for Everyone Dies7/15/2021 c11 
5Planar-Walking-Entertainment
... mido claims to be a leader, yet he abandoned his people for veangeance. Mido has gone off the deep end. He ever returns to kokiri forest, he is getting turned.
5Planar-Walking-Entertainment... mido claims to be a leader, yet he abandoned his people for veangeance. Mido has gone off the deep end. He ever returns to kokiri forest, he is getting turned.
7/15/2021 c4 Planar-Walking-Entertainment
Would fado turn into a monster? That jealousy, hate, and greed would definitely not fly for long.
Would fado turn into a monster? That jealousy, hate, and greed would definitely not fly for long.
8/14/2014 c13 outlaw kami
This is one of the most original LoZ stories i've read in awhile. It'd be a real shame to leave this unfinished.
This is one of the most original LoZ stories i've read in awhile. It'd be a real shame to leave this unfinished.
5/7/2013 c13 8kirbyfan1996
I like how this story is progressing. I can't wait to see what happens next.
8kirbyfan1996I like how this story is progressing. I can't wait to see what happens next.
7/31/2012 c13 1onyxpilot
Love the chapter can't wait for the next 1 really like what you did progression of the character. Don't over criticize yourself I saw no change from the chapter where you took a break from writing like you said there would. pleasure to .
1onyxpilotLove the chapter can't wait for the next 1 really like what you did progression of the character. Don't over criticize yourself I saw no change from the chapter where you took a break from writing like you said there would. pleasure to .
6/20/2012 c13 57brown phantom
The changes to canon here, particularly the red eye socket and explosive nectar factors, were a nice unexpected touch. The enemy here did seem a bit too strong for a moment but not ridiculously, though for a moment I'd say that wolf was a bit overpowered. At least everyone stopped to rest and recover. Looking forward to seeing how you revamp the next part of the game.
57brown phantomThe changes to canon here, particularly the red eye socket and explosive nectar factors, were a nice unexpected touch. The enemy here did seem a bit too strong for a moment but not ridiculously, though for a moment I'd say that wolf was a bit overpowered. At least everyone stopped to rest and recover. Looking forward to seeing how you revamp the next part of the game.
6/20/2012 c13 2SuperSaiyanParadoxx
Let me tell you, i whooped for joy when i saw this updated, a tiny bit choppy but i still think this chapter was great, I loved it. And i like the concept of the king and queen dodongo, keep it up!
2SuperSaiyanParadoxxLet me tell you, i whooped for joy when i saw this updated, a tiny bit choppy but i still think this chapter was great, I loved it. And i like the concept of the king and queen dodongo, keep it up!
4/14/2012 c12 CryingCicada
Okay, not generally good at writing reviews so here goes; I like this, a lot :) the only thing I'd say is if you can, try and get another way of presenting us information than having Altair just have a huge info dump, I personally like them but I know many don't, and time spent not on info dumps can be spent on action or fluff, my two favourite things :D
Okay, not generally good at writing reviews so here goes; I like this, a lot :) the only thing I'd say is if you can, try and get another way of presenting us information than having Altair just have a huge info dump, I personally like them but I know many don't, and time spent not on info dumps can be spent on action or fluff, my two favourite things :D
3/21/2012 c9 2sendicard
So, I noticed you introduced a certain prince. I had suspected you changed the antagonist earlier, when you mentioned that you are not a fan of reusing Ganondorf in all the games. Not to mention the great deku tree had stated to beware of the prince. The question is whether Ganondorf is still the antagonist and the prince just plays a role in the end. Or if the prince is the new antagonist.
This chapter was rather fun to read. I even came up with a nice quote.
"Don't think too highly of your side, or else you will eventually forget to take the enemy into account." It fits perfectly for the prince and his speech about the knuckles.
2sendicardSo, I noticed you introduced a certain prince. I had suspected you changed the antagonist earlier, when you mentioned that you are not a fan of reusing Ganondorf in all the games. Not to mention the great deku tree had stated to beware of the prince. The question is whether Ganondorf is still the antagonist and the prince just plays a role in the end. Or if the prince is the new antagonist.
This chapter was rather fun to read. I even came up with a nice quote.
"Don't think too highly of your side, or else you will eventually forget to take the enemy into account." It fits perfectly for the prince and his speech about the knuckles.
3/20/2012 c8 sendicard
Fayore...There is no way in hell that is a coincidence. Fayore is what the goddess Farore was originally called in ocarina of time, before the game was remade. In the original version Gannon also coughed up blood instead of the green shit. That kind of thing. They just remade it after a short while because of some problems and changing the name of the goddess was one of the changes. So not only does he have the original name. The name was the goddess of courage...If you expect me to believe that a coincidence than I call "WTF?".
As for his coat, why do you use the term "thousands of golden eagle feathers". There is no way in hell it took that many golden eagle feathers to make a coat for a fairy. Should have just said golden eagle feathers. Whatever though, I guess we get wrapped up in the moment sometimes.
Fayore...There is no way in hell that is a coincidence. Fayore is what the goddess Farore was originally called in ocarina of time, before the game was remade. In the original version Gannon also coughed up blood instead of the green shit. That kind of thing. They just remade it after a short while because of some problems and changing the name of the goddess was one of the changes. So not only does he have the original name. The name was the goddess of courage...If you expect me to believe that a coincidence than I call "WTF?".
As for his coat, why do you use the term "thousands of golden eagle feathers". There is no way in hell it took that many golden eagle feathers to make a coat for a fairy. Should have just said golden eagle feathers. Whatever though, I guess we get wrapped up in the moment sometimes.
