9/2/2010 c19 9Frost190
Estraneo Famiglia will make an appearance? Now that will be interseting. Keep continuing the story!
Estraneo Famiglia will make an appearance? Now that will be interseting. Keep continuing the story!
8/6/2010 c17 3darksnow00
..aww... finally a background story of Hunt... so nice... *sob* *sob* I want a Lamborghini Gallardo SE too...! But anyway, this is a good chappie~ Keep up the good work XD
..aww... finally a background story of Hunt... so nice... *sob* *sob* I want a Lamborghini Gallardo SE too...! But anyway, this is a good chappie~ Keep up the good work XD
7/6/2010 c4 Nothing23r
haha...i have poor observing factors...Anyway, evem though you've already read one of my rants, i think i'll do another one. i still like it. Really good set up! But i would like to bring up some points. (not trying to be mean). First, kinda choppy going from chapter to chapter. I get what your doing, but it still feels choppy to me. Second, a little more description on the characters, especially if your planning them to return. Third, could you describe the time, place, and age Aluade is at a little more clearly. Maybe a desciption of him at that age...Lastly, can't think of anything else now. But good job. I hope you don't mind to much about my lack of observing or some points...:-)
haha...i have poor observing factors...Anyway, evem though you've already read one of my rants, i think i'll do another one. i still like it. Really good set up! But i would like to bring up some points. (not trying to be mean). First, kinda choppy going from chapter to chapter. I get what your doing, but it still feels choppy to me. Second, a little more description on the characters, especially if your planning them to return. Third, could you describe the time, place, and age Aluade is at a little more clearly. Maybe a desciption of him at that age...Lastly, can't think of anything else now. But good job. I hope you don't mind to much about my lack of observing or some points...:-)
7/6/2010 c1 Nothing23r
Hi, now this is interesting...Curiousity has struck me. Although, without looking at who it was about (hehe Aluade thumbs up)it would have been hard to figure out. Great way to start the story in a mysterious way! I think it's good and can't wait till the next update!
Hi, now this is interesting...Curiousity has struck me. Although, without looking at who it was about (hehe Aluade thumbs up)it would have been hard to figure out. Great way to start the story in a mysterious way! I think it's good and can't wait till the next update!
7/6/2010 c4 3darksnow00
...this is kinda weird for me but my curiosity kept on nagging me... anyway... please update soon ^-^
...this is kinda weird for me but my curiosity kept on nagging me... anyway... please update soon ^-^
7/3/2010 c1 6queenfirst
Um.. who is this story about? You need to describe or at least introduce the characters. o_o
Um.. who is this story about? You need to describe or at least introduce the characters. o_o