for Erised11/4/2015 c1 jumenhy56omnn
This was a breath of fresh air, not all stories have to end happily to be good, and this far exceeded expectations!
This was a breath of fresh air, not all stories have to end happily to be good, and this far exceeded expectations!
4/20/2013 c1 Ali
This was amazing... :)
This was amazing... :)
10/10/2011 c1 Mitzzi
This is a really interesting way to write time travel, and probably more realistic. Nicely done!
This is a really interesting way to write time travel, and probably more realistic. Nicely done!
4/28/2011 c1 Laurie Jupiter
Incredible fic! I had a craving for some Next Gen and young Voldie story and I stumbled upon this gem. I must say that I was pleasantly surprised at the amount of characterization and angst packed into this one-shot. Yeah, Ginny (at least to me) never seemed to be the type of person who showed any resilience to hardship and suffering. She was fiery, sure, but if we put her in Hermione's shoes she probably wouldn't last. I feel awfully sorry for Lily Luna here, as her acting up was probably a way of getting people to pay attention to her. Ginny certainly didn't endear herself with the criticisms and cold comments. The character flaw in Lily Luna was a genius! I suppose Ginny was right to some extent, in that Lily was too young and too rash for a mission like this. Someone with the ability to coldly analyze the situation and pick apart tiny details - someone on par with Tom in terms of intelligence, really, could probably handle this situation. The only one I could think of would be Hermione - she's very rational, logical and has the experience to back it up. I do feel sorry for Lily though - everyone just expected her to fall naturally into Harry's role as the saviour of the Wizarding World and she clearly did not have the ability to carry it out. Good job!
Incredible fic! I had a craving for some Next Gen and young Voldie story and I stumbled upon this gem. I must say that I was pleasantly surprised at the amount of characterization and angst packed into this one-shot. Yeah, Ginny (at least to me) never seemed to be the type of person who showed any resilience to hardship and suffering. She was fiery, sure, but if we put her in Hermione's shoes she probably wouldn't last. I feel awfully sorry for Lily Luna here, as her acting up was probably a way of getting people to pay attention to her. Ginny certainly didn't endear herself with the criticisms and cold comments. The character flaw in Lily Luna was a genius! I suppose Ginny was right to some extent, in that Lily was too young and too rash for a mission like this. Someone with the ability to coldly analyze the situation and pick apart tiny details - someone on par with Tom in terms of intelligence, really, could probably handle this situation. The only one I could think of would be Hermione - she's very rational, logical and has the experience to back it up. I do feel sorry for Lily though - everyone just expected her to fall naturally into Harry's role as the saviour of the Wizarding World and she clearly did not have the ability to carry it out. Good job!
7/26/2010 c1 
4E. Lovett
Great oneshot! I really enjoyed it, although some people may have gotten 'frightened' because of its length haha.
I loved it: original, unusual, exactly my style! I also liked how you kept he characters' personalities as they should be!
Keep up the great work!
4E. LovettGreat oneshot! I really enjoyed it, although some people may have gotten 'frightened' because of its length haha.
I loved it: original, unusual, exactly my style! I also liked how you kept he characters' personalities as they should be!
Keep up the great work!
7/1/2010 c1 2PiecesOfSerendipity
0_0 Wow. Brilliant, I love it - it's very twisted and the ending is fitting. The involvement of Dumbledore is a nice touch, as well.
I've never liked Ginny and I agree with you when you say she seems like the type who could become cold and distant.
I also like that you didn't twist Harry, like in other stories where he decides to run and gets killed, or is really cold. You portrayed him, whenever he does come up, as the canon, awesome Harry.
2PiecesOfSerendipity0_0 Wow. Brilliant, I love it - it's very twisted and the ending is fitting. The involvement of Dumbledore is a nice touch, as well.
I've never liked Ginny and I agree with you when you say she seems like the type who could become cold and distant.
I also like that you didn't twist Harry, like in other stories where he decides to run and gets killed, or is really cold. You portrayed him, whenever he does come up, as the canon, awesome Harry.
6/11/2010 c1 Sharon
I'm horny, you wanna have urethral sex?
I'm horny, you wanna have urethral sex?
