for Nothing7/3/2012 c1 
2tangerinee
Hm, I always wondered what would happen to Bruce (' sanity) when the time for Alfred has come...he should tell Gordon about the Batman thing, so he has someone left to be himself around.
Back to the story: As I said, I also thought about the topic, and I think you pictured Bruce and his feelings/thoughts very well. And this idiot of a billionaire definitely deserved a broken jaw. Good Bruce.
Good job!
2tangerineeHm, I always wondered what would happen to Bruce (' sanity) when the time for Alfred has come...he should tell Gordon about the Batman thing, so he has someone left to be himself around.
Back to the story: As I said, I also thought about the topic, and I think you pictured Bruce and his feelings/thoughts very well. And this idiot of a billionaire definitely deserved a broken jaw. Good Bruce.
Good job!
4/24/2010 c1 2J. Grace Kaulitz
OH MY EMO JESUS KATE, YOU HAVE MANAGED TO GET ME TO CRY. if you wanted to you could turn this into a whole story. with a love interest. or omg! what if alfred had a son no one knew about? idek. this just made me want more.
2J. Grace KaulitzOH MY EMO JESUS KATE, YOU HAVE MANAGED TO GET ME TO CRY. if you wanted to you could turn this into a whole story. with a love interest. or omg! what if alfred had a son no one knew about? idek. this just made me want more.
4/6/2010 c1 2Rebel Sympathizer
I always wonder why bad stories are reviewed faster than the good ones. Well, never mind that.
Your story is good. Of course, I've spoted some misspellings and I don't understand what you mean by saying: "A whole enveloped his chest, a yawning crevasse that threatened to swallow him whole.", but maybe that's because English isn't my native language.
Anyway, what induced me to comment your story are the characters and your plot. I like Alfred and Bruce very much. In your story you made them realistic, with Alfred being too proud to tell Bruce about his illness and Bruce breaking down and hitting that man. Also, I liked that you showed that there is Brucie, Bruce and the Batman, that they are not the same person and that death of Alfred will affect them not in the same degree.
So, I think your story is good and I liked it.
2Rebel SympathizerI always wonder why bad stories are reviewed faster than the good ones. Well, never mind that.
Your story is good. Of course, I've spoted some misspellings and I don't understand what you mean by saying: "A whole enveloped his chest, a yawning crevasse that threatened to swallow him whole.", but maybe that's because English isn't my native language.
Anyway, what induced me to comment your story are the characters and your plot. I like Alfred and Bruce very much. In your story you made them realistic, with Alfred being too proud to tell Bruce about his illness and Bruce breaking down and hitting that man. Also, I liked that you showed that there is Brucie, Bruce and the Batman, that they are not the same person and that death of Alfred will affect them not in the same degree.
So, I think your story is good and I liked it.