for The Darkness Within:The Rewrite11/12 c46 Drag7
So what if Harry's childhood was a lie? He still believes all the same nonsense as Voldemort. How does this whole betrayal scenario magically change all his beliefs and what side he's on?
So what if Harry's childhood was a lie? He still believes all the same nonsense as Voldemort. How does this whole betrayal scenario magically change all his beliefs and what side he's on?
11/11 c27 Drag7
Dark characters are only interesting when they are calm, controlled and calculating, not deranged and unstable as in Voldemorts case or angsty and deluded as in Harrys case.
Dark characters are only interesting when they are calm, controlled and calculating, not deranged and unstable as in Voldemorts case or angsty and deluded as in Harrys case.
11/11 c15 Drag7
Too many loopholes:
Since Voldemort is still alive and well, why has he not won the war he was already winning? If the ministry was mostly under death eater control and the minister was Malfoys puppet back when Voldemort was dead originally, why now when Voldemort is still alive is his influence much less? How does the ministry controlled by old and mostly pureblood houses suddenly stop being controlled by them?
The trial of Harry is something that both Dumbledores light faction and Voldemorts dark faction, the two largest and most powerful factions, actually agree on. And yet somehow, even together, they hold no influence in the minustry. Fudge has seemingly become an all powerful being out of nowhere, and a live and well Voldemort has become less competent and influential than a dead and ghostly one.
Too many loopholes:
Since Voldemort is still alive and well, why has he not won the war he was already winning? If the ministry was mostly under death eater control and the minister was Malfoys puppet back when Voldemort was dead originally, why now when Voldemort is still alive is his influence much less? How does the ministry controlled by old and mostly pureblood houses suddenly stop being controlled by them?
The trial of Harry is something that both Dumbledores light faction and Voldemorts dark faction, the two largest and most powerful factions, actually agree on. And yet somehow, even together, they hold no influence in the minustry. Fudge has seemingly become an all powerful being out of nowhere, and a live and well Voldemort has become less competent and influential than a dead and ghostly one.
10/23 c58 Home World Security
An incredible story thus far. I hope to see some updates soon. Keep up the outstanding work.
An incredible story thus far. I hope to see some updates soon. Keep up the outstanding work.
9/22 c19 PinkPigsDontFly
I love the last comment, but already earlier when he was mentioned chapters ago I was like hmm.. He must be following the right path this time which is better if you ask me
I love the last comment, but already earlier when he was mentioned chapters ago I was like hmm.. He must be following the right path this time which is better if you ask me
9/14 c58 Lyrsa
Long no see, or other words, long time no reading you wonderful yet hurtful in same time.
I surprised when looking at my favorite story in upper list for updates, it's long time ago and i definitely forgot the story but never mind i can read it again since begining,
Enough with this little talk, hopefully you're healthy and happy so can update regularly
Ps. Your egoism reader
Long no see, or other words, long time no reading you wonderful yet hurtful in same time.
I surprised when looking at my favorite story in upper list for updates, it's long time ago and i definitely forgot the story but never mind i can read it again since begining,
Enough with this little talk, hopefully you're healthy and happy so can update regularly
Ps. Your egoism reader
8/29 c58 Rachel
I’ve never written a review to any author but I feel the need to do so. I just want to thank you for this wonderful story and universe.
I started reading this when I was a teenager and I literally became obsessed and it helped me cope with difficult situations. English is not my first language so I had to make an effort in order to understand everything.
Some weeks ago, I remembered and felt the need to read it again and it is amazing how it made me feel again and all the memories it brought.
I hope you continue with this re-write and even if you don’t I appreciate all your hard work.
I’ve never written a review to any author but I feel the need to do so. I just want to thank you for this wonderful story and universe.
I started reading this when I was a teenager and I literally became obsessed and it helped me cope with difficult situations. English is not my first language so I had to make an effort in order to understand everything.
Some weeks ago, I remembered and felt the need to read it again and it is amazing how it made me feel again and all the memories it brought.
I hope you continue with this re-write and even if you don’t I appreciate all your hard work.
18/20 c1 Guest
I have been waiting fot this for three years .I am so happy you decided to go writing back .Hope you update soon .And please dont kill bella
I have been waiting fot this for three years .I am so happy you decided to go writing back .Hope you update soon .And please dont kill bella
8/9 c58 Sky
Plssss update and make a new story plssss
Plssss update and make a new story plssss
7/30 c58 Guest
I want to know what happens! I made a mistake reading this when it was never finished! Please, I know this is not going to amount to anything, but please keep writing!
I want to know what happens! I made a mistake reading this when it was never finished! Please, I know this is not going to amount to anything, but please keep writing!
7/30 c56 Guest
This is taking a totally different route from your other story, and I am sad that you stop writing in two chapters!
This is taking a totally different route from your other story, and I am sad that you stop writing in two chapters!
7/29 c33 Guest
Shattered trust... I'd say
Shattered trust... I'd say