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3/29/2010 c1 22CFenrir
I'm not one for poetry for real so I can't comment much on the technical parts of the piece, but the feeling it invoked in me was relatively strong.

To me, it felt like an ode to Su more than a soft lament of later days. You posed it in such away to stay away from outright confirming what she wants in the present, but it comes across as a snapshot of kid being content with having fun and spending time with someone important. While I'm not really big on poems and don't have much of an opinion on them, I can definitely say I liked this one.

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