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9/1/2010 c12 alex
to answer your annabeth question... i think you should make her go as a girl... you know, it adds to the drama. AND I LOVE MAYDAY PARADE! thus, i'm afraid i'm going to have to tell you that it's "When I Get Home You're So Dead" not "When I Get Time your Dead". and if you haven't heard it, listen to their song "Kids In Love" ... i loved it. UPDATE SOON!
8/29/2010 c12 TheRealWorldHurts
I think she should go as a girl and

meet Percy. You know, those type of

things where the next day she feels weird

when she sees Percy. Classic.
8/29/2010 c12 transformersnerd28
i like darian uchiha's suggestion
8/28/2010 c12 6Blackhawk1997
how does a noise drip with sarcasm? sarcasm is not a liquid therfore it can not drip
8/28/2010 c12 15Darian Uchiha
I think she should, or if she doesn't, when Percy gets her into a room alone when she's Shane, her wigs falls off or something... idk
8/27/2010 c12 7HiThereSmiley
Hmm...I don't know if this will make sense, but I think they should go as both. Switching back and forth between Shane/Brad and Annabeth/Thalia. I don't know it was just an idea.
8/27/2010 c12 1book-freak20
YES MAKE ANNABETH GO TO THE PARTY AS A GIRL! CAN YOU SAY PERCABETH?
8/27/2010 c12 18illusionsaremylife
I THINK ANNABETH AND THALIA SHOULD GO TO THE PARTY AS CHICKS! AND LIKE STUFF HAPPENS! YEAH! THAT WOULD BE GOOD! MAKE STUFF HAPPEN! ONCE AGAIN... I THINK THEY SHOULD GO AS CHICKS!
8/27/2010 c12 1Mibou
Total go as a girl but nobody tells so she can stay and they hit on her or somthin like that. I'm in school too i cant write my story so much homework

PS. Orrigenaly Ilovethaliafrompercyjackson
8/25/2010 c11 1book-freak20
AHHH! Is Annabeth gonna go the party as a girl? AHHH That would be awesome!Then there could be Percabeth definitely!
8/25/2010 c1 LittleJames
Erm...erg...your chapter 1...

NO!

I'm sorry but this story is downright atrocious! Let me just, as I usually do, list the problems and possible solutions.

1. WHY ON GOD GREEN EARTH WOULD HER PARENTS INROLL HER IN A BOYS SCHOOL? Its not possible to get a girl into a boys school, and her parents are that stupid. Give me a break. This is just setting up for epic failure. She would have said something if she already knew it was a boys school.

2. She's the Man rip-off.

3. Spelling and grammar mistakes. C'mon!

4. Listen to this:

"My Vincent ones, and my Ziggie jeans. I put the Vincent's on.

I pulled out a pair of black short socks and put them on. Now for a hard part. Shoes.

I pulled out a red Nike Air Force. Then a pair of Black shoes with a big M on each side. Then I pulled out a Nike 6.0 Braata. Then an Air Jordan Retro 9 25th Anniversary. I went with the Jordans."

Dropping name brands like that is a big writer no-no and it turns me off. Just don't do it. Annabeth isn't one for owning that many shoes anyway.

This is only chapter 1 and there are all these problems. Work on it.

I'm really intrigued to see if you improve in later chapters so I will read on.

-.-
8/24/2010 c11 Thalia
luv it especialy the justin beiber part i hate him and ur involving everybody thalia luke the stoll brothers. can't wait for more. (^_^) heh heh

-Thalia

PS. to lazy to sign in u know me
8/24/2010 c10 book-freak20
WhAT THE HECK! PLEASE UPDATE! I"M LOVIN IT! AHH!
8/24/2010 c10 lalalnd
please please rite more!
8/24/2010 c10 crAzYrAnd0mPeRs0n
*snickers* Busted! :D ^_^"
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