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4/3 c16 Cocofant
Thanks for writing, I'm still hoping for some of that Ty Lee x Sokka goodness. Hopefully in the next book
10/28/2019 c16 5Dessel Ordo
Damn, that was a hell of a story. Incredibly well written, loved the world building, and now I'm about to eagerly leap into the sequel.
9/9/2019 c13 AJ
Hey whoa whoa whoa. What do you mean a year? There’s no way that season one of Avatar is spread over a year is there? I thought it was a few months?
3/18/2019 c16 Srw
Another good story at least a start. Starting part two tomorrow. Thank you for the story.
7/21/2017 c1 The One Who Reads Too Much
I can see no practical reason for having different languages and ethnic groups when canon AtLA did just fine without it, but at least your characters are still actually in character so far, which is more than I can say for 90% of the AtLA fics on this site.
3/28/2017 c16 Guest
LOVE THIS! It is very well written and there are few mistakes. I like the new things that make it more sophisticated, especially the languages. Really nice!
6/9/2016 c16 Jen
You have this tendency to switch names part way through. When Iroh was telling Jee to run, a few lines called him Wei, which had me confused for a bit on where this other person came from. Iroh talking to Zuko on the ship after leaving Zhao, instead of Zuko you had written Zhao again. This chapter is says Lu Ten raised his son when I know you meant Ozai. Other issues too, like when Yue grabs the spear and makes her proclamation she says Southern instead of Northern Water Tribe. So, yeah, it needs some proof reading.

I do really like the world building aspects of different languages and ethnic groups. Sometimes done smoothly and sometimes not so much. I mean the only reasons why an Azuli woman removes her blades, ok I got that, but are you really suggesting that Mai is expecting to be called to meet with her mother while her mother was attending to...other duties.
11/15/2014 c1 Guest
This Sucks
10/28/2014 c7 earfluffy
Hm. I still can't help but think 'My' when I see Mai's name spelled out. It's just weird. It should be Mei.

-earfluffy
7/25/2014 c16 12Lee Totema
Even though it followed Canon I really loved the few changes you made to it I hope I didn't annoy with my constant reviewing but this story deserved more especially your avatar of victory
7/25/2014 c15 Lee Totema
And now you will pay for your arrogance, pride being your downfall
7/25/2014 c14 Lee Totema
Oh Zuko why won't you see the truth
7/25/2014 c13 Lee Totema
I think the reason why they didn't attack in the first place is because they said they have their honor still, i love the whole play with the chi that is awesome
7/25/2014 c12 Lee Totema
Hanh is a dick I always thought when Zhao pushed him over the edge he just drowned even worse when he's flaunting that he already did Yue at least I think he did it just seemed that way correct me it's I'm wrong
7/25/2014 c11 Lee Totema
I got confused when I saw that iroh was talking to Zhao again until I realized you meant zuko and he really is a cool old man I wish I had a grandpa like him
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