for A Never Tale7/2/2012 c4 
3Gaaras1Girl
Nice to see you back again. :) Loved Sakura's talk with her inner self. You got the playful banter down perfectly!
-GG
3Gaaras1GirlNice to see you back again. :) Loved Sakura's talk with her inner self. You got the playful banter down perfectly!
-GG
7/1/2012 c4 Guest
This is an awesome story. Please keep working
on it!
This is an awesome story. Please keep working
on it!
6/28/2010 c3 TurtleGirl - Xiao Shi
I really enjoyed the chapter! It was quite action packed! I can't wait until the next one!
I really enjoyed the chapter! It was quite action packed! I can't wait until the next one!
6/28/2010 c3 3Gaaras1Girl
"Goddamnit!" Temaricursed" LoL wow you've got a few mistakes in this opening. Try like this: "God damn it!" Temari cursed"
LoL, baby sea turtles. Now that's a new name for tourists! Is Temari not rlated to Gaara in this fic? Or did you mean to put Tenten as the driver? Um, if you need a beta for this fic too I can help.
"Do we owe the violent heathen food?" roflmfao!
I seriously LOVE your Tenten! I've never cared for her either way until reading this fic but now I just adore her! And yes the chase scene was sweet! But why were the guys chasing her? What's going on! Argh! Answer me damn it! -shakes you-
Thanks for letting me know you updated this, I don't know why I didn't get an alert for it. :(
Anyway there really were quite a few mistakes in here, if you've already got a beta for this fic you might want to talk to her. Well I can't wait till next time love, this story gets better with each chapter!
3Gaaras1Girl"Goddamnit!" Temaricursed" LoL wow you've got a few mistakes in this opening. Try like this: "God damn it!" Temari cursed"
LoL, baby sea turtles. Now that's a new name for tourists! Is Temari not rlated to Gaara in this fic? Or did you mean to put Tenten as the driver? Um, if you need a beta for this fic too I can help.
"Do we owe the violent heathen food?" roflmfao!
I seriously LOVE your Tenten! I've never cared for her either way until reading this fic but now I just adore her! And yes the chase scene was sweet! But why were the guys chasing her? What's going on! Argh! Answer me damn it! -shakes you-
Thanks for letting me know you updated this, I don't know why I didn't get an alert for it. :(
Anyway there really were quite a few mistakes in here, if you've already got a beta for this fic you might want to talk to her. Well I can't wait till next time love, this story gets better with each chapter!
6/27/2010 c3 6QuietShadowz
pft ahahahaha i love the ending guy and lee dont really seem like rapists it just seems to uh unyothful unless there not guy and lee or there not rapests or there just meh never mind i have a feeling fariy godfather deidra is actualy some creeper and garra may or may not come to sakura,tenten and hinatas rescue or just sakura and hen threaten kankura if that was in fact kankuro and sakura will recognizehim and do something stupid or maybe hell recognize her do but im thinking that its the first one would the first one be the former or the latter i think its the former i dont know im babbling know so yeah update soon un ^^
6QuietShadowzpft ahahahaha i love the ending guy and lee dont really seem like rapists it just seems to uh unyothful unless there not guy and lee or there not rapests or there just meh never mind i have a feeling fariy godfather deidra is actualy some creeper and garra may or may not come to sakura,tenten and hinatas rescue or just sakura and hen threaten kankura if that was in fact kankuro and sakura will recognizehim and do something stupid or maybe hell recognize her do but im thinking that its the first one would the first one be the former or the latter i think its the former i dont know im babbling know so yeah update soon un ^^
6/27/2010 c3 18itachi2011
Well, I did what you said to do and read to chapter 3. And ... I .. love it ^_^ lol. This story is original, which you really don't see much anymore these days.
Grammar is at the top 10% that I've ever seen. (Not saying I judge on grammar, but seriously, you're posting for others to read. Grammar counts XD)
And I absolutely love everyone's personalities so far. After reading the first chapter, I didn't know what to expect for the next two.
Anyway, I can't wait until you continue and for another chapter :) ~itachi2011
18itachi2011Well, I did what you said to do and read to chapter 3. And ... I .. love it ^_^ lol. This story is original, which you really don't see much anymore these days.
Grammar is at the top 10% that I've ever seen. (Not saying I judge on grammar, but seriously, you're posting for others to read. Grammar counts XD)
And I absolutely love everyone's personalities so far. After reading the first chapter, I didn't know what to expect for the next two.
