for Waylon Jones: The Deepest Darkness7/9/2014 c1 SkullduggeryFowl
Awesome story
Calm down on the swearing maybe? My opinion though it's your story
I like how you brought killer croc out as a dangerous monster so well
Awesome story
Calm down on the swearing maybe? My opinion though it's your story
I like how you brought killer croc out as a dangerous monster so well
10/28/2013 c6 
1Last Auditore
(Let me just say: the last 4 reviews have been posted via phone, meaning Swype, meaning if anything is in there wrong... Well... Yeah. I blame that. Now let's continue.)
I always figured that Croc was abused as a child, and you touched on that area as well, without going too far into the subject.
It was nice to see that in his darkest moment he had someone that he could look back on to help guide him. He should find a troupe after this, who will accept him, and just stick with them.
He could hug Batman... Well maybe not. I'll admit to laughing at that. Priceless. Can you imagine the look on Batman's face? He wouldn't know how to take it.
It was nice to see a little redemption for the character, especially since that's rare for villains.
Overall, enjoyed the fic, and liked your portrayal of an otherwise difficult character. You made him human while others would focus more on his animal instincts.
1Last Auditore(Let me just say: the last 4 reviews have been posted via phone, meaning Swype, meaning if anything is in there wrong... Well... Yeah. I blame that. Now let's continue.)
I always figured that Croc was abused as a child, and you touched on that area as well, without going too far into the subject.
It was nice to see that in his darkest moment he had someone that he could look back on to help guide him. He should find a troupe after this, who will accept him, and just stick with them.
He could hug Batman... Well maybe not. I'll admit to laughing at that. Priceless. Can you imagine the look on Batman's face? He wouldn't know how to take it.
It was nice to see a little redemption for the character, especially since that's rare for villains.
Overall, enjoyed the fic, and liked your portrayal of an otherwise difficult character. You made him human while others would focus more on his animal instincts.
10/28/2013 c5 Last Auditore
Only thing to say from an edit standpoint: end of paragraph 2, you say 'he was a afraid of me'. Other than that, another superb chapter.
One thing I was wondering: were the splashes made by batarangs hitting the water? Should he swing his arms up? Is the Bat hanging from the ceiling, throwing batarangs to throw him off, and just screw with him? If so: Bruce, that's a little mean... Croc has enough problems.
When he was darting around attacking the air, and all he got was laughter, I started to wonder if it was Bane somehow. (Not sure how he got there, but it could happen.)
Really curious to see who is messing with him. They're in for a whole lot of pain once he catches them.
Only thing to say from an edit standpoint: end of paragraph 2, you say 'he was a afraid of me'. Other than that, another superb chapter.
One thing I was wondering: were the splashes made by batarangs hitting the water? Should he swing his arms up? Is the Bat hanging from the ceiling, throwing batarangs to throw him off, and just screw with him? If so: Bruce, that's a little mean... Croc has enough problems.
When he was darting around attacking the air, and all he got was laughter, I started to wonder if it was Bane somehow. (Not sure how he got there, but it could happen.)
Really curious to see who is messing with him. They're in for a whole lot of pain once he catches them.
10/28/2013 c4 Last Auditore
Perfect comparison of the ruler to the guillotine. Well placed, and made the scene perfect.
Poor Croc. Lost all his friends when all he was looking for was a little acceptance. Something that everyone can identify with on some level. Just another reason for him to justify hating Batman. Place the
blame on the easiest thing.
Going in circles? That would be bloody frustrating. Ugh. I would get so annoyed so quick.
Lol. A batarang. Nice. The instant you said that it was curved on both ends I knew what it was.
The part from where he found the batarang to the end was gold. Cussing out the Bat. So in character. Other reviews said to tone down the language, I think that it's just where it should be. Perfect portrayal of the character. Very well done.
Perfect comparison of the ruler to the guillotine. Well placed, and made the scene perfect.
Poor Croc. Lost all his friends when all he was looking for was a little acceptance. Something that everyone can identify with on some level. Just another reason for him to justify hating Batman. Place the
blame on the easiest thing.
Going in circles? That would be bloody frustrating. Ugh. I would get so annoyed so quick.
Lol. A batarang. Nice. The instant you said that it was curved on both ends I knew what it was.
