for Champions11/26/2023 c7 Trace Reading
Go back through this and take out all the phonetic accent stuff. Anywhere that 'th' was replaced with a 'z', change it back to 'th'.
Seriously.
Go back through this and take out all the phonetic accent stuff. Anywhere that 'th' was replaced with a 'z', change it back to 'th'.
Seriously.
11/25/2023 c5 Trace Reading
"So Mote it Be" is such a garbage fanon cliche...
Come back around and change this chapter and all others to get rid of that phrase.
"So Mote it Be" is such a garbage fanon cliche...
Come back around and change this chapter and all others to get rid of that phrase.
11/24/2023 c29 
13MustFinishProcrastinating
I love it when Hermione sticks up for Harry, and this shows how all those little annoying moments before all add up to one big verbal slug fest. I'm all for it!
13MustFinishProcrastinatingI love it when Hermione sticks up for Harry, and this shows how all those little annoying moments before all add up to one big verbal slug fest. I'm all for it!
11/16/2023 c48 1Jeremiah Malkai
I really enjoyed this story as a light read. You handled child marriage in one of the most tasteful ways you possibly could have. Dumbledore's motives were weak, but then again it's not really what the story was about. The lack of an in depth villain is maybe the only major criticism here. The story felt like a big lesson on just how important responsible, rational adults looking out for young people are. Sebastian MVP. The surprise poly at the end made me smile.
Thank you for all the hard work.
1Jeremiah MalkaiI really enjoyed this story as a light read. You handled child marriage in one of the most tasteful ways you possibly could have. Dumbledore's motives were weak, but then again it's not really what the story was about. The lack of an in depth villain is maybe the only major criticism here. The story felt like a big lesson on just how important responsible, rational adults looking out for young people are. Sebastian MVP. The surprise poly at the end made me smile.
Thank you for all the hard work.
11/8/2023 c1 chrismhinsch
Great story. Loved it. Also thank you for keeping it teen. It is a lovely story. I love stories that dont shy away from intimacy but know its not necessary to go into details.
Great story. Loved it. Also thank you for keeping it teen. It is a lovely story. I love stories that dont shy away from intimacy but know its not necessary to go into details.
11/7/2023 c48 Guest
Excellent story.. You are a gifted author..Thanks
Excellent story.. You are a gifted author..Thanks
11/7/2023 c32 Guest
Fawkes! Get us out of here! Take us to Sebastian or Amelia immediately! Thanks for an outstanding story. Action packed with excellent development of characters. I'm on the edge of my seat!
Fawkes! Get us out of here! Take us to Sebastian or Amelia immediately! Thanks for an outstanding story. Action packed with excellent development of characters. I'm on the edge of my seat!
10/26/2023 c48 bartle.john
This was one of the most trope-filled fics I've ever read.
And I enjoyed every single chapter of it.
Very satisfying read!
This was one of the most trope-filled fics I've ever read.
And I enjoyed every single chapter of it.
Very satisfying read!
10/23/2023 c27 Solstice07
I know it's fanfiction and you're allowed to do whatever you want for your story, but I hoped you'd give some explanations/background for why Dumbledore and Snape have been acting the way they are. Dumbledore I understand, to a certain extent, but since we never saw his control over Harry challenged in canon, we can only guess how he'd react if it did. Snape though is throwing me on a loop. Yes, he was a bitter man and acted like a disgusting bat towards harry, but he has never harmed him directly, and throwing sectumsempras at him is complete reversal of his character from canon.
I hope I don't sound like I'm just ranting for the sake of it, I have enjoyed this fic and just want to know reasons behind one of it's rare lackings.
I know it's fanfiction and you're allowed to do whatever you want for your story, but I hoped you'd give some explanations/background for why Dumbledore and Snape have been acting the way they are. Dumbledore I understand, to a certain extent, but since we never saw his control over Harry challenged in canon, we can only guess how he'd react if it did. Snape though is throwing me on a loop. Yes, he was a bitter man and acted like a disgusting bat towards harry, but he has never harmed him directly, and throwing sectumsempras at him is complete reversal of his character from canon.
I hope I don't sound like I'm just ranting for the sake of it, I have enjoyed this fic and just want to know reasons behind one of it's rare lackings.
10/21/2023 c48 adenoide
J'ai bien aimé la fic.
J'ai bien aimé la fic.
10/7/2023 c15 squidwardeats
I wouldn't be surprised if Ron murdered everyone harry knew and lived and harry would still call him the best friend he ever bad
I wouldn't be surprised if Ron murdered everyone harry knew and lived and harry would still call him the best friend he ever bad