for A Marines Life For Me12/11/2011 c7 
28Son of Whitebeard
Hiro is a very convincing Marine with conviction, as well which is always good to see in a Marine.
Aaron is also very mysterious...
28Son of WhitebeardHiro is a very convincing Marine with conviction, as well which is always good to see in a Marine.
Aaron is also very mysterious...
5/25/2011 c17 1TheLostSpade
hey i wanted to know if i could enter ichigo here if he's not used in the other one i made some changes though to fit the marines.
Name: ichigo toumachi
Gender: male
Age: 21
Position: shipwright
DEVIL FRUIT INFO
devil fruit name: tsuyoi tsuyoi no mi
meaning: strong strong fruit
power: well you can figure this out right? :)
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weapon: 25 pound sledge hammer
attack's: he usually just swings it or hits, or punchs them in the face :)
Likes: fixing or building things, a good bottle of sake, playing piano, peaceful places
body Appearance: lean, has muscles, six pack
hair style: messy and all over the place with bangs that cover his eyes(but when he works he uses goggles that bring his hair back
hair color:black
skin color: tan
eye color: blueish violet colour
shirt: (royal blue)sleeveless top
pants: mens black cargo pants
height: 6'1
accessories: yellow flip-flops with pink and green pomb trees
Downfall: spider, vomit or to much sake
History: when ichigo was a child his parents gave him up becuase of the trouble he cuased and the mony problem. ichigo was sent away with the marines to work for them. ichigo grew up lonly and eventualy the lonliness turned to hate, he hated the marines.it was on his 13nth birthday that he decided he would build a ship, he worked hard every night. but when he went to the captain(chosuki)to ask for the supplies he needed, the captain laughed in his face and told him 'dreams! thats what you've been rotting your useless brain on! get your head out of the clouds kid! gyaahahahahaa!' then the captain took the blue prints and hid them. to this day ichigo still hears it in his head over and over as he waits for someone to come find him, and take him away from the hell.(and then eventually he meets your character)
Dislikes: rude people, cats, musicals,
fears: drowning
Personality: he is quiet but only because hes terrible at making conversation. if the person is rude he will not speak to the person or will be rude if he does same goes to a polite or nice person except opposite. is very perceptive of peoples feelings, good listener. and when he is drunk, he will most likely act like a drunk person (well duh)
Dream: to build a ship that will sail across the grand line
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not many changs but yeah but if its put in the pirate one thats fine too. :)
1TheLostSpadehey i wanted to know if i could enter ichigo here if he's not used in the other one i made some changes though to fit the marines.
Name: ichigo toumachi
Gender: male
Age: 21
Position: shipwright
DEVIL FRUIT INFO
devil fruit name: tsuyoi tsuyoi no mi
meaning: strong strong fruit
power: well you can figure this out right? :)
-
weapon: 25 pound sledge hammer
attack's: he usually just swings it or hits, or punchs them in the face :)
Likes: fixing or building things, a good bottle of sake, playing piano, peaceful places
body Appearance: lean, has muscles, six pack
hair style: messy and all over the place with bangs that cover his eyes(but when he works he uses goggles that bring his hair back
hair color:black
skin color: tan
eye color: blueish violet colour
shirt: (royal blue)sleeveless top
pants: mens black cargo pants
height: 6'1
accessories: yellow flip-flops with pink and green pomb trees
Downfall: spider, vomit or to much sake
History: when ichigo was a child his parents gave him up becuase of the trouble he cuased and the mony problem. ichigo was sent away with the marines to work for them. ichigo grew up lonly and eventualy the lonliness turned to hate, he hated the marines.it was on his 13nth birthday that he decided he would build a ship, he worked hard every night. but when he went to the captain(chosuki)to ask for the supplies he needed, the captain laughed in his face and told him 'dreams! thats what you've been rotting your useless brain on! get your head out of the clouds kid! gyaahahahahaa!' then the captain took the blue prints and hid them. to this day ichigo still hears it in his head over and over as he waits for someone to come find him, and take him away from the hell.(and then eventually he meets your character)
Dislikes: rude people, cats, musicals,
fears: drowning
Personality: he is quiet but only because hes terrible at making conversation. if the person is rude he will not speak to the person or will be rude if he does same goes to a polite or nice person except opposite. is very perceptive of peoples feelings, good listener. and when he is drunk, he will most likely act like a drunk person (well duh)
