for Hello5/16/2010 c1 MJPIPER74
This song is beautiful and haunting and you brought out those same feelings in their story. I had heard the song before but I don't think I had truly listened to it. You did an amazing job of weaving their story along with the song lyrics.
This song is beautiful and haunting and you brought out those same feelings in their story. I had heard the song before but I don't think I had truly listened to it. You did an amazing job of weaving their story along with the song lyrics.
5/16/2010 c1 
31theladyingrey42
I actually didn't know that song. Just listened and it's lovely. As is your writing. The desperation and sadness Bella felt and the way she took it all on herself all but killed me. The ending was magical and poetic.
31theladyingrey42I actually didn't know that song. Just listened and it's lovely. As is your writing. The desperation and sadness Bella felt and the way she took it all on herself all but killed me. The ending was magical and poetic.
5/16/2010 c1 kinsano
WOW! That was powerful! I loved it! I try to avoid stories where one dies, but I've realized that as long as Bella and Edward are together, I don't care in what form.
WOW! That was powerful! I loved it! I try to avoid stories where one dies, but I've realized that as long as Bella and Edward are together, I don't care in what form.
5/16/2010 c1 cullengirl1983
Oh God, I love this. I'm just speechless. This is beautiful. I love the ending... just WOW. Incredible job.
This killed me:
""Take me, God," I hear him chant in a whisper. "Let me be with her. Give me this. Let me have the chance to tell her that she was wrong. Let me show her how much I love her. Let me make it right. It's all my fault, God. I failed her. I messed everything up. I should have told her everything. I should have explained. I should have quit. I shouldn't have ever let her believe she wasn't my entire world.
"Please, please, let me be with her. Take me! Please, I beg for your mercy. I can't survive this. She is my life.""
Just the misunderstanding of it all. The regret and grief. GOD.
Amazing. Keep doing these odd little projects... You always warn us and they turn out beautiful.
Oh God, I love this. I'm just speechless. This is beautiful. I love the ending... just WOW. Incredible job.
This killed me:
""Take me, God," I hear him chant in a whisper. "Let me be with her. Give me this. Let me have the chance to tell her that she was wrong. Let me show her how much I love her. Let me make it right. It's all my fault, God. I failed her. I messed everything up. I should have told her everything. I should have explained. I should have quit. I shouldn't have ever let her believe she wasn't my entire world.
"Please, please, let me be with her. Take me! Please, I beg for your mercy. I can't survive this. She is my life.""
Just the misunderstanding of it all. The regret and grief. GOD.
Amazing. Keep doing these odd little projects... You always warn us and they turn out beautiful.
5/16/2010 c1 pixiekat7
Oh Kate,
This, this...god, so tragically beautiful. The song was perfect, that with your words, I sobbed, I'm shattered, but underneath it all is love, so much love.
Thanks BB!
~Kat
Oh Kate,
This, this...god, so tragically beautiful. The song was perfect, that with your words, I sobbed, I'm shattered, but underneath it all is love, so much love.
Thanks BB!
~Kat
5/16/2010 c1 lippylou
Hi Kate
Wow, I loved this. I know it's different from what you usually write, but that doesn't mean that it's bad. I was crying at Edward's anguish & Bella's regret. You are a wonderful writer.
There's something about an Evanescence song, isn't there? Every time I hear My Immortal an idea for a story races through my head. I'm just not brave enough to write anything.
Thanks for posting this even though you weren't sure.
Annette
Hi Kate
Wow, I loved this. I know it's different from what you usually write, but that doesn't mean that it's bad. I was crying at Edward's anguish & Bella's regret. You are a wonderful writer.
There's something about an Evanescence song, isn't there? Every time I hear My Immortal an idea for a story races through my head. I'm just not brave enough to write anything.
Thanks for posting this even though you weren't sure.
