for One and the Same, Answers10/20/2010 c2 
2NobleBoss
I likes it! i love ur use of fire types and im curious to see where this is going cause i have no clue. Thanks for being a good writer lol
2NobleBossI likes it! i love ur use of fire types and im curious to see where this is going cause i have no clue. Thanks for being a good writer lol
10/17/2010 c6 1MourningBlack
That was pretty short, but Darkrai morph is about to make an appearance, Huzzah!
1MourningBlackThat was pretty short, but Darkrai morph is about to make an appearance, Huzzah!
8/31/2010 c6 3flarafeon
poor Houndoom she loves Arcanine and thinks that he dous not love her but shes wrong but will she find out or will somthing else hapine whale chapserd oh the suspinse
3flarafeonpoor Houndoom she loves Arcanine and thinks that he dous not love her but shes wrong but will she find out or will somthing else hapine whale chapserd oh the suspinse
8/30/2010 c6 5WolfSummoner93
Darkrai! Some scary shizz there, but it must be done. and NOOOO! BLOSSOM! Poor little baby! great chapter Kay, can't wait for an update
5WolfSummoner93Darkrai! Some scary shizz there, but it must be done. and NOOOO! BLOSSOM! Poor little baby! great chapter Kay, can't wait for an update
8/22/2010 c5 WolfSummoner93
aww, poor Houndoom has to like that stupid flirt. But I still love him! And Blossom is SO CUTE!
And the plot comes into play with that attack. intense chapter Kay, can't wait for an update
aww, poor Houndoom has to like that stupid flirt. But I still love him! And Blossom is SO CUTE!
And the plot comes into play with that attack. intense chapter Kay, can't wait for an update
8/21/2010 c5 3flarafeon
im glad to see you back and finle a plot i am so happe and can not wate for the next chapter its going to be so exsiting ok so good by
3flarafeonim glad to see you back and finle a plot i am so happe and can not wate for the next chapter its going to be so exsiting ok so good by
8/10/2010 c4 The One On The Outside
Hello...just found out the sequal was put up so now i'm reveiwing...though I think you know that now...anyway nice story so far! I like houndoom and arcaine (is that how you spell it?) anyway can't wait for another chapter!
Hello...just found out the sequal was put up so now i'm reveiwing...though I think you know that now...anyway nice story so far! I like houndoom and arcaine (is that how you spell it?) anyway can't wait for another chapter!
8/7/2010 c4 Ashley
I love this! I couldn't get enough of it! In One and the Same, I read all of the chapters in one day. It sounds so much like Maximum Ride but with a Pokemon twist in it. Love the characters too. Also can't wait for more chapters in One and the Same, Answers ^_^, but it's sad that such a great fanfic is getting so few reviews. :(
I love this! I couldn't get enough of it! In One and the Same, I read all of the chapters in one day. It sounds so much like Maximum Ride but with a Pokemon twist in it. Love the characters too. Also can't wait for more chapters in One and the Same, Answers ^_^, but it's sad that such a great fanfic is getting so few reviews. :(
7/31/2010 c4 Alienea
Speaking as someone who just stumbled across this and the prequel: Yay good job! Yes, your grammer needs work, but the plot is coherent and good. Keep writing, please!
Speaking as someone who just stumbled across this and the prequel: Yay good job! Yes, your grammer needs work, but the plot is coherent and good. Keep writing, please!
7/30/2010 c4 5WolfSummoner93
daww, how cute! I like the little girl already. Great chapter Kay, can't wait for an update
5WolfSummoner93daww, how cute! I like the little girl already. Great chapter Kay, can't wait for an update
7/27/2010 c4 7Stolloss
...You do realize a flame counts as a review, right? And holding your story hostage for reviews is practically asking for a flame? Really, when you put a story on hiatus, who are you punishing? The readers, who have an archive of stories to read, or yourself, by preventing yourself from writing and publishing? Yes, getting reviews is good, but the purpose of this site is not to get good reviews. It is to publish stories.
That said, I can see you enjoy writing this, so I'll review.
This chapter was dominated by a battle, so that's what I'll comment on. In pokemon, a lot happens in a battle. The reader has to know who is fighting, where they are fighting, how are they fighting, all the parts of the battle. The clearer it is, the easier it is to make the reader get involved in it.