Dream: to build a ship that will sail across the grand line
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not many changs but yeah but if its put in the pirate one thats fine too. :)
4/21/2011 c1 zombie69
Name:derrick
Age:28
Gender:m
Race:human
Physical Description:5'9 160lbs jet black hair short bulky black t-shirt blue jeans long black trench coat
Weapon/Devil Fruit/Special Attacks (devil fruit not required):
sword(demon fang)
Personality:reserved
History:
unkwon(cant remember)
Specialty (Navigation, swordsmanship, doctor, etc.):swordsmanship
Friend or Foe (If your OC is a merc or bounty hunter they can be both):friend
Rank (If not a marine than job):bounty hunter
Likes:swords
Dislikes:everything else
Dream/Goal:discover origin
Other:
Name:derrick
Age:28
Gender:m
Race:human
Physical Description:5'9 160lbs jet black hair short bulky black t-shirt blue jeans long black trench coat
Weapon/Devil Fruit/Special Attacks (devil fruit not required):
sword(demon fang)
Personality:reserved
History:
unkwon(cant remember)
Specialty (Navigation, swordsmanship, doctor, etc.):swordsmanship
Friend or Foe (If your OC is a merc or bounty hunter they can be both):friend
Rank (If not a marine than job):bounty hunter
Likes:swords
Dislikes:everything else
Dream/Goal:discover origin
Other:
2/16/2011 c17 Threedimensional
This story is certainly taking a different direction than expected, at least from me. Don't worry, i mean that to be a good thing.
The cast of characters is expanding, and with it the potential for lot of different twists and turns in the story. I like how Hiro has developed, and hearing about his brother was cool.
I also like that fact that quite a few of the villain characters have a strange sense of humor. It keeps it interesting when they are written with personality.
Ahh, and kudos for the appearance of Belladonna in the most recent chap, although she only came by to spring Patch from his cell. It was still cool to see her using some of her abilities to shield them from being caught, and you've got her pretty spot on too. She wouldn't want to mess around with fighting if she really didn't have to.
I kinda felt bad for Patch though. Bit in over his head, i guess.
Anyway, hope to see more from you soon! Keep up the good work!
This story is certainly taking a different direction than expected, at least from me. Don't worry, i mean that to be a good thing.
The cast of characters is expanding, and with it the potential for lot of different twists and turns in the story. I like how Hiro has developed, and hearing about his brother was cool.
I also like that fact that quite a few of the villain characters have a strange sense of humor. It keeps it interesting when they are written with personality.
Ahh, and kudos for the appearance of Belladonna in the most recent chap, although she only came by to spring Patch from his cell. It was still cool to see her using some of her abilities to shield them from being caught, and you've got her pretty spot on too. She wouldn't want to mess around with fighting if she really didn't have to.
I kinda felt bad for Patch though. Bit in over his head, i guess.
Anyway, hope to see more from you soon! Keep up the good work!
2/16/2011 c17 6Draco Oblivion
Everyones beautiful in their own way :')
Anyways good chapter I haven't seen a lead golem before but I've seen steele and Hiro-shu. I know someone with the surname De Ville :)
6Draco OblivionEveryones beautiful in their own way :')
Anyways good chapter I haven't seen a lead golem before but I've seen steele and Hiro-shu. I know someone with the surname De Ville :)
2/15/2011 c1 awsome person
name:ichigo toushiro
age: 20
gender: male
race: human
physical description: ichigo is a rather tall man. he is very musculer.
hair: his hair is black and rather scruffy . his hair is very spikey and his bangs cover his eyes.
eyes: his eyes are basicly hidden but, there the colour of the ocean
clothes: Ichigo like's to wear things like 'cord board shorts' and tank tops (mens kind -_-*) and has a stud on his left ear
physical other: a tattoo of skull and cross bones that has been scarred,scratched and picked at
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devil fruit
name: den den no mi
meaning: electricity electricity fruit
(just tst so you know its blue)
it basicly is like a taser he just tenses the muscles in his hand and vwala! tazer hand like - thingy
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weapon: a hammer, its big, black and its a 25 pound sledge hammer
personality: ichigo is a laid back person and his attitude is much alike to zoro's. ichigo is a very loyal person, and will go along with anything for his leader. he can be sadistic when it comes too enemies and can flip out crushing anything in his path.
