for Famished8/23/2010 c14 
8marylinevelyn
the moon theme is very well chosen for the whole pregnancy/sacred feminine business.
8marylinevelynthe moon theme is very well chosen for the whole pregnancy/sacred feminine business.
8/23/2010 c13 marylinevelyn
and yay creepy true blood lorena and bill inspired foreshadowing blood sex scene!
and yay creepy true blood lorena and bill inspired foreshadowing blood sex scene!
8/23/2010 c11 marylinevelyn
We've gone over the Marian/Catrine faceoff a thousand times and I am reasonably happy with the final. I like that Marian keeps walking past her and speaks over her shoulder at first. It's very subtle, and I can picture it very easily. My only complaint is that I would strike the couple sentences about their faces void of emotion, one woman staring at the other. I think it's trying in the wrong way to make the moment more important than it is.
Makes me heart break to imagine Marian walking away that way, probably thinking 'i will not show weakness, i will not show weakness'
We've gone over the Marian/Catrine faceoff a thousand times and I am reasonably happy with the final. I like that Marian keeps walking past her and speaks over her shoulder at first. It's very subtle, and I can picture it very easily. My only complaint is that I would strike the couple sentences about their faces void of emotion, one woman staring at the other. I think it's trying in the wrong way to make the moment more important than it is.
Makes me heart break to imagine Marian walking away that way, probably thinking 'i will not show weakness, i will not show weakness'
8/23/2010 c9 marylinevelyn
I like Catrine's soft "Don't leave", I love her vulnerable moments, especially in bed.
I like Catrine's soft "Don't leave", I love her vulnerable moments, especially in bed.
8/23/2010 c8 marylinevelyn
Oh this part with Marian breaks my heart, how alone she is, and how hard she's trying to do everything, even stuff like this that's way out of her league.
Oh this part with Marian breaks my heart, how alone she is, and how hard she's trying to do everything, even stuff like this that's way out of her league.
8/23/2010 c7 marylinevelyn
It's the Nightwatchman: dun dun da na NAAAA na na na NA na na na na na na na na-na-na
It's the Nightwatchman: dun dun da na NAAAA na na na NA na na na na na na na na-na-na
8/23/2010 c6 marylinevelyn
Well, personal fan not necessary for this chapter. For whatever reason the dialogue takes me out of it, but that's just my personal taste of course.
Well, personal fan not necessary for this chapter. For whatever reason the dialogue takes me out of it, but that's just my personal taste of course.
7/7/2010 c14 Lacie
Can't wait for your next story! :) I really liked reading this one
Can't wait for your next story! :) I really liked reading this one