for NO Balls6/10/2012 c2 JokerBotZapDat
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1:What the fuck is this story about?
2:your fanfic whatever it is is TOOOOOOOo much gay i mean come on why wold a 10 years old be eating a fucking cooc you sick motherfucking peace of shit
3:fix your grammar English may be my 3rd language but i bet you that even some US top English teachers will have a very hard time to understand you.
4: i must commend you. This is the first piece of fiction to ever cause me to actually be violently sick and i am a very hard man to make sick so i commend you for that .
5:if you wold fed naruto some coocs and god only knows where did you get that idea from, you cold at least made him 17 or older bitch not a fucking 10 year old.
6:and i must commend you again this my longest review and also my first ever Flame
as for the bad words i used you make my sleep harder and only god know how much i love my sleep.
a tip for your come to be factions don't feed children coocs you sick motherfucker.
sorry for any miss spell or bad grammar
the botom line is you are a sick man/woman who needs help.
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1:What the fuck is this story about?
2:your fanfic whatever it is is TOOOOOOOo much gay i mean come on why wold a 10 years old be eating a fucking cooc you sick motherfucking peace of shit
3:fix your grammar English may be my 3rd language but i bet you that even some US top English teachers will have a very hard time to understand you.
4: i must commend you. This is the first piece of fiction to ever cause me to actually be violently sick and i am a very hard man to make sick so i commend you for that .
5:if you wold fed naruto some coocs and god only knows where did you get that idea from, you cold at least made him 17 or older bitch not a fucking 10 year old.
6:and i must commend you again this my longest review and also my first ever Flame
as for the bad words i used you make my sleep harder and only god know how much i love my sleep.
a tip for your come to be factions don't feed children coocs you sick motherfucker.
sorry for any miss spell or bad grammar
the botom line is you are a sick man/woman who needs help.
5/21/2011 c1 OutlawJustice
if you wanna be original that is extremely commendable. however over doing things like the size of dicks etc takes away from the story. i would be surpised if a large percent of the readers who read about naruto's size just stopped reading right there. you seem to be a big fan of kyubi16, then you should note that he doesn't use crazy overly retarded things like 19* cocks and other things that are overly inhuman. i'll say it again. i understand your wanting to be original, but there are much better ways to go about doing it, like having an actual story.
your grammar is hands one one of the worst i've seen. do you even bother to look over your writing? i generally ignore grammar errors as long as i can understand what the author is trying to covey i can live with that. but this grammar you're using is so bad i find myself constantly having to backtrack and read sentences over again to realize what you mean.
i've seen you use that "it's my story i can do what ever i want" excuse and honestly it is half valid excuse, even the most out of this world manga, anime, and fanfic keeps SOME degree of realism and there is a reason for that. autors need to think about how their readers will perceive what they write. believe it or not just because it's your fic DOESN'T mean you can do anything and everything you want, if that were the case, you shouldn't bother posting for people to see. look at the majority of the reveiws you have across all the fics you've made, more than 90% of them are negative. that is something that shows you REALLY need to do something with yourself
if you wanna be original that is extremely commendable. however over doing things like the size of dicks etc takes away from the story. i would be surpised if a large percent of the readers who read about naruto's size just stopped reading right there. you seem to be a big fan of kyubi16, then you should note that he doesn't use crazy overly retarded things like 19* cocks and other things that are overly inhuman. i'll say it again. i understand your wanting to be original, but there are much better ways to go about doing it, like having an actual story.
your grammar is hands one one of the worst i've seen. do you even bother to look over your writing? i generally ignore grammar errors as long as i can understand what the author is trying to covey i can live with that. but this grammar you're using is so bad i find myself constantly having to backtrack and read sentences over again to realize what you mean.
i've seen you use that "it's my story i can do what ever i want" excuse and honestly it is half valid excuse, even the most out of this world manga, anime, and fanfic keeps SOME degree of realism and there is a reason for that. autors need to think about how their readers will perceive what they write. believe it or not just because it's your fic DOESN'T mean you can do anything and everything you want, if that were the case, you shouldn't bother posting for people to see. look at the majority of the reveiws you have across all the fics you've made, more than 90% of them are negative. that is something that shows you REALLY need to do something with yourself
2/5/2011 c1 wtf
Dude you fucking confused the hell out of me does naruto eat people,dicks or souls is he really wearing stripper's clothes and what the hell was Kushina doing?does he have TWO dicks?what the fuck
Dude you fucking confused the hell out of me does naruto eat people,dicks or souls is he really wearing stripper's clothes and what the hell was Kushina doing?does he have TWO dicks?what the fuck
7/14/2010 c1 the shadow overlord279
...i think you got the genere wrong. Certain parts make this hard to take seriously.
...i think you got the genere wrong. Certain parts make this hard to take seriously.
