
6/28/2010 c1
1322blue
JFC, K, that was amazing. I'm so amazed by your talent. Heart-poundingly beautiful. There wasn't one moment I couldn't feel or understand what he was feeling. Just so... gah. Tragically beautiful. Did I mention it was a beautiful story?

JFC, K, that was amazing. I'm so amazed by your talent. Heart-poundingly beautiful. There wasn't one moment I couldn't feel or understand what he was feeling. Just so... gah. Tragically beautiful. Did I mention it was a beautiful story?
6/28/2010 c1 clairdeluneisgreat
Ouch. this one hurt. Amazing story, thank you for sharing and best of luck with the contest.
Ouch. this one hurt. Amazing story, thank you for sharing and best of luck with the contest.
6/28/2010 c1 dellatwi
That was so sad poor jasper and alice and edward ugh
Very well written thank you for sharing
That was so sad poor jasper and alice and edward ugh
Very well written thank you for sharing
6/28/2010 c1 miamia80
This broke my heart! Just the idea of living with the object of your love for so many decades and nothing ever coming of it. And worse, having to watch and listen to him love someone else. Those little bits in time where he feels just that touch of love back (or not love I guess) makes it even worse. It's like look but don't touch. That kiss at the end was awful. Like just one more nail in the coffin. This is so powerful and it makes me want to cry. I love it and I can't believe you've never done slash before. Just wow.
This broke my heart! Just the idea of living with the object of your love for so many decades and nothing ever coming of it. And worse, having to watch and listen to him love someone else. Those little bits in time where he feels just that touch of love back (or not love I guess) makes it even worse. It's like look but don't touch. That kiss at the end was awful. Like just one more nail in the coffin. This is so powerful and it makes me want to cry. I love it and I can't believe you've never done slash before. Just wow.
6/28/2010 c1 dreamzuvedward
wOW, so intensely delicious! Is this your first foray into slash? You should write it more often. For some reason I only care to read Edward slash, and NOT when Bella's in the picture. So your storyline was perfect!
wOW, so intensely delicious! Is this your first foray into slash? You should write it more often. For some reason I only care to read Edward slash, and NOT when Bella's in the picture. So your storyline was perfect!
6/28/2010 c1
10LJ Summers
Oh Kate, this is so sad! :(
I feel so desperately for Edward and wonder at his ability to just STAY for so long. His poor heart. Truly.
I carry no blame for Jasper...he's kind of secondary, here, isn't he? An object, not a subject. Not to me, anyway.
Wow. Italy. Hell of a way to end this. Wow.
Heartrending, truly, and I don't think that often.

Oh Kate, this is so sad! :(
I feel so desperately for Edward and wonder at his ability to just STAY for so long. His poor heart. Truly.
I carry no blame for Jasper...he's kind of secondary, here, isn't he? An object, not a subject. Not to me, anyway.
Wow. Italy. Hell of a way to end this. Wow.
Heartrending, truly, and I don't think that often.
6/28/2010 c1 Karandash86
Wow, Kate. I didn't know you had it in you. This was incredibly good. I love your writing and I'm just amazed at how you can write so many different worlds so well.
I loved how you took us through the years. Hearing his rejection year after year was just heartbreaking. And the end just made me so sad and sorry for Edward. beautiful.
So good! I'll vote for you!
Ni
Wow, Kate. I didn't know you had it in you. This was incredibly good. I love your writing and I'm just amazed at how you can write so many different worlds so well.
I loved how you took us through the years. Hearing his rejection year after year was just heartbreaking. And the end just made me so sad and sorry for Edward. beautiful.
So good! I'll vote for you!
Ni
6/28/2010 c1
2Purple Tulips
Wow, what a powerful and moving story. I can really feel Edward's pain (and Jasper's), beautifully written and haunting. I feel quite sad now but I think the ending you have written is realistic and correct in the context of the story. I do wonder whether Alice would have foreseen Edward's intentions and whether she would want to stop him or would she let him go to Volterra safe in the knowledge that she'd have Jasper all to herself? I'd like to think that she'd stop him. I am going to have a look at your profile and see what else you have written.

Wow, what a powerful and moving story. I can really feel Edward's pain (and Jasper's), beautifully written and haunting. I feel quite sad now but I think the ending you have written is realistic and correct in the context of the story. I do wonder whether Alice would have foreseen Edward's intentions and whether she would want to stop him or would she let him go to Volterra safe in the knowledge that she'd have Jasper all to herself? I'd like to think that she'd stop him. I am going to have a look at your profile and see what else you have written.
6/28/2010 c1 songster
You have got to be one of the most prolific writers around at the moment! As usual well written, slash is not usually my thing, but am finding it curiously sexy lately. Not sure why, LOL. But I view this as less focused on slash than forbidden and unrequited love. It made me very, very sad. I knew he was gonna pull an Edward and go to Volterra. Where is Ms. Kathy when you need a threesome?
You have got to be one of the most prolific writers around at the moment! As usual well written, slash is not usually my thing, but am finding it curiously sexy lately. Not sure why, LOL. But I view this as less focused on slash than forbidden and unrequited love. It made me very, very sad. I knew he was gonna pull an Edward and go to Volterra. Where is Ms. Kathy when you need a threesome?
6/28/2010 c1 luvrofink
I cried a little. I'm a little mad at you for making me so sad. I hope you win. I'll vote for you!
-k
I cried a little. I'm a little mad at you for making me so sad. I hope you win. I'll vote for you!
-k
6/28/2010 c1
10Gasaway Alley
Chica, this is insanely good. I think I held my breath the entire time I read it.
Incredible imagery! This elicits all sorts of dark whispers of want and need.
Beautiful.

Chica, this is insanely good. I think I held my breath the entire time I read it.
Incredible imagery! This elicits all sorts of dark whispers of want and need.
Beautiful.