
8/4/2010 c1
5totaltheTERRIER
I like this! It's more original and descriptive that I would have thought from the summary...maybe spice that up a bit? And the grammar is mostly okay, just some mixing up of "is" and "are". I would say make it multi-chaptered!

I like this! It's more original and descriptive that I would have thought from the summary...maybe spice that up a bit? And the grammar is mostly okay, just some mixing up of "is" and "are". I would say make it multi-chaptered!
8/4/2010 c1
3TheWritingOwl
i think you should continue with this story! Make it multichaptered. It's really good!

i think you should continue with this story! Make it multichaptered. It's really good!
8/4/2010 c1 SuzyQ
Idk, the Sakura pairing kind of kills the story for me. I'd have rather you would have gone with Hinata as Naruto's pairing.
Idk, the Sakura pairing kind of kills the story for me. I'd have rather you would have gone with Hinata as Naruto's pairing.