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7/7/2019 c4 Debbie Hicks
5. Chapter 5. then BBBlacking out with best riends then Eye replaced ear then Blown then then Bitten Claire Young with teeth sharp with the kids with other kids with other ones Best riends Bitten swallowed then gone out of control with her then then Aliens and Vulcans with the three with other best friends then trashed in fury but in anger then too late Atomized then Organs replaced good who turned yiu then Tell our masters is a cyborg then Murderd us/they Used from us Brain surgeries forced us/they as killing machines Lematya poison then then Killed us/the one surrndered then Sold as Assassins then Assaulted by abusing then ABitten the new skin hadest then too late Howling then felt dying Executd Without memories how and why we wre held then Where yiu going slaves then toe Heads with they Murdered us/they then Make them as Cyborgs then Died here then AMurderd with the Cullens/witnesses Blew up then were Deceased then reborn as Cyborgs officially they are dead Burn them us in our Cyborg bodies looked weirder Ack! we look from the reprinted manga no way Bree look down we been Killed then then glowing more supreme then then one single tear glowing was from Dawn Read Spier began screaming then a golden moon flyng then readdy we look like teenagers he was captured with him then turned as Cyborgs then Nuked freely good both dead then with they then felt from my new body able to transform Say Betazed Aura power MAKE UP! Your reign of power is over I Won't you to kill us/they BETAZED AURA POWER! MAKE-UP! my own Hand spread up began glowing ten suddenly they yelled from here then glowing a sudden fiery inferno was real Transform then too late the damages to us/they suddenly Ribbons of pure fiery energy then in a seifuku then letting loose a Xena Warrior Princess's war cry was improved but heighten by these then Tiara shattered From the planet of telepathy the pretty guardian in a sailor suit in the name of Betazed will right wrongs and triumphs over evil split the twin's good side are Cyborgs with yours Nuked good dead they are trapped here then us/they were Not living at all they resumed then too late bodies burnt hired a team to hunt us/they down but Smashed mangled from here Lost from here fled bring them dead then that was Now part-Machines and Part-Vampires snapped freely from the pupae stage then Fully-grown then lost from here then us/they wre Different able to fight and hunt animals Alice you look different oh my god my eyes are Green correct they killed me/ they/aliens/Vulcans/Werewolves/Imprints had kids gasp had kids for their cruel experiments they attached brains we are Not humans new skins but the brains were placed hair grew back longer no way new styles for both genders your own newest planetary powers just heighten Bella It's Aura Sailor Betazed we are now Warriors as Time went on after death families were old by now were elderly people but kept the siblings next but transformed smashed freely passed away brought there dead Ew we can't die us with they Blew freely then it came too late was already brought there By now with three survived as Cyborgs in time adapt to newest lives Severed freely then too late looked like from the reprinted manga new anime looks and clothes were on us/they were not mortal beings were in fact were different but it really happened a Shift into us/they began to stop aging fusion us/they Burst freely then that our newest lives were changed vanished brought there dead good they are dead turn them into androids then too late Were as all of them both old/new then too late lost from here that too late nuked as Vampires as all of them afterwards that no longer alive but Immortal by now us/they in Japan deported from America then a new life for us head by two new ears then dressed in a TV Series milltary uniform hair in a bun began a urge a calling then felt it then began Twirling alien but suddenly a Burst of cosmic energy was totalliest dressed like in so they were in fact dressed from a anime no way like Wonder Woman that was in fact a Superheroine then Cool are you her yup Sammy we have kids gasp the organs were different but caused a chain reaction yes they done this act gasp we never age it sped up to 2019 a car speeding up then we Can't age then myself letting loose a earth spliting Xena Warrior Princess's trilling dirge soprano like Lucy Lawless herself landed on the feet successfully oh god who is she wanna a piece of me boys gasp uh oh that was it.
4/10/2012 c4 1Kainen-no-Kitsune
I can't wait to see how Edward reacts to Bella running into the meadow.
3/10/2012 c4 sportytc
can u please update and complete this story as i am wanting to read more and find out what happens
2/6/2011 c3 10fanpire.x
Sounds really interesting :D Although, I probably would have had a different reaction than Bella's to Alice letting the accident happen... Oh well, to each his own, right? Anywho, keep writing xxx
10/26/2010 c3 Barbs
This is great update soon please?
8/5/2010 c3 KJA
You are doing a good job with this. I was a bit worried about how this story was going to be however after reading three chapters I am really liking how you have made the situation flow.

It looks like you are going to get some good character development in for Bella so that she learns to become a stronger willed individual and do so earlier in the story.

I like how you have presented Alice. She was my favorite character in the Twilight books and you use her well here. In some ways he use of her visions feels a bit like how you had Chloe use her memory and experiences in the portal series.

I will note that Bella's thoughts about Alice's ability to see the future seeming like a violation of physics is a neat thought. However we know that Alice only sees possible futures, as when decisions are made what she sees changes in accordance with them. Also I would say that if the many worlds theory is right then Alice's visions side step the issue entirely as the things she sees still happen an an alternate reality unchanged. How ever you are going to develop it it's fun to speculate.

On the issue of the bionic modification of Bella and Jaime I was surprised by your use of nanotechnology in this story. It raises and interesting point however. It solves Bella's problem for being with the Cullens but what about Jaime and Becca as Jaime could outlive her sister by centuries? Also I wonder how much of the material in Bella and Jaime is bio-synthetic because weather or not they are still vulnerable to being changed by Vampire venom could be an issue.

Finally a thought that occurred to me is that you have Jamie and Bella running at 70 MPH. I read an article once that said that the human body is physically capable of running at 40 MPH only limited by how fast the muscle tissue can expand and contract and the skeleton and absorber the shock generated by such movement. I will try looking it up and E-mailing the link to you.

You have a lot of fun things going on in this story and I am going to be sure to follow it.
8/2/2010 c3 Partying In Canada
This is a really interesting story, I can't wait to read more!
7/28/2010 c3 mwjen
Great story thanks for posting.
7/23/2010 c2 1DrawnToTheNight
really gd

i didnt this idea would work but im so gland it did

drawntothenight
7/20/2010 c1 2Jack Cassidy
HEY! i !LOVE! this story!

unfortunately i cant access the second chapter, but i like where it's going!

Please update soon!
5/27/2010 c1 BakerStreetIsLastRefugeOfHope
A great story. Very well written.

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