5/28/2010 c1 JessieRedbird
Wonderfully strange...the weirdest couple ever...but I loved it. Favourited.
~JessieRedbird.
Wonderfully strange...the weirdest couple ever...but I loved it. Favourited.
~JessieRedbird.
5/27/2010 c1 4TheREALladyofthewest
"Th-this was very unfair of you to bring up, Lily Luna Potter," her mother said, her nostrils flaring, unable to keep out the fury in her voice. This time, she was madder at her own self than at her daughter; why did she have to write in that diary and confide in Tom Riddle? Why was she still in love with the person she knew he wasn't after all these years despite having given birth to someone else's child?"
1. I think "that was very unfair of you to bring up, Lily Luna Potter," might have fit better.
2. "Unable to keep out the fury in her voice." Not that it's a bad line, but it could've worked better phrased differently. "Her nostrils flaring, unable to keep the fury out of her voice."
3. "Madder at herself?" I think "This time she was more angry at herself than she was at her daughter."
4. I think that if you took "after all these years," out of the overall sentence "Why was she still in love with the person she knew he wasn't after all these years despite having given birth to someone else's child?" The sentence would make more sense as "Why was she still in love with the person she knew he wasn't despite having given birth to someone else's child?"
A good story.. just a few minor changes. (;
4TheREALladyofthewest"Th-this was very unfair of you to bring up, Lily Luna Potter," her mother said, her nostrils flaring, unable to keep out the fury in her voice. This time, she was madder at her own self than at her daughter; why did she have to write in that diary and confide in Tom Riddle? Why was she still in love with the person she knew he wasn't after all these years despite having given birth to someone else's child?"
1. I think "that was very unfair of you to bring up, Lily Luna Potter," might have fit better.
2. "Unable to keep out the fury in her voice." Not that it's a bad line, but it could've worked better phrased differently. "Her nostrils flaring, unable to keep the fury out of her voice."
3. "Madder at herself?" I think "This time she was more angry at herself than she was at her daughter."
4. I think that if you took "after all these years," out of the overall sentence "Why was she still in love with the person she knew he wasn't after all these years despite having given birth to someone else's child?" The sentence would make more sense as "Why was she still in love with the person she knew he wasn't despite having given birth to someone else's child?"
A good story.. just a few minor changes. (;
5/27/2010 c1 51chawk1993
Ginny is so evil! LOL! Oh god I love Harry! Why did you make him die? I love 2nd generation stories on the the trio and friend's kids. Will you write one on Victoire? Great job Clarisse. :)
51chawk1993Ginny is so evil! LOL! Oh god I love Harry! Why did you make him die? I love 2nd generation stories on the the trio and friend's kids. Will you write one on Victoire? Great job Clarisse. :)
5/24/2010 c1 34Shuna
Okay, I know that I said that I did not really like Next Gen characters, but I decided to read this anyway. I though that it was going to be a story wjere the Next Gen character falls in love with evil male character, here cast as Tom Riddle and that it was going to be a waste of time.
I was really surprised that this story was in fact very good. Not only was it refreshing to see Ginny as cold as she obviously was, you made sure that Lily Luna didn't get Tom. What more, she is one of the many others who fail at offing Tom Riddle. Instead, she escapes into her own dreamworld and mourns that it's not real. You don't see stories like that often enough, and it delightens me to see one.
So what I am saying that this story is really good and fairly original, and I hope to read more of your stories if they turn out to be as good as this was.
Love Shuna
34ShunaOkay, I know that I said that I did not really like Next Gen characters, but I decided to read this anyway. I though that it was going to be a story wjere the Next Gen character falls in love with evil male character, here cast as Tom Riddle and that it was going to be a waste of time.
I was really surprised that this story was in fact very good. Not only was it refreshing to see Ginny as cold as she obviously was, you made sure that Lily Luna didn't get Tom. What more, she is one of the many others who fail at offing Tom Riddle. Instead, she escapes into her own dreamworld and mourns that it's not real. You don't see stories like that often enough, and it delightens me to see one.
So what I am saying that this story is really good and fairly original, and I hope to read more of your stories if they turn out to be as good as this was.
Love Shuna