for Taking The Chance3/25/2010 c1 
3TheWorldBelongsToME
Nice to finally be able to read a version of the three years that isn't riddled with explicit...stuff. I like your occasional play with words. For example: "recently-revealed-hitherto-secret crush"- that made me smirk. I like the punctual style of dialogue, but I find the "—" you put in front to introduce a new speaker unnecessary, as this is not a script-format. But that's just my thoughts on it. Oh and one point in time you used "&" rather than writing out "and". I say no to that. And I'm not sure if Vegeta was entirely in-character in this, but it was still a great read, an amusing read, and fun entertainment! Good take on the three years ;)
3TheWorldBelongsToMENice to finally be able to read a version of the three years that isn't riddled with explicit...stuff. I like your occasional play with words. For example: "recently-revealed-hitherto-secret crush"- that made me smirk. I like the punctual style of dialogue, but I find the "—" you put in front to introduce a new speaker unnecessary, as this is not a script-format. But that's just my thoughts on it. Oh and one point in time you used "&" rather than writing out "and". I say no to that. And I'm not sure if Vegeta was entirely in-character in this, but it was still a great read, an amusing read, and fun entertainment! Good take on the three years ;)
3/19/2010 c1 11SuperPaige
Aw. So sweet! I love the part with Bunny, Bulma, and Vegeta. "O, your muscles have gotten soo big!" Wuv!
11SuperPaigeAw. So sweet! I love the part with Bunny, Bulma, and Vegeta. "O, your muscles have gotten soo big!" Wuv!