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2/2/2018 c1 Guest
WTF
11/24/2013 c1 mamita
Hello, I loved your fic,mostly because I love this couple, it's a shame there are not many fics of them is well, thank you and kisses.
7/11/2012 c1 Guest
why does this story have to be gay and between brothers!
8/10/2011 c1 Shayne16
loved the story. i came just watching.!
2/25/2010 c1 33StormLongbottom
I forgot to add...I don't understand why Alex is going to tell her mother something, then that never comes back up. If you revise, please think about that.
2/20/2010 c1 Mochi no Yume
*passes out from severe hotness*

I love the use of the bat!

One thing i think might enhance your writing is to vary up the sentence structure. Maybe try balancing the short sentences with some longer ones and using terms like "the older brother" for exaple so it doesn't feel too "this happened. then this happened."

and make sure to watch the spelling ^^

just a few points but keep upp the great work (and more jax stories)
2/13/2010 c1 12Backlash Button
this makes me wonder about brothers playing baseball now

but also,im interested in baseball now. lol
2/9/2010 c1 Lambertxxx
Hot story, can't wait to read next chapter. Incest fic is so freaking hot. Keep writing them.

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