for The Darkness Within:The Rewrite6/23/2010 c12 Die in a hole with Penguins
You... are a horrible person, always leaving the chapters off at the cliffhangers! ugh! ...at least you update regularly!
You... are a horrible person, always leaving the chapters off at the cliffhangers! ugh! ...at least you update regularly!
6/23/2010 c12 SalonK
Absolutely enthralling.
Such intensity you build! Great, great pacing. But here is another chapter gone by and I'm still waiting for the confrontation! Argh! Hurry up with the next one, will you?
I think it's fairly safe to say that James has figured it out. So glad he managed to save Harry in the nick of time.
Absolutely enthralling.
Such intensity you build! Great, great pacing. But here is another chapter gone by and I'm still waiting for the confrontation! Argh! Hurry up with the next one, will you?
I think it's fairly safe to say that James has figured it out. So glad he managed to save Harry in the nick of time.
6/23/2010 c12 jessica
OMG THIS IS SO GOOD ALMOST AS GOOD AS THE FIRST ONE.PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE WRITE MORE
OMG THIS IS SO GOOD ALMOST AS GOOD AS THE FIRST ONE.PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE WRITE MORE
6/23/2010 c12 
6kamuinoyume
The flood scene seemed a little unnecessary to me. I mean, I guess it was supposed to build tension because James was finally going to see Harry, but that's what the last chapter did, and so, I find this one rather useless, and much of a tension-breaker.
Oh, and please stop using the same work over and over again! I must have read that word "watter" in every paragraph of the last bit. It gets annoying.
And PS: In the original fic, didn't Voldemort tell Harry that the pendant was charmed to be invisible to anyone besides the two? Why have it visible this time around?
6kamuinoyumeThe flood scene seemed a little unnecessary to me. I mean, I guess it was supposed to build tension because James was finally going to see Harry, but that's what the last chapter did, and so, I find this one rather useless, and much of a tension-breaker.
Oh, and please stop using the same work over and over again! I must have read that word "watter" in every paragraph of the last bit. It gets annoying.
And PS: In the original fic, didn't Voldemort tell Harry that the pendant was charmed to be invisible to anyone besides the two? Why have it visible this time around?
6/23/2010 c12 susaninha
this chapter was below what I was expecting..
I don't like the flood scene, I think that it was a little forced
I hope next one is better
this chapter was below what I was expecting..
I don't like the flood scene, I think that it was a little forced
I hope next one is better
6/23/2010 c12 3Go10
This chapter was written so flawlessly that it surprised me. I'm not sure if you had this sort of inspiration toward the end of Deepest Reflection.
This also reflects a really big change from the original Darkness Within.
It'll be interesting to see how Harry treats James from now on.
3Go10This chapter was written so flawlessly that it surprised me. I'm not sure if you had this sort of inspiration toward the end of Deepest Reflection.
This also reflects a really big change from the original Darkness Within.
It'll be interesting to see how Harry treats James from now on.
6/23/2010 c12 Fudgebaby
Oh I am loving the rewrite! I can't wait for the next chapter!
Oh I am loving the rewrite! I can't wait for the next chapter!
6/23/2010 c12 3limapickle
yeah, this is amazing. liking this rewrite alot. I didn't realize it was going to be so different.
3limapickleyeah, this is amazing. liking this rewrite alot. I didn't realize it was going to be so different.
6/23/2010 c1 ILoveTrevorToad
I loved this chapter. I think this rewrite is a massive improvement of the original, but the original is still amazing as well! Please update sooon! i really want to read the next chapter!
I loved this chapter. I think this rewrite is a massive improvement of the original, but the original is still amazing as well! Please update sooon! i really want to read the next chapter!