6/28/2010 c2 
1insanelyproudpervert
man that was an awesome story.pl z continue ur story. i m searching for such type of story where naruto gets all girls. if u have any idea of such kind of stories plz reply me.if jiraya is going to be man plz dont make him to fuck kushina, make naruto do it and make it gore.
1insanelyproudpervertman that was an awesome story.pl z continue ur story. i m searching for such type of story where naruto gets all girls. if u have any idea of such kind of stories plz reply me.if jiraya is going to be man plz dont make him to fuck kushina, make naruto do it and make it gore.
6/21/2010 c2 1XBlack ReaperX
Alright I'm not gonna lie the first chapter freaked the fuck at of me but I'm willing to ignore it if the rest of the story is straight and u fix ur grammar a little the latter was a suggestion but really he better be straight. Oh qnd is this gonna lead to a narutoXkusina I'll favorite this after u answer my questions lmao
1XBlack ReaperXAlright I'm not gonna lie the first chapter freaked the fuck at of me but I'm willing to ignore it if the rest of the story is straight and u fix ur grammar a little the latter was a suggestion but really he better be straight. Oh qnd is this gonna lead to a narutoXkusina I'll favorite this after u answer my questions lmao
6/19/2010 c2 2Shihouin Shunshin
As when i posted the review for the first chapter, this fic is extremely flawed. The first chapter is extremely homosexual and anti-male, as by the eating of male Genitals and Kushina forcing Naruto to eat them. This would count as atleast Homosexual in most peoples minds, since any straight male wouldnt want to go near another mans Junk. Also if Naruto is the only Male in town, if all he eats as if above, how long will be survive before he eats himself?
Since you didnt reply to my first review, i wont expect one for this either. I dont see how a genital-cannibal can consumate a Hetero relationship.
P.S. your sizes for guys junk in chapter 1 are horrendous. 19 Inches is 47.5CM, which would be quite destructive to any unfortunate lovers.
2Shihouin ShunshinAs when i posted the review for the first chapter, this fic is extremely flawed. The first chapter is extremely homosexual and anti-male, as by the eating of male Genitals and Kushina forcing Naruto to eat them. This would count as atleast Homosexual in most peoples minds, since any straight male wouldnt want to go near another mans Junk. Also if Naruto is the only Male in town, if all he eats as if above, how long will be survive before he eats himself?
Since you didnt reply to my first review, i wont expect one for this either. I dont see how a genital-cannibal can consumate a Hetero relationship.
P.S. your sizes for guys junk in chapter 1 are horrendous. 19 Inches is 47.5CM, which would be quite destructive to any unfortunate lovers.
6/18/2010 c1 Liger01
okay, so what was the point of this fic, I have no idea, a another would be why does he have to eat dick, thats pretty gay and makes no sense, I mean i am okay with conecpt of canabalism, but seriously that was way to homo.
okay, so what was the point of this fic, I have no idea, a another would be why does he have to eat dick, thats pretty gay and makes no sense, I mean i am okay with conecpt of canabalism, but seriously that was way to homo.
6/18/2010 c1 2Shihouin Shunshin
Before i begin my first actual flame, i must commend you. This is the first piece of fiction to ever cause me to actually be violently sick, and ive read about of extremely detailed gorey scenes.
First off, Cannibalism, which is the act of a animal/human eating the flesh of their own species, is seen as utterly digusting through society, and on the body there are alot more appropriate places to 'eat' should the need arise.
In all honesty, i dont know what happened in your life to either cause you to dislike the male sub-species, since human is the whole, or to create such an utterly disgusting scenario in your imagination.
Completely unrealistic, not just in the fact that you have a child eating insanely oversized genitalia, or that the women dont seem to mind. Such an act would probably be viewed as extremely homosexual, and disgusting in that he may one day wish to eat himself.
I hope this fic is removed from the site, and that whatever has caused your imagination to go into such a violent and disgusting direction to be sorted.
2Shihouin ShunshinBefore i begin my first actual flame, i must commend you. This is the first piece of fiction to ever cause me to actually be violently sick, and ive read about of extremely detailed gorey scenes.
First off, Cannibalism, which is the act of a animal/human eating the flesh of their own species, is seen as utterly digusting through society, and on the body there are alot more appropriate places to 'eat' should the need arise.
In all honesty, i dont know what happened in your life to either cause you to dislike the male sub-species, since human is the whole, or to create such an utterly disgusting scenario in your imagination.
Completely unrealistic, not just in the fact that you have a child eating insanely oversized genitalia, or that the women dont seem to mind. Such an act would probably be viewed as extremely homosexual, and disgusting in that he may one day wish to eat himself.
I hope this fic is removed from the site, and that whatever has caused your imagination to go into such a violent and disgusting direction to be sorted.