
2/28/2024 c5 Sumitv007
naruto looks like a sick pervert who just likes older girls, 15 year old boy, have had sex before age of 14 and multiple times after that
one girlfriend in 30s and every else in late 20s
naruto looks like a sick pervert who just likes older girls, 15 year old boy, have had sex before age of 14 and multiple times after that
one girlfriend in 30s and every else in late 20s
2/28/2024 c5 Sumitv007
this is shit, soft porn, bro just forcing things
i can't even imagine that paper thing named konan normal. we saw in canon that people were happy in rain village from pain and konan. its nothing like what i was hoping
i thought i will be seeing naruto sasuke fight where naruto will be just as good and orochimaru and sasuke will have to flee.
naruto showing off to sakura and konoha 11 admitting naruto gotten much stronger and better personality. but since last 5 chapters all i am seeing is girls sex , girlfriend, restaurantes dates etc.
this is shit, soft porn, bro just forcing things
i can't even imagine that paper thing named konan normal. we saw in canon that people were happy in rain village from pain and konan. its nothing like what i was hoping
i thought i will be seeing naruto sasuke fight where naruto will be just as good and orochimaru and sasuke will have to flee.
naruto showing off to sakura and konoha 11 admitting naruto gotten much stronger and better personality. but since last 5 chapters all i am seeing is girls sex , girlfriend, restaurantes dates etc.
2/26/2024 c21
18Luciendar
Sorry, but this has been the worst chapter so far. Jiraiya did a lot better against Pein in cannon when fighting by his damn self. And Konan is no push over. Where were all her exploding tags?
The worst of all is how pitiful u made sage mode look. Sage mode stomped all over Pein. Pein's paths could never absorb sage chakra. The machine body couldn't harm Naruto in sage mode at all, it was crushed in one hit.
Lastly, Naruto's fight with "Madara." You're making him too strong to suit your needs. He has been puppeting people and not really fighting. You're acting like Naruto is Minato's equal or better, but Minato handled Tobi pretty easily. I doubt he's gotten much stronger since he's spent all his time playing puppeteer or village idiot.

Sorry, but this has been the worst chapter so far. Jiraiya did a lot better against Pein in cannon when fighting by his damn self. And Konan is no push over. Where were all her exploding tags?
The worst of all is how pitiful u made sage mode look. Sage mode stomped all over Pein. Pein's paths could never absorb sage chakra. The machine body couldn't harm Naruto in sage mode at all, it was crushed in one hit.
Lastly, Naruto's fight with "Madara." You're making him too strong to suit your needs. He has been puppeting people and not really fighting. You're acting like Naruto is Minato's equal or better, but Minato handled Tobi pretty easily. I doubt he's gotten much stronger since he's spent all his time playing puppeteer or village idiot.
2/25/2024 c15 Luciendar
Ya know, the only problem I have with the ages is with Yugao. It's all Fantasy fulfillment minded nonsense. So I don't really care most of the time. I'm not here to call anyone a pervert or judge them.
That said, my issue with Yugao not being much older than him is that it doesn't track with her ANBU service. I think Naruto did he hasn't seen her since he was six in this chapter. I don't recall what age you said she was but I don't think it was even ten years older than him. And he not even being sixteen, yet being ANBU trusted to watch Naruto doesn't make any sense to me. No offense.
Ya know, the only problem I have with the ages is with Yugao. It's all Fantasy fulfillment minded nonsense. So I don't really care most of the time. I'm not here to call anyone a pervert or judge them.
That said, my issue with Yugao not being much older than him is that it doesn't track with her ANBU service. I think Naruto did he hasn't seen her since he was six in this chapter. I don't recall what age you said she was but I don't think it was even ten years older than him. And he not even being sixteen, yet being ANBU trusted to watch Naruto doesn't make any sense to me. No offense.
2/25/2024 c12 Luciendar
Dear God, please learn how to spell massage. Most of your misspelling doesn't bother me, but you spell it wrong every time. You write, "message," instead of, "massage."
On a side note. I'm a massage therapist. Hopefully that explains why it's grating to me. And the fact that you used the word like a dozen times in quick succession... all spelled wrong.
Dear God, please learn how to spell massage. Most of your misspelling doesn't bother me, but you spell it wrong every time. You write, "message," instead of, "massage."
