
Even though, I'll keep reading it. :) Seems good so far, the updating rate seems good too, the chapters aren't terribly short, no mistakes so far, as far as I have noticed and it is a pleasurable read so far. :)
So, keep up the good work and update soon. :)
Hmmn... Don't know what to make of this story so far... I guess the next two or three chapters should tell what to make of it... Is it gonna be another Naruto X Mass Harem? Is it gonna be another Lemon-only fiction? Is it gonna have any sensible plot? Though, I rather dislike storys with just lemons and fluff, after all, a good story needs to have a decent amount of seriousness, action and "ninjaness" (the real ninjaness, not like anime one...)
Even though, I'll keep reading it. :) Seems good so far, the updating rate seems good too, the chapters aren't terribly short, no mistakes so far, as far as I have noticed and it is a pleasurable read so far. :)
So, keep up the good work and update soon. :)