5/9/2011 c4 SanoXAshiya lover
So far this seems like it could be a good story. When I read that you were having Sasuke dance I thought 'Huh...that's different.' What REALLY scared me was that I could picture it. I think it might have been interesting if you hadn't made the couples doing the same thing, and then added some twist, but it's your story and like I said, it does seem to be good. I like that you had Sakura be a total butch to Sasuke. Too many people are afraid to do that becuase it's 'out of character'. I don't think the whole 'Apparently they liked to tease people in the academy' Seems very professionaly. I think Naruto's second song fit his situation perfectly. But, and this is a big BUT, I do NOT like his reasoning. Being a guitar player myself, I find his reasoning all wrong. Music, heck, even just following your dream, is NOT about proving yourself to others. The only person you have to prove anything to is yourself. If your trying to 'stay in character' I can see where you'd get that from, because Naruto was always saying that he'd prove himself by being hokage. Heres the thing: 1.That was still terrible reasoning. 2.This is in in an alternate universe which means his character will most likly be different. So, techincally he can be 'out of character' but still be 'in character' for the story, you get what I'm saying? 4. He's...what 15 16? In shippuden, he reasoning for wanting to be Hokage changed. He grew up and realized how wrong his reasoning is. So actually, he's still 'out of character'. I don't like how Naruto repeats himself. That's just a personal pet peeve, but I think he can get the point across with out repeating himself, I have faith in Naruto. Hinata...I'm slightly confused. She says she doesn't want others to control her life, but she told the seniors and judges what they wanted to hear. If she had enough confidence, determination and self-esteem to walk out on her family and come to the academy, then she should be in the state of mind where she'll tell them flat out why she's there and etc. This is not meant to be a flame, and I'm sorry if you take it as one. That just means you shouldn't beo n here. If you don't have enough confidence in your writing to take some critizism then you shouldn't release it to the public. If you actually read it all the way through before choosing to ignore this, good for you. I hope you heed my advise because I can see this going far, but if you fix it up, it could crash.

Sincerly,

SanoXAshiya Lover

P.S. If your editers thought you were a bother, they wouldn't help you. Have a little more self confidence! :)

4/22/2011 c4 2Ashurei-Heika
alright all in all i liked it alot though there was no Karin bashing like you said haha. I will be waiting for an update.

~waterkonoichi13

4/19/2011 c4 2bakugoslittlewhore
W00T!

4/19/2011 c4 atrociously beautiful
im pretty fuckinqq kickass yo.

your welcome bitch (:

I loved it still event hough i read it like 3456,00000 times x)

update it soon.

~nicole

9/13/2010 c3 WOW
okay so wow. this is so cliche. like it is sickening to read. but i can't stop reading it. maybe i am hoping that some incredible twist will come along.

i dont know.

don't disappoint. mkay?

9/10/2010 c3 Don't know
Wow I'm shocked you actually updated! Good for you.

9/10/2010 c3 2Mi3staR
I decide I'll make my review more serious this time round since were getting to the main plot of the story, first of all, with Naruto.

Note: I ditch the singing but i'm guessing it was good. I like the way how you used Naruto in the story you fairly made him as your own character so I liked him throughout the whole chapter.

Though my main worries are on sakura and Sasuke, i'm not quiet happy the fact that they hate each other it's like other stories they hate each other the hate each other, they hate each other something goes wrong. They like each other, thats how the story often goes and from there, it's hard to keep sakura in good control throughout the whole story because either she keeps herself away from him, she try to not fall in love with him which is most likely impossible in this story, and so on so on, since she dislike him. But in the actually Anime and manga, she was completely in love with him from the start but since she was a kid back then I'll look from it from the other way. I think I'll like her way better if she wasn't the type to start fighting with him, all the damn time. And maybe not hate him that is way too OOC, well it's getting to the point where you completely changed sakura's character and it's not halfway through the story. :/

Sasuke was okay, he kept more into his character then sakura but you forgot one thing, "your annoying." and then sakura would get all piss and Blah Blah Blah. I was seriously waiting for him to say that but no! I was like no! It's just doesn't work that way. But overall good job with Sasuke. (Though i'm not sure weather he did hate sakura from the start.)

Moving on Hinata, so proud so proud. Well that what I hot to pay since you wanted a more serious review Lol xD

But overall, nice chapter I can't wait to see what tsunade has in store for them :3