On a side note. I'm a massage therapist. Hopefully that explains why it's grating to me. And the fact that you used the word like a dozen times in quick succession... all spelled wrong.
2/23/2024 c4 8
learn to write better don't fill everything with girls and perverts, funny scenes are not even funny, just too much unrealistic, why a princess of such a caliber will fuck with a random actor, or even work in a porn. doesn't make any sense unless you are a porn director on porn hub. her relation with naruto is not surprising as it can happen but development there was very bad, porn movie, fuck, random actor and she accepted , for fuck sake write good story not porn.
while imagining this in naruto world it should at least feel slightly real
learn to write better don't fill everything with girls and perverts, funny scenes are not even funny, just too much unrealistic, why a princess of such a caliber will fuck with a random actor, or even work in a porn. doesn't make any sense unless you are a porn director on porn hub. her relation with naruto is not surprising as it can happen but development there was very bad, porn movie, fuck, random actor and she accepted , for fuck sake write good story not porn.
while imagining this in naruto world it should at least feel slightly real
2/23/2024 c5 lol
you can make unrealistic relations but not which is actually possible.
Naruto always cared for hinata, hinata loved the weakest and married the strongest always loved him whatever the letdown. naruto and hinata is bad combination but
naruto and may is good where there is clearly 20 year difference even with yugao and yugito there is nearly 15 year difference seems you love older women.
honestly couple only looks good when age difference and experience difference isn't much , only few exceptions.
ino, temmari, princess shion, hinata, sakura, ten ten, ayame, hanabi there are so many choices from or near his age group.
your only good choice is princess kyukie
you can make unrealistic relations but not which is actually possible.
Naruto always cared for hinata, hinata loved the weakest and married the strongest always loved him whatever the letdown. naruto and hinata is bad combination but
naruto and may is good where there is clearly 20 year difference even with yugao and yugito there is nearly 15 year difference seems you love older women.
honestly couple only looks good when age difference and experience difference isn't much , only few exceptions.
ino, temmari, princess shion, hinata, sakura, ten ten, ayame, hanabi there are so many choices from or near his age group.
your only good choice is princess kyukie
2/14/2024 c6 Guest
Not just all the perverts out there at but super perverts oh wait that was jiraiya of Naruto I get confused easily
Not just all the perverts out there at but super perverts oh wait that was jiraiya of Naruto I get confused easily
11/20/2023 c4 Kalavash
Not sure if this is/was intentional, but every time you wrote the Tsuchikage's name you put "Lnoki" instead of "Onoki"
Not sure if this is/was intentional, but every time you wrote the Tsuchikage's name you put "Lnoki" instead of "Onoki"
11/16/2023 c28 Guest
This story started out pretty well then kind of went down the shitter. Narto not using moves that would benefit in a fight. Him not using flash step with flying thunder god to improve the speed even more. Him not make other elemental rasegans. Him not even trying to get sage training in the final six months of his training trip. Him not using the spying seals after they were first brought up. Him not sharing the information that konan gave him with the four kage he was on a first name basis at a minimum with. The alliance should have been brought up at chunnin exam. Like everyone in this story had way more information than in cannon, but treated a terrorist group that was hunting down bijuu like it wasn't a big deal. Like the whole Nartuo saves Ero-sensei so something terrible has to happen trope just ugh... I wish people would stop doing this. Now I say all this, but I really enjoyed the first 24 chapters of this fic. It's unfortunate that after this you can tell the author lost interest in this fic.
This story started out pretty well then kind of went down the shitter. Narto not using moves that would benefit in a fight. Him not using flash step with flying thunder god to improve the speed even more. Him not make other elemental rasegans. Him not even trying to get sage training in the final six months of his training trip. Him not using the spying seals after they were first brought up. Him not sharing the information that konan gave him with the four kage he was on a first name basis at a minimum with. The alliance should have been brought up at chunnin exam. Like everyone in this story had way more information than in cannon, but treated a terrorist group that was hunting down bijuu like it wasn't a big deal. Like the whole Nartuo saves Ero-sensei so something terrible has to happen trope just ugh... I wish people would stop doing this. Now I say all this, but I really enjoyed the first 24 chapters of this fic. It's unfortunate that after this you can tell the author lost interest in this fic.