for Rozen Maiden: Maximum Ride style6/17/2013 c10 James Birdsong
Your story is excellent
Your story is excellent
8/2/2010 c7 
46Tiryn
Hope you get over your writer's block. Writer's block blows, so get over it soon ^^
46TirynHope you get over your writer's block. Writer's block blows, so get over it soon ^^
7/13/2010 c6 Tiryn
I think that they should just get look alikes as there dolls and see what happens from there. Anyway, good chapter and update soon ^^
I think that they should just get look alikes as there dolls and see what happens from there. Anyway, good chapter and update soon ^^
7/6/2010 c4 Tiryn
Oh come on! Update! Your story isn't that bad, it's actually a good story! What I suggest doing is while in McDonalds, put some Erasers in there and let the flock see how good Alice fights.
Update!
Oh come on! Update! Your story isn't that bad, it's actually a good story! What I suggest doing is while in McDonalds, put some Erasers in there and let the flock see how good Alice fights.
Update!
6/21/2010 c1 14Trouble.With.Words
heya ;)
well said i'd take a look so far anyway :) and i might as well review the whole thing :) and in the ned i'm only one opinion:):
well i see what you mean, there's some spelling mistakes and missing comma's and all that but noting major,
for exampe maybe,
when Max asked Iggy to carry Alice, you said because she 'can' fly..so that was a bit confusing and just be careful wih stuff like that, but not that bad :)
my only other critism is that Max seems a bit OOC, maybe to excepting and all that, and Iggy is a bit the same, but you have Fang spot on, so not bad :)
p.s sorry if this is a bit long, i just got use to writing more longer comments for stories x)
good luck with this anyway :)
-Chaniece x
but it looks well for a start anyway, not that i know
14Trouble.With.Wordsheya ;)
well said i'd take a look so far anyway :) and i might as well review the whole thing :) and in the ned i'm only one opinion:):
well i see what you mean, there's some spelling mistakes and missing comma's and all that but noting major,
for exampe maybe,
when Max asked Iggy to carry Alice, you said because she 'can' fly..so that was a bit confusing and just be careful wih stuff like that, but not that bad :)
my only other critism is that Max seems a bit OOC, maybe to excepting and all that, and Iggy is a bit the same, but you have Fang spot on, so not bad :)
p.s sorry if this is a bit long, i just got use to writing more longer comments for stories x)
good luck with this anyway :)
-Chaniece x
but it looks well for a start anyway, not that i know