3/20/2012 c7 sendicard
So...Kairi couldn't have just told him that? Why the slap? ...Abusive much? This is what, the fourth time they have randomly hit him when it would have been just as effective to just talk to him. I seriously hope the women in your life don't treat you like this...
Well...A nice transitional chapter. As such I am rather low for notes on it.
So...Kairi couldn't have just told him that? Why the slap? ...Abusive much? This is what, the fourth time they have randomly hit him when it would have been just as effective to just talk to him. I seriously hope the women in your life don't treat you like this...
Well...A nice transitional chapter. As such I am rather low for notes on it.
3/20/2012 c6 sendicard
Zoids? What the hell is Zoids? Just randomly throwing an extra fandom in here? Not like a total wtf moment to us or anything.
Why is it that the word boyfriend or girlfriend is an instant blush button in this story? It is getting kind of ridiculous.
So he just meets them, and now he wants them to watch the shop? A little too trusting if you ask me.
Now he is letting them sleep in his house? Wtf? He just met them!
I am curious to what the Knuckle with the golden armor actually has for material. Because you know, gold is one of the weakest metals. So it can't be pure gold armor. Now you call him "the bronze juggernaut." Which is it? Is it Bronze painted to look gold?
Why is it that Brad has no care that Link turned into a wolf? I don't mind the way you went about the transformation..I just personally thought it wouldn't be as sudden as in twilight princess. I was thinking it would be more drawn out. Gaining one level of the transformation at a time or something. Although I guess that is just my own weird thinking... Whatever.
"Mostly because I have been too busy reading fanfictions, instead of working on mine." ...Same.
Oh, I know I am a little late on this so forgive me. I am to inform you that you break breaks the rules of fanfiction in this story. I have been reluctant to say so until now but... You are actually breaking two rules now.
The initial rule that you broke is the rule about having interior author's notes. For some reason this rule is the most commonly forgotten about. The reason I have been reluctant to mention it is the way you place the author's notes. You place numbers down and get to them later. I honestly wouldn't even consider that a violation if I was an enforcer of the rules but... I am kind of nice. I say this because most people have actual author's notes in their stories so... Yep.
The second rule you have broken is a rule stating that a crossover fic must be placed as a crossover fic. If the reference was important enough that you needed to put it in the disclaimer, then you need to place it as a crossover.
Zoids? What the hell is Zoids? Just randomly throwing an extra fandom in here? Not like a total wtf moment to us or anything.
Why is it that the word boyfriend or girlfriend is an instant blush button in this story? It is getting kind of ridiculous.
So he just meets them, and now he wants them to watch the shop? A little too trusting if you ask me.
Now he is letting them sleep in his house? Wtf? He just met them!
I am curious to what the Knuckle with the golden armor actually has for material. Because you know, gold is one of the weakest metals. So it can't be pure gold armor. Now you call him "the bronze juggernaut." Which is it? Is it Bronze painted to look gold?
Why is it that Brad has no care that Link turned into a wolf? I don't mind the way you went about the transformation..I just personally thought it wouldn't be as sudden as in twilight princess. I was thinking it would be more drawn out. Gaining one level of the transformation at a time or something. Although I guess that is just my own weird thinking... Whatever.
"Mostly because I have been too busy reading fanfictions, instead of working on mine." ...Same.
Oh, I know I am a little late on this so forgive me. I am to inform you that you break breaks the rules of fanfiction in this story. I have been reluctant to say so until now but... You are actually breaking two rules now.
The initial rule that you broke is the rule about having interior author's notes. For some reason this rule is the most commonly forgotten about. The reason I have been reluctant to mention it is the way you place the author's notes. You place numbers down and get to them later. I honestly wouldn't even consider that a violation if I was an enforcer of the rules but... I am kind of nice. I say this because most people have actual author's notes in their stories so... Yep.
The second rule you have broken is a rule stating that a crossover fic must be placed as a crossover fic. If the reference was important enough that you needed to put it in the disclaimer, then you need to place it as a crossover.
3/19/2012 c5 sendicard
I didn't notice any difference in the creation of the world, Goddess theory. So...Not really much of a point in mentioning it.
Well...They took the wolf king thing surprisingly well.
Not a particularly eventful chapter so I don't really have much to note... The story was interesting. A nice read.
Anyway, I will continue reading tomorrow..I really need to get to bed.
I didn't notice any difference in the creation of the world, Goddess theory. So...Not really much of a point in mentioning it.
Well...They took the wolf king thing surprisingly well.
Not a particularly eventful chapter so I don't really have much to note... The story was interesting. A nice read.
Anyway, I will continue reading tomorrow..I really need to get to bed.
3/19/2012 c4 sendicard
Well the wolf king concept seems interesting enough.
It took thirty seconds for that chant to finish? I hate to tell you this but I seriously doubt it would take any more than 30 seconds to burn a tree that was ignited by oil.
...Saria randomly becoming abusive?
As for the chapter in rating.. It was good. I am thinking I am just gonna go to bed. I look forward to reading more tomorrow. Especially since next chapter is apparently when the story truly becomes yours.
Well the wolf king concept seems interesting enough.
It took thirty seconds for that chant to finish? I hate to tell you this but I seriously doubt it would take any more than 30 seconds to burn a tree that was ignited by oil.
...Saria randomly becoming abusive?
As for the chapter in rating.. It was good. I am thinking I am just gonna go to bed. I look forward to reading more tomorrow. Especially since next chapter is apparently when the story truly becomes yours.