
3/14/2022 c8 Lucifer-Satani
"Simple as forming thunder clouds to creating monsoons..." WTF!
OP!
Also Awesome!
"Simple as forming thunder clouds to creating monsoons..." WTF!
OP!
Also Awesome!
2/28/2022 c9 Conquerer of the void
I can help u understand how jinton works but I wouldn't recommend it since it uses the 2 elements naruto doesn't naturally have thus I do not think it would make much sense for him to have it
I can help u understand how jinton works but I wouldn't recommend it since it uses the 2 elements naruto doesn't naturally have thus I do not think it would make much sense for him to have it
2/21/2022 c1
3Areyem Meyera
How was Naruto different from the other guys that asked Yugito out? Is it because he hit on her the very first second he saw her, asked her out the same day and made advances? Well then, that’s quite the way of being unique. And he keeps saying Jiariya is perverted. At least Jiraiya is honest about it. But this Naruto of yours is a hypocrite.

How was Naruto different from the other guys that asked Yugito out? Is it because he hit on her the very first second he saw her, asked her out the same day and made advances? Well then, that’s quite the way of being unique. And he keeps saying Jiariya is perverted. At least Jiraiya is honest about it. But this Naruto of yours is a hypocrite.
2/8/2022 c9 maskaggarwal
Bro please write a new story. Your stories they are amazing i really love each and everyone of them they are really awesome. So please write a new book i would really love to read a new book of yours. or atleast update your stories. I just finished all of your stories really like them by heart
Bro please write a new story. Your stories they are amazing i really love each and everyone of them they are really awesome. So please write a new book i would really love to read a new book of yours. or atleast update your stories. I just finished all of your stories really like them by heart
2/6/2022 c8 leonardmosca08
Engulfed by silence I just wanted to give some construction feedback to what you wrote in a early note it was kind of hypocritical as I noticed you said that Hinata hyuga would never really allowed to marry outside clan cuz she's the future leader of that particular clan unless her father disowned her or disralled her acknowledge because they place a birdcage steel upon her head should she marry outside the said clan because they practice inbreeding and because she is the future leader as I said but then in another note you made reference to pairing her off with kiba isn't that kind of hypocritical I just want to point out it's called constructive feedback take it how you see it and you a great writer I just want to point out inconsistencies and your notes and if you're going to have it one way and point out the inconsistency why she would never allow the married Naruto she would never allowed to be married to kiba either for the same reason I hope you're safe and well in this crazy and turbulent time and stay safe and thank you again
Engulfed by silence I just wanted to give some construction feedback to what you wrote in a early note it was kind of hypocritical as I noticed you said that Hinata hyuga would never really allowed to marry outside clan cuz she's the future leader of that particular clan unless her father disowned her or disralled her acknowledge because they place a birdcage steel upon her head should she marry outside the said clan because they practice inbreeding and because she is the future leader as I said but then in another note you made reference to pairing her off with kiba isn't that kind of hypocritical I just want to point out it's called constructive feedback take it how you see it and you a great writer I just want to point out inconsistencies and your notes and if you're going to have it one way and point out the inconsistency why she would never allow the married Naruto she would never allowed to be married to kiba either for the same reason I hope you're safe and well in this crazy and turbulent time and stay safe and thank you again
2/4/2022 c4
1Donateio
I don't know if you're doing it on purpose or not, but it's kinda irritating to see the tsuchikage's name spelled as "Lnoki" multiple times. I haven't read more the beginning of the chapter and I still haven't seen his name being spelled correctly once. I don't know about you, but when I write something, even if it's on , I usually try to make sure I spelled everything correctly, especially names.
The story is good, but you should really consider getting a beta reader.

I don't know if you're doing it on purpose or not, but it's kinda irritating to see the tsuchikage's name spelled as "Lnoki" multiple times. I haven't read more the beginning of the chapter and I still haven't seen his name being spelled correctly once. I don't know about you, but when I write something, even if it's on , I usually try to make sure I spelled everything correctly, especially names.
The story is good, but you should really consider getting a beta reader.
2/3/2022 c1 Donateio
I don't know where you get your translations, but a lot of them are either spelled wrong, or translated wrong. For example, Tsuki no kuni was translated into land of fangs. Tsuki is a verb and it means "to thrust". It's most commonly used in association with martial arts. If you want to know the Japanese word for fang, it's kiba.
Other than that, I have no qualms with the story other than minor words missing or spelling errors. Maybe you should consider getting a beta since a lot of people tend to not bother with fics that have too many spelling errors. There aren't really that many but it's just food for thought. The story so far is really great and it's only the first chapter.
I don't know where you get your translations, but a lot of them are either spelled wrong, or translated wrong. For example, Tsuki no kuni was translated into land of fangs. Tsuki is a verb and it means "to thrust". It's most commonly used in association with martial arts. If you want to know the Japanese word for fang, it's kiba.
Other than that, I have no qualms with the story other than minor words missing or spelling errors. Maybe you should consider getting a beta since a lot of people tend to not bother with fics that have too many spelling errors. There aren't really that many but it's just food for thought. The story so far is really great and it's only the first chapter.
1/21/2022 c17
13Write Your Wrongs
I appreciate the page breaks, it makes it easier to skip the Sasuke parts.

I appreciate the page breaks, it makes it easier to skip the Sasuke parts.
1/21/2022 c16 Write Your Wrongs
I don’t know how many times I’ve read this story but the Yugao/Naruto interaction still makes me tear up.
I don’t know how many times I’ve read this story but the Yugao/Naruto interaction still makes me tear up.
1/19/2022 c13 Guest
nice
nice
1/14/2022 c6 Guest
Did you edit out the lemons?
Did you edit out the lemons?
1/15/2022 c25 Calm Dragons
I think it would have been better to skip the whole battle and for Naruto to arrive after the dispelling of one of his clone in his spy network and see the destruction than to see the individual battle.
I think it would have been better to skip the whole battle and for Naruto to arrive after the dispelling of one of his clone in his spy network and see the destruction than to see the individual battle.