4/5/2010 c1 miss-harry-potter-weasley
Okay i think this story really has potential i love the setup/ premise for this story but if i'm being constructive, the layout is very confusing, you switch between points of view without telling the reader, which was a bit confusing and there are a few mistakes such as "It was you wasn't you" Which didn't make sense or had the right grammar. Please don't be discouraged this story really has promise, if you found yourself a Beta, you could improve this story and it would be a great and interesting read but for the moment it's a bit confusing. Good luck and i hope i haven't discouraged you. x