
8/21/2010 c2
31Fear the Pika
The story seems good enough, however, since you seem to be going off of the Sinnoh Legend from the Canalave Library, it would've been nice to see it from the time period that it was talking about, especially since it said that Morphs stopped existing. However, everything else seems sound, even though the second chapter was a little confusing for me.

The story seems good enough, however, since you seem to be going off of the Sinnoh Legend from the Canalave Library, it would've been nice to see it from the time period that it was talking about, especially since it said that Morphs stopped existing. However, everything else seems sound, even though the second chapter was a little confusing for me.
6/20/2010 c2
7Stolloss
YES! Someone else who has read and thought about Sinnoh's myths and legends! Well, and the manga, but I've actually known other people who read that.
I really like how you presented Joe and Ethan's sharing of the body. Their control swaps seem very fluid and natural, as it should be since that has been their condition since birth. They are also beginning to display their influences on each other's personality and preferences, though you could stand to show more of that; they are present every minute of their shared life, and so they each are bound to influence the other.
You may want to think twice before blending author's notes and the story. While A/N's are great for getting your opinion or some facts across, they are not the story. Placing your opinions in the middle (or the beginning, as it may be) of the story section reminds the readers that it is all fake, and not to get too involved in it. Moreover, it sometimes becomes hard to distinguish what is the story and what is the detour. As you may guess, that's not a good thing for a story you want people to become absorbed in. There are places for A/N's, separate from the main story. That is where you should place notes. Though I do agree with you.
One other thing is this story doesn't seem to be going anywhere yet (ignoring the summary for now). I realize it has only been two chapters, but we haven't even met the whole...H family yet? I could have sworn I saw a last name somewhere, but I can't find it. We haven't met Gabby's family (or her last name) yet either. Try not to stall too long.
Wonder what's going to happen if/when Joe evolves. This is a premise I haven't seen before, so I'm anxious to know what kind of surprises you have planned. It has already been established that tiredness does not transfer with the swap. How about wounds or scars, marks, or anything else?
Oh, and I may make a community soon about stories with novel ideas or approaches. Do you mind if I add this story when that actually goes up?

YES! Someone else who has read and thought about Sinnoh's myths and legends! Well, and the manga, but I've actually known other people who read that.
I really like how you presented Joe and Ethan's sharing of the body. Their control swaps seem very fluid and natural, as it should be since that has been their condition since birth. They are also beginning to display their influences on each other's personality and preferences, though you could stand to show more of that; they are present every minute of their shared life, and so they each are bound to influence the other.
You may want to think twice before blending author's notes and the story. While A/N's are great for getting your opinion or some facts across, they are not the story. Placing your opinions in the middle (or the beginning, as it may be) of the story section reminds the readers that it is all fake, and not to get too involved in it. Moreover, it sometimes becomes hard to distinguish what is the story and what is the detour. As you may guess, that's not a good thing for a story you want people to become absorbed in. There are places for A/N's, separate from the main story. That is where you should place notes. Though I do agree with you.
One other thing is this story doesn't seem to be going anywhere yet (ignoring the summary for now). I realize it has only been two chapters, but we haven't even met the whole...H family yet? I could have sworn I saw a last name somewhere, but I can't find it. We haven't met Gabby's family (or her last name) yet either. Try not to stall too long.
Wonder what's going to happen if/when Joe evolves. This is a premise I haven't seen before, so I'm anxious to know what kind of surprises you have planned. It has already been established that tiredness does not transfer with the swap. How about wounds or scars, marks, or anything else?
Oh, and I may make a community soon about stories with novel ideas or approaches. Do you mind if I add this story when that actually goes up?
6/15/2010 c2
1West Gash
Well done! This is a very original story in a genre that, like you said, is rather overrun by cliches and silliness... but hey, it's fan fiction. ;)
I'm looking forward to reading more. The characters are very likable, and your version of pokemorphs is refreshing to read... as long as I don't think too heavily on how Ethan and Joe came into existence (ack!). Best of luck to you!

Well done! This is a very original story in a genre that, like you said, is rather overrun by cliches and silliness... but hey, it's fan fiction. ;)
I'm looking forward to reading more. The characters are very likable, and your version of pokemorphs is refreshing to read... as long as I don't think too heavily on how Ethan and Joe came into existence (ack!). Best of luck to you!
6/14/2010 c1
1Ms. Trickster
I didn't read the story but... With the amount of words... I think you put a lot of effort into the story.

I didn't read the story but... With the amount of words... I think you put a lot of effort into the story.
6/12/2010 c2
1Variegata
Yes! An update. I must say, this story has got me hooked because it is just so much different from other Pokemorph stories. Keep it up!
P.S: I'm enjoying my donut! :D

Yes! An update. I must say, this story has got me hooked because it is just so much different from other Pokemorph stories. Keep it up!
P.S: I'm enjoying my donut! :D
6/7/2010 c1 Variegata
WOW! This was a really neat idea! I usually think of pokemorphs differently, but you've put a new perspective on them... I really like it. Keep up the good work and I'm waiting for the next chapter. :)
WOW! This was a really neat idea! I usually think of pokemorphs differently, but you've put a new perspective on them... I really like it. Keep up the good work and I'm waiting for the next chapter. :)