4/7/2010 c1 2Xerxes2003
An interesting, cute story. I found it having this mysterious atmosphere into it: I kept wondering who the girl was (an avatar not yet fully used to her body, dressed like a Na'vi, hunting in a forest for food), but my curiousity was left unsatisfied. I also don't think the tsaheylu "marriage" would possibly work like this, nevertheless it serves the story well. Oh yeah, and I never thought I would be looking up the Na'vi language online, but I just wanted to know what the boy said (wow, I never realized how complicated the language was). Thank you, I liked this story very much.
An interesting, cute story. I found it having this mysterious atmosphere into it: I kept wondering who the girl was (an avatar not yet fully used to her body, dressed like a Na'vi, hunting in a forest for food), but my curiousity was left unsatisfied. I also don't think the tsaheylu "marriage" would possibly work like this, nevertheless it serves the story well. Oh yeah, and I never thought I would be looking up the Na'vi language online, but I just wanted to know what the boy said (wow, I never realized how complicated the language was). Thank you, I liked this story very much.
2/14/2010 c1 pohcoyo
I agree with nataliexkathryne, this story is so cute... And I wish you would make this into a series, because the is just that adorable. I really admire how wonderfully written this story is and how it grapsed my attention and made me want to continue reading even though I had to get off the computer.
I agree with nataliexkathryne, this story is so cute... And I wish you would make this into a series, because the is just that adorable. I really admire how wonderfully written this story is and how it grapsed my attention and made me want to continue reading even though I had to get off the computer.
2/11/2010 c1 9nataliexkathryne
Brilliant story, wonderfully paced though I felt the ending was a little rushed.
It might not be your intention but this would be great re-worked into a multi chapter'd story, dragging out the time it takes to bond and then accept that bond so that it flows more naturally. Maybe even a taste of what happens next?
Or perhaps I'm just fishing for more chapters because this story was so damn cute
Brilliant story, wonderfully paced though I felt the ending was a little rushed.
It might not be your intention but this would be great re-worked into a multi chapter'd story, dragging out the time it takes to bond and then accept that bond so that it flows more naturally. Maybe even a taste of what happens next?
Or perhaps I'm just fishing for more chapters because this story was so damn cute
2/9/2010 c1 angel
Nice Job. I liked it.
Nice Job. I liked it.