Annette
5/16/2010 c1 Leo85
I just can't believe how good your writing is. It just takes me into the world you're describing, every time.. Although this has a sad tone, it's still beautifully written. And I love it :)
I just can't believe how good your writing is. It just takes me into the world you're describing, every time.. Although this has a sad tone, it's still beautifully written. And I love it :)
5/16/2010 c1 deenerneener
Oh my god, Kate, that was excruciating (in the best possible way). The alternate ending of New Moon, or Breaking Dawn.
Their parallel prayers are what really got the waterworks going. I can almost see the scene, a 'video' maybe much like the one you saw, as they beg a would-be god for another chance to be together.
Even when they were reunited, the tears were still laced as much with pain as joy, questioning, still, if this could possibly be real, or the next step beyond reality. If they could really be together again.
And then when they moved outside, into a vivid sunny day, aaaaaaah. The scene that came to mind then was from the movie What Dreams May Come (did you ever see that? Robin Williams and Annabella Sciorra): oversaturated colors; not quite real, not quite not. (Loved that line, by the way.)
I hope their together is forever, too. (Thank you for giving them a happy ending, for however long. Even the blink of an eye, a photograph frozen in time, is something. And because it's frozen and the last thing we look at, it doesn't really matter what happens next, if anything at all).
Another sterling job! Thank you for sharing it. And PERFECT song; the lead singer of Evanescence has such an ethereal, haunting voice, a tone with such purity, that it seems made to sing these songs of exquisite anguish and heartache (just like My Immortal).
Okay, time for more tissue and then to sleep. I'm emotionally wrung out.
As always, I look forward to whatever next flows forth from that pen of yours.
All the best.
Oh my god, Kate, that was excruciating (in the best possible way). The alternate ending of New Moon, or Breaking Dawn.
Their parallel prayers are what really got the waterworks going. I can almost see the scene, a 'video' maybe much like the one you saw, as they beg a would-be god for another chance to be together.
Even when they were reunited, the tears were still laced as much with pain as joy, questioning, still, if this could possibly be real, or the next step beyond reality. If they could really be together again.
And then when they moved outside, into a vivid sunny day, aaaaaaah. The scene that came to mind then was from the movie What Dreams May Come (did you ever see that? Robin Williams and Annabella Sciorra): oversaturated colors; not quite real, not quite not. (Loved that line, by the way.)
I hope their together is forever, too. (Thank you for giving them a happy ending, for however long. Even the blink of an eye, a photograph frozen in time, is something. And because it's frozen and the last thing we look at, it doesn't really matter what happens next, if anything at all).
Another sterling job! Thank you for sharing it. And PERFECT song; the lead singer of Evanescence has such an ethereal, haunting voice, a tone with such purity, that it seems made to sing these songs of exquisite anguish and heartache (just like My Immortal).
Okay, time for more tissue and then to sleep. I'm emotionally wrung out.
As always, I look forward to whatever next flows forth from that pen of yours.
All the best.
5/16/2010 c1 Happy Emo Loves MUSE
This was really good. You made me cry when reading that Edward joined Bella. I Love this one!
This was really good. You made me cry when reading that Edward joined Bella. I Love this one!
5/16/2010 c1 FeistyPalooka
Wow, that was so heartbreaking but so freaking good! Honestly, I cried it was so good. Freaking Tanya! They should go and haunt her or something, give her some payback! But seriously, this was an awesome story.
I loved when Bella is talking about their marriage "And we loved each other. God, did we love each other. Physically, emotionally, mentally, we were one and the same." :) I wanna cry just re-reading that.
I think what makes this so good is that you made it all seem so real...Their life together, their problems all things that could happen to anyone. Amazing job, can't wait to see what else you write.
Wow, that was so heartbreaking but so freaking good! Honestly, I cried it was so good. Freaking Tanya! They should go and haunt her or something, give her some payback! But seriously, this was an awesome story.
I loved when Bella is talking about their marriage "And we loved each other. God, did we love each other. Physically, emotionally, mentally, we were one and the same." :) I wanna cry just re-reading that.
I think what makes this so good is that you made it all seem so real...Their life together, their problems all things that could happen to anyone. Amazing job, can't wait to see what else you write.