Anyway, I can't wait until you continue and for another chapter :) ~itachi2011
6/26/2010 c3 2FakeMirage
Haha I loved TenTen in this chapter! She was hilarious and the idea of the Fairy Godmother Deidara was funny as well. I can't wait until the next chapter!
2FakeMirageHaha I loved TenTen in this chapter! She was hilarious and the idea of the Fairy Godmother Deidara was funny as well. I can't wait until the next chapter!
6/26/2010 c3 17TeenageCrisis
OK HOLD ON! how the hell could they run like that if sakura still had the leash on? cant wait for more
17TeenageCrisisOK HOLD ON! how the hell could they run like that if sakura still had the leash on? cant wait for more
6/18/2010 c2 HopeandChange
"Blackmail! Oppression! Treachery! Kidnapping! Rape! Rape!" - Wonderful line!
And you did NOT just use the term coot boot in your fanfiction! That was pure excellence! Keep on writing! I quite enjoy this!
"Blackmail! Oppression! Treachery! Kidnapping! Rape! Rape!" - Wonderful line!
And you did NOT just use the term coot boot in your fanfiction! That was pure excellence! Keep on writing! I quite enjoy this!
6/16/2010 c2 3Gaaras1Girl
“Hey I live in here TOO you know! I can make as much racket as I want! This isn't just your head you know!”
There are two problems with this segment; the first being that you should NEVER have caps in your writing! If you want to display tone then use italics (or in this case take it out of italics) for you font but DO NOT use all caps. The second problem I you ended both of these sentences with ‘you know’ and ‘recycling’ a word as I call it makes your writing appear flat and takes the reader out of their ‘zone’ which is a truly sad thing to do at such an otherwise funny scene. Now, read your version of that passage out loud to yourself, and now read this:
“Hey I live in here too and I can make as much racket as I want! This isn't just your head you know!”
Do you see how much smoother that was?
“the wood silkiness of the balcony railing,” correction: “the wood silkiness of the balcony railing.”
‘Quick note’ I’d kill a dozen new born babies for Sakura’s bathroom. T_T
"Hinata she's getting away!" –rolling across my floor in an uncontrolled fit of laughter- It’s V day! Run Sakura run! Lol And that’s just the icing on the cake, I’m still laughing so hard my sides are on fire and my cheeks are splitting open! I…I can’t believe what I just read. Would it be too much to call you my hero?
Um…time is a bit of an issue but if you really need a beta I can help. I was reading one of your reviews, is this really going to be a love triangle...? :(
3Gaaras1Girl“Hey I live in here TOO you know! I can make as much racket as I want! This isn't just your head you know!”
There are two problems with this segment; the first being that you should NEVER have caps in your writing! If you want to display tone then use italics (or in this case take it out of italics) for you font but DO NOT use all caps. The second problem I you ended both of these sentences with ‘you know’ and ‘recycling’ a word as I call it makes your writing appear flat and takes the reader out of their ‘zone’ which is a truly sad thing to do at such an otherwise funny scene. Now, read your version of that passage out loud to yourself, and now read this:
“Hey I live in here too and I can make as much racket as I want! This isn't just your head you know!”
Do you see how much smoother that was?
“the wood silkiness of the balcony railing,” correction: “the wood silkiness of the balcony railing.”
‘Quick note’ I’d kill a dozen new born babies for Sakura’s bathroom. T_T
"Hinata she's getting away!" –rolling across my floor in an uncontrolled fit of laughter- It’s V day! Run Sakura run! Lol And that’s just the icing on the cake, I’m still laughing so hard my sides are on fire and my cheeks are splitting open! I…I can’t believe what I just read. Would it be too much to call you my hero?
Um…time is a bit of an issue but if you really need a beta I can help. I was reading one of your reviews, is this really going to be a love triangle...? :(
6/16/2010 c2 12mk-chan160
Hii!
Not what I expected, but funny xD
Post soon?
kissus
ps: I don't speak spanish ^^' (actually I'm horrible at it ¬¬), I'm brazillian so I speak portuguese ^^
12mk-chan160Hii!
Not what I expected, but funny xD
Post soon?
kissus
ps: I don't speak spanish ^^' (actually I'm horrible at it ¬¬), I'm brazillian so I speak portuguese ^^