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4/29/2011 c1 7Jaylea Nyx Felesian
Very well written! The words flow together perfectly and over all complement each other. You were very detail and it filled the words out. However the plot isn't that great, I'm sad to say. I rarely read "what if" plot simply because most of them are re-writes such as this. Not saying I don't like it but you really didn't make it your own but simply went with the actual story in a different location/time. While your writing is flawless I just find your plot didn't live up to how well you could write, but hey thats just my idea others may think differently.
3/18/2011 c1 11archangelBBQ
I really liked this! Have you decided not to write any more on it? I'll be honest, it's been a while since I've seen KareKano, so the characters aren't too fresh in my mind, but I do love the banter between Arima and Miyazaki. It's an interesting setting and situation-the blackmail dates could be very interesting, I imagine. Even if you don't continue it, I was very happy to read this one installment. Your writing is excellent! I love their back-and-forth, the way you develop the situation around them. The descriptions are perfect! Miyazawa transforming out of her demure and proper lady facade, and Arima's conniving plan as it takes hold of him. It was a very enjoyable story! :3

cheers!

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10/15/2010 c1 20Ree-Vance
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