The part from where he found the batarang to the end was gold. Cussing out the Bat. So in character. Other reviews said to tone down the language, I think that it's just where it should be. Perfect portrayal of the character. Very well done.
10/28/2013 c3 Last Auditore
Let's start by saying that Waylon likes his comfort food.
I liked the part where he was questioning his fear, and he determined that he's Killer Croc! What does he have to be afraid of? L I don't know what it was about that part, but I thought it was fun. That's right you are! Go get 'em!
Seems that he'll really eat anything...
Never thought I'd say that I'd be routing for Croc, but here I am. I enjoyed the last paragraph. Really looking forward to where this goes. Don't know why I never finished reading the first time. Looks great so far.
Let's start by saying that Waylon likes his comfort food.
I liked the part where he was questioning his fear, and he determined that he's Killer Croc! What does he have to be afraid of? L I don't know what it was about that part, but I thought it was fun. That's right you are! Go get 'em!
Seems that he'll really eat anything...
Never thought I'd say that I'd be routing for Croc, but here I am. I enjoyed the last paragraph. Really looking forward to where this goes. Don't know why I never finished reading the first time. Looks great so far.
12/12/2012 c2 Last Auditore
Back again.
I felt like I was trapped in those tunnels with poor Croc, and the stagnant water was almost discouraging. Made me wonder if Batman realized fully or even cared that Killer Croc was now trapped in a section of the sewers not common to himself without anything to eat or any obvious way out.
More very nicely placed similes with the black trash bag over the face, and the water drops sounding like the ticking of a bomb. As if staying in Arkham wasn’t enough to make someone crazy that certainly would be. Nothing more annoying than a dripping faucet.
If Gordon hadn’t sent him to Arkham instead of Black Gate there would be a lot less criminals there, and Croc might be that much closer to being a respected and notorious criminal instead of just a freak.
I enjoyed Croc’s thoughts about Joker’s motive a great deal. Looking forward to the rest of it.
Back again.
I felt like I was trapped in those tunnels with poor Croc, and the stagnant water was almost discouraging. Made me wonder if Batman realized fully or even cared that Killer Croc was now trapped in a section of the sewers not common to himself without anything to eat or any obvious way out.
More very nicely placed similes with the black trash bag over the face, and the water drops sounding like the ticking of a bomb. As if staying in Arkham wasn’t enough to make someone crazy that certainly would be. Nothing more annoying than a dripping faucet.
If Gordon hadn’t sent him to Arkham instead of Black Gate there would be a lot less criminals there, and Croc might be that much closer to being a respected and notorious criminal instead of just a freak.
I enjoyed Croc’s thoughts about Joker’s motive a great deal. Looking forward to the rest of it.
12/12/2012 c1 Last Auditore
This is one of those stories that deserve more attention than it gets. That being said, let’s dive into this.
I found the starting paragraph a little choppy, but after that it seemed to flow much better. I like the fact that it’s from Croc’s point of view. He’s a character that doesn’t get much attention.
My favorite parts from this chapter were his musing that Joker was going to fail, and the comparison of Batman to a can of tuna. So far a good insight into the mind of Waylon.
This is one of those stories that deserve more attention than it gets. That being said, let’s dive into this.
I found the starting paragraph a little choppy, but after that it seemed to flow much better. I like the fact that it’s from Croc’s point of view. He’s a character that doesn’t get much attention.
My favorite parts from this chapter were his musing that Joker was going to fail, and the comparison of Batman to a can of tuna. So far a good insight into the mind of Waylon.
11/27/2012 c6 40evolution-500
I LOVE THIS FIC! You really nailed the character. There aren't a lot of superhero characters (or villains for that matter) that have to deal with the issue of deformity. Seeing Croc at his most vulnerable really connects the reader with him. If anything, I wished that the comics had this type of resolution for him.
40evolution-500I LOVE THIS FIC! You really nailed the character. There aren't a lot of superhero characters (or villains for that matter) that have to deal with the issue of deformity. Seeing Croc at his most vulnerable really connects the reader with him. If anything, I wished that the comics had this type of resolution for him.
11/14/2010 c1 dd.iampc
little less cussing would do
little less cussing would do