history: when ichigo was a kid he was fascinated by the works of a ship wright and eventually disided he would become the best. but unfortunetly on his 15th birthday when he was setting out to start his job he was robbed and kidnapped by some pirates and was given a choice- work for them or die, so ichigo worked for them as there shipwright until he met Hiro. ichigo's perants for abusive and would force him into the water and keep him under until they thought that it had been enough and led to his phobia of drowning/having his full body underwater
specialty: building
friend: (please let him be on Hiro's crew
rank: ship wright (-_-* i dont think a shipwright has a rank but okay)
likes: flower lilies, music, sake, people who help other's, girls
dislikes: cats (allergic), medicine, doctor visits, pirates,god damn bells in the morn'in, broadway musical's
dream/goal: to be free and sail the ocean on his ship with his friends.
other:his voice is deep
i really like the story so far and Hrio is very cool. please accept my oc
()()
(*-*) - weird bunny thing
name:ichigo toushiro
age: 20
gender: male
race: human
physical description: ichigo is a rather tall man. he is very musculer.
hair: his hair is black and rather scruffy . his hair is very spikey and his bangs cover his eyes.
eyes: his eyes are basicly hidden but, there the colour of the ocean
clothes: Ichigo like's to wear things like 'cord board shorts' and tank tops (mens kind -_-*) and has a stud on his left ear
physical other: a tattoo of skull and cross bones that has been scarred,scratched and picked at
-
devil fruit
name: den den no mi
meaning: electricity electricity fruit
(just tst so you know its blue)
it basicly is like a taser he just tenses the muscles in his hand and vwala! tazer hand like - thingy
-
weapon: a hammer, its big, black and its a 25 pound sledge hammer
personality: ichigo is a laid back person and his attitude is much alike to zoro's. ichigo is a very loyal person, and will go along with anything for his leader. he can be sadistic when it comes too enemies and can flip out crushing anything in his path.
history: when ichigo was a kid he was fascinated by the works of a ship wright and eventually disided he would become the best. but unfortunetly on his 15th birthday when he was setting out to start his job he was robbed and kidnapped by some pirates and was given a choice- work for them or die, so ichigo worked for them as there shipwright until he met Hiro. ichigo's perants for abusive and would force him into the water and keep him under until they thought that it had been enough and led to his phobia of drowning/having his full body underwater
specialty: building
friend: (please let him be on Hiro's crew
rank: ship wright (-_-* i dont think a shipwright has a rank but okay)
likes: flower lilies, music, sake, people who help other's, girls
dislikes: cats (allergic), medicine, doctor visits, pirates,god damn bells in the morn'in, broadway musical's
dream/goal: to be free and sail the ocean on his ship with his friends.
other:his voice is deep
i really like the story so far and Hrio is very cool. please accept my oc
()()
(*-*) - weird bunny thing
2/15/2011 c17 2Evil Wears a Suit
Interesting. I like that you've added something besides devil fruit as a way for people to have power. It will be intriguing to see how it affects the story. Keep up the good work, and I hope you can update again soon.
2Evil Wears a SuitInteresting. I like that you've added something besides devil fruit as a way for people to have power. It will be intriguing to see how it affects the story. Keep up the good work, and I hope you can update again soon.
2/15/2011 c1 39snakeboy33
Name: Kurotaka
Age: 46
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Physical Description: Kurotaka is as tall as any of the other admirals, and wears a black suit, and black pants. He has a falcon tattoo on his chest, which has its head exposed with Kurotaka's open shirt at the neck. Kurotaka has a thin face, and scar going across his forehead. He has a very short mohawk of black hair. His skin is rather pale as well.
Weapon/Devil Fruit/Special Attacks (devil fruit not required): Kurotaka possess the Ember Ember no Mi, a Logia that allows him to turn his body into ash and embers. The ash is very hot, and can cause severe burns. He can gather up embers, and form powerful attacks from them.
