for First Date(Dropped)6/1/2010 c3 
14Melancholic Yuu
I'm sorry for your boy problems, I hope it works out
Ad this story is so cute!
I cant wait for the update
14Melancholic YuuI'm sorry for your boy problems, I hope it works out
Ad this story is so cute!
I cant wait for the update
5/19/2010 c2 dragonheart3
Hey! I like the idea of this story. I realized I kinda enjoy Kanda/Allen/Lavi now. :3 I'm a Yullen and a Laven fan, so...:3
And carnivals? I haven't really been to one, but I've got plenty of ideas! :D Besides the merry-go-rounds, and games where you win plush toys and ferris wheels, there is ALWAYS a kissing booth. (This should be fun :D ) There are bumper cars and that thing where you hit the hammer on a scale thingy and see how high the ball goes up (yeah I suck at explaining, but Lavi would win this for sure lol). And, well...that's all I can think of right now.
As for ideas for this story, I have a few small requests ( I hope you don't mind). Can you add some Laven in there too? It can be one way only, but it has benefits, like satisfying my Laven hunger (cuz that's SOOO important, lol jk) and it also has Yullen, because it involves Kanda getting jealous. :DD And you could (remember, these are only suggestions/requests, you don't have to do them if you don't want to) add Tyki and Rhode in there for some fun. We all know how they love Allen. Or, if you wanted to add a twist, make Tyki chase Lavi around lol. And that is all for my suggestions, because I feel I am going too far. T_T
Anyways, great story idea! It's simple yet so original, and I don't think I've seen it done so far. And your grammar and spelling is great! Usually people, (like myself) misspell at least ONE word, but you have it down! :D The characters personalities are IC for the most part. This story has a lot of potential, and I hope you go far with it, cuz I'll be here reading it! :DD I wish you would lengthen the chapters but I can't ask for everything. ;)
Keep up the good work! This has a lot of potential!
Hey! I like the idea of this story. I realized I kinda enjoy Kanda/Allen/Lavi now. :3 I'm a Yullen and a Laven fan, so...:3
And carnivals? I haven't really been to one, but I've got plenty of ideas! :D Besides the merry-go-rounds, and games where you win plush toys and ferris wheels, there is ALWAYS a kissing booth. (This should be fun :D ) There are bumper cars and that thing where you hit the hammer on a scale thingy and see how high the ball goes up (yeah I suck at explaining, but Lavi would win this for sure lol). And, well...that's all I can think of right now.
As for ideas for this story, I have a few small requests ( I hope you don't mind). Can you add some Laven in there too? It can be one way only, but it has benefits, like satisfying my Laven hunger (cuz that's SOOO important, lol jk) and it also has Yullen, because it involves Kanda getting jealous. :DD And you could (remember, these are only suggestions/requests, you don't have to do them if you don't want to) add Tyki and Rhode in there for some fun. We all know how they love Allen. Or, if you wanted to add a twist, make Tyki chase Lavi around lol. And that is all for my suggestions, because I feel I am going too far. T_T
Anyways, great story idea! It's simple yet so original, and I don't think I've seen it done so far. And your grammar and spelling is great! Usually people, (like myself) misspell at least ONE word, but you have it down! :D The characters personalities are IC for the most part. This story has a lot of potential, and I hope you go far with it, cuz I'll be here reading it! :DD I wish you would lengthen the chapters but I can't ask for everything. ;)
Keep up the good work! This has a lot of potential!
4/11/2010 c2 Candyone11
Oh, Well a carnival is full of people and there are stalls with the sides full of plush toys of different sizes and if you win the game there you can pick a big one and if you lose you can still get a small one. The game can be like throwing a ball at bottles to topple them or shooting water at balloons until they pop and the first to do so wins or are you thinking of a Japanese carnival but wait they are in England so it would be like that. Also there are rides. like the kind at amusement parks. But you can't forget the food! there are lots of stalls of food! and you can smell them a long ways away! (I'm getting excited?) um... Roller Coasters and such. Yup.
Oh, Well a carnival is full of people and there are stalls with the sides full of plush toys of different sizes and if you win the game there you can pick a big one and if you lose you can still get a small one. The game can be like throwing a ball at bottles to topple them or shooting water at balloons until they pop and the first to do so wins or are you thinking of a Japanese carnival but wait they are in England so it would be like that. Also there are rides. like the kind at amusement parks. But you can't forget the food! there are lots of stalls of food! and you can smell them a long ways away! (I'm getting excited?) um... Roller Coasters and such. Yup.
4/7/2010 c1 Candyone11
Damn, you have some beautiful grammar. Chapter is short and sweet. Pretty good. But if you are going to have Kanda swear or anything farther than kissing, then you you need to up the rating. Pretty good Little Missy. Keep it up!
Damn, you have some beautiful grammar. Chapter is short and sweet. Pretty good. But if you are going to have Kanda swear or anything farther than kissing, then you you need to up the rating. Pretty good Little Missy. Keep it up!
4/7/2010 c1 1Xx.Aya.n.Hachi.xX
uwa!~ this was good~ keep it up and update soon! allen and kanda + ferris wheel + carnival = CUTE 3 XD
-Aya and Hachi-
1Xx.Aya.n.Hachi.xXuwa!~ this was good~ keep it up and update soon! allen and kanda + ferris wheel + carnival = CUTE 3 XD
-Aya and Hachi-
4/7/2010 c1 9LadyLocket
Oh... I can't wait till the next chappie... Kanda and Allen kiss on the highest point of the wheel... AW! I can't wait! you did good, don't worry. I hope I can see more of your fanfics. Keep it up!
9LadyLocketOh... I can't wait till the next chappie... Kanda and Allen kiss on the highest point of the wheel... AW! I can't wait! you did good, don't worry. I hope I can see more of your fanfics. Keep it up!