It was not very clear what was going on. First, you started the chapter with all pronouns and no setting. I decided to read through the chapter without looking back to remind myself what the scene was, or even who was fighting, and was utterly confused until I did. However, once I did that, the chapter made much more sense; it was, while not the best it could be, much easier to read and understand. For the start of any chapter, not just battle chapters, the most important thing is to set the scene. Before any battle, there is a moment, however small, when each fighter is preparing to attack or defend. Use that moment to describe the battlefield, say who's there if that has not been mentioned in the chapter yet, and give important details then so that they don't come out during the fight.
["Crap." He muttered, and dodged away. He had taken the hit, and it pained him.]
Two things in this section. That should be ["Crap," he muttered], because muttered is a speaking verb and works like said. I'm pointing this out because I see it in several places throughout the chapter. You also said the he both dodged and took the hit. You can dodge away while taking a hit, if you take dodge to mean move suddenly, but another verb such as moved would make it clearer.
The actual fighting. First, you mentioned hit points. Hit points are something Nintendo came up with to represent a pokemon's health, and they do not actually exist. Whenever you find yourself referencing HP, simply replace it with energy. In general, if something is mentioned in the game, but not in the anime or manga (examples would be hit points, levels, experience points, stats) it is something that Nintendo was required to include to make pokemon a game. It is a representation of another thing that could not be included or accurately described. For example, level could be an indicator of age or actual progress in learning how to fight, and experience points would be a more detailed representation.
Second, you announced which move they used, followed by a little description of it. You are doing a better job at this point than most people who do this, but it could still be improved. The battle is not solely attacks, each fighter is moving around and doing other things during a battle. Try to mention these other actions; as it is, announcing attacks took up most of the fight.
The scene change to the hospital was rather abrupt. A little description or a mention that she has woken up, even just a line break would make it clear that the setting has changed. As it is, I was wondering what was going on for a few lines.
I would also suggest using the time where you are not writing your story to find a beta reader. They would be able to help you with some of the issues I mentioned, as well as be someone to talk to if you have any questions you need answers to.
7Stolloss...You do realize a flame counts as a review, right? And holding your story hostage for reviews is practically asking for a flame? Really, when you put a story on hiatus, who are you punishing? The readers, who have an archive of stories to read, or yourself, by preventing yourself from writing and publishing? Yes, getting reviews is good, but the purpose of this site is not to get good reviews. It is to publish stories.
That said, I can see you enjoy writing this, so I'll review.
This chapter was dominated by a battle, so that's what I'll comment on. In pokemon, a lot happens in a battle. The reader has to know who is fighting, where they are fighting, how are they fighting, all the parts of the battle. The clearer it is, the easier it is to make the reader get involved in it.
It was not very clear what was going on. First, you started the chapter with all pronouns and no setting. I decided to read through the chapter without looking back to remind myself what the scene was, or even who was fighting, and was utterly confused until I did. However, once I did that, the chapter made much more sense; it was, while not the best it could be, much easier to read and understand. For the start of any chapter, not just battle chapters, the most important thing is to set the scene. Before any battle, there is a moment, however small, when each fighter is preparing to attack or defend. Use that moment to describe the battlefield, say who's there if that has not been mentioned in the chapter yet, and give important details then so that they don't come out during the fight.
["Crap." He muttered, and dodged away. He had taken the hit, and it pained him.]
Two things in this section. That should be ["Crap," he muttered], because muttered is a speaking verb and works like said. I'm pointing this out because I see it in several places throughout the chapter. You also said the he both dodged and took the hit. You can dodge away while taking a hit, if you take dodge to mean move suddenly, but another verb such as moved would make it clearer.
The actual fighting. First, you mentioned hit points. Hit points are something Nintendo came up with to represent a pokemon's health, and they do not actually exist. Whenever you find yourself referencing HP, simply replace it with energy. In general, if something is mentioned in the game, but not in the anime or manga (examples would be hit points, levels, experience points, stats) it is something that Nintendo was required to include to make pokemon a game. It is a representation of another thing that could not be included or accurately described. For example, level could be an indicator of age or actual progress in learning how to fight, and experience points would be a more detailed representation.
Second, you announced which move they used, followed by a little description of it. You are doing a better job at this point than most people who do this, but it could still be improved. The battle is not solely attacks, each fighter is moving around and doing other things during a battle. Try to mention these other actions; as it is, announcing attacks took up most of the fight.
The scene change to the hospital was rather abrupt. A little description or a mention that she has woken up, even just a line break would make it clear that the setting has changed. As it is, I was wondering what was going on for a few lines.
I would also suggest using the time where you are not writing your story to find a beta reader. They would be able to help you with some of the issues I mentioned, as well as be someone to talk to if you have any questions you need answers to.