Personality: Kurotaka is a champion of absolute justice. He believes that all criminals, no matter what the offense, have to be punished in someway. He considers pirates to be scum, and refuses to accept the possibility of redeemable qualities in them. However, compared to Akainu, Kurotaka is far more sadistic, taking pleasure in tormenting criminals as part of their "punishment". Also, unlike Akainu, Kurotaka often smirks while fighting, and mocks his opponent's repeatedly.
History: Kurotaka was born as Nagata, on the island of Rameses in the South Blue. When Nagata was only seven years old, a band of pirates attacked his town, burned the village to the ground, and killed his parents. Nagata fled desperately, and was saved by Marines. Wanting revenge, Nagata would do everything in his power to destroy piracy, causing his mind to be corrupted by hate, and vengeance. He rose ranks quickly, becoming an admiral at age 43.
Specialty (Navigation, swordsmanship, doctor, etc.): Fighter
Friend or Foe: Foe
Rank: Admiral
Likes:
-Killing pirates
-Causing criminals pain
-Falcons
Dislikes:
-letting people go
-Criminals
Dream/Goal: To eradicate criminals, through whatever means possible.
Other: "Kurotaka" means "Black Falcon", emphasizing his falcon theme.
PLEASE USE THIS GUY!
Sorry, just really desperate.
39snakeboy33Name: Kurotaka
Age: 46
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Physical Description: Kurotaka is as tall as any of the other admirals, and wears a black suit, and black pants. He has a falcon tattoo on his chest, which has its head exposed with Kurotaka's open shirt at the neck. Kurotaka has a thin face, and scar going across his forehead. He has a very short mohawk of black hair. His skin is rather pale as well.
Weapon/Devil Fruit/Special Attacks (devil fruit not required): Kurotaka possess the Ember Ember no Mi, a Logia that allows him to turn his body into ash and embers. The ash is very hot, and can cause severe burns. He can gather up embers, and form powerful attacks from them.
Personality: Kurotaka is a champion of absolute justice. He believes that all criminals, no matter what the offense, have to be punished in someway. He considers pirates to be scum, and refuses to accept the possibility of redeemable qualities in them. However, compared to Akainu, Kurotaka is far more sadistic, taking pleasure in tormenting criminals as part of their "punishment". Also, unlike Akainu, Kurotaka often smirks while fighting, and mocks his opponent's repeatedly.
History: Kurotaka was born as Nagata, on the island of Rameses in the South Blue. When Nagata was only seven years old, a band of pirates attacked his town, burned the village to the ground, and killed his parents. Nagata fled desperately, and was saved by Marines. Wanting revenge, Nagata would do everything in his power to destroy piracy, causing his mind to be corrupted by hate, and vengeance. He rose ranks quickly, becoming an admiral at age 43.
Specialty (Navigation, swordsmanship, doctor, etc.): Fighter
Friend or Foe: Foe
Rank: Admiral
Likes:
-Killing pirates
-Causing criminals pain
-Falcons
Dislikes:
-letting people go
-Criminals
Dream/Goal: To eradicate criminals, through whatever means possible.
Other: "Kurotaka" means "Black Falcon", emphasizing his falcon theme.
PLEASE USE THIS GUY!
Sorry, just really desperate.
2/13/2011 c16 6Draco Oblivion
Lol. Maia and Zyd's reactions were funny and it's funny how whenever Hiro and Aaron have an emotional moment people are spying on them. Great story by the way keep it up
6Draco OblivionLol. Maia and Zyd's reactions were funny and it's funny how whenever Hiro and Aaron have an emotional moment people are spying on them. Great story by the way keep it up
2/13/2011 c9 Draco Oblivion
Kaj is a cool character I didn't think he'd have so much trouble with someone Hiro beat up though. O_o
Kaj is a cool character I didn't think he'd have so much trouble with someone Hiro beat up though. O_o
2/13/2011 c8 Draco Oblivion
Aah what about Johnny and everyone else from the Judgement. I thought there'd be atleast one marine from that ship joining him. :(
Aah what about Johnny and everyone else from the Judgement. I thought there'd be atleast one marine